Birdbath
Birds gather to drink, bathe and gossip.43 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
Linda, This is a very cute and very well written haiku about the birds, their bath and chat. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
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Linda, This is a very cute and very well written haiku about the birds, their bath and chat. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
Comment from DeboraDyess
Oh, I love this! The term 'chat/bath' is perfect! Your syllable count is right, your punctuation is correct for a haiku and your aha moment is visual and brings a smile.
I'm just learning all this stuff (I'm not a poet) so I'm trying to reinforce it in my own brain with reviews. lol. Thank you for giving me such an exceptional example.
Blessings and best,
Deb
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Oh, I love this! The term 'chat/bath' is perfect! Your syllable count is right, your punctuation is correct for a haiku and your aha moment is visual and brings a smile.
I'm just learning all this stuff (I'm not a poet) so I'm trying to reinforce it in my own brain with reviews. lol. Thank you for giving me such an exceptional example.
Blessings and best,
Deb
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
Comment from GeraldShuler
Your poem shows what a great observer of nature you are. You don't just see the birds, but you see a deeper comparison to life. I really appreciate your insight.
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Your poem shows what a great observer of nature you are. You don't just see the birds, but you see a deeper comparison to life. I really appreciate your insight.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That's exactly how it looks, isn't it? I'd love to be able to understand them.
This is the perfect wording for the picture and a winner for the Haiku contest. Very well done, Linda, and good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra
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That's exactly how it looks, isn't it? I'd love to be able to understand them.
This is the perfect wording for the picture and a winner for the Haiku contest. Very well done, Linda, and good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
How true. I'll never forget the first time I saw a couple of birds, sparrows I believe, in our birdbath. Splashing and fluttering all over the place. I think they were actually bathing and socializing at the same time.
Nice reminder of a natural entertainment.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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How true. I'll never forget the first time I saw a couple of birds, sparrows I believe, in our birdbath. Splashing and fluttering all over the place. I think they were actually bathing and socializing at the same time.
Nice reminder of a natural entertainment.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Gary. Linda
Comment from evilynne
Great place, but it's for the birds! I bet they do gossip while at the birdie spa. Your little poem is cute, well written and fits the required format. Best of luck in the contest! Evi
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Great place, but it's for the birds! I bet they do gossip while at the birdie spa. Your little poem is cute, well written and fits the required format. Best of luck in the contest! Evi
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you, evilynne. Linda
Comment from tfawcus
Sounds like a hen party to me! It's fascinating to watch the behaviour of birds in the garden. I refer to birds of the feathered kind, of course.
Your final line looks at the natural behaviour of birds from a different perspective, which is part of the art of the haiku. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Sounds like a hen party to me! It's fascinating to watch the behaviour of birds in the garden. I refer to birds of the feathered kind, of course.
Your final line looks at the natural behaviour of birds from a different perspective, which is part of the art of the haiku. Nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Tony. Linda
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Livelylinda,
It's a nice piece of poetry in the form of 'Haiku' meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, and TRANSPARENTLY depicting its theme.
You have beautifully likened a group of birds to a women's club.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Hello Livelylinda,
It's a nice piece of poetry in the form of 'Haiku' meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, and TRANSPARENTLY depicting its theme.
You have beautifully likened a group of birds to a women's club.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thank you, RPSaxena. Linda
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Linda, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from jake cosmos aller
like linking the bird bath to a woman's club where woman gather around taking a bath and chatting and gossiping. Nicely done good images like the last line best
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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like linking the bird bath to a woman's club where woman gather around taking a bath and chatting and gossiping. Nicely done good images like the last line best
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Jake. Linda
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A delightful and creative read. I love the idea of a "women's club" At least it is more upscale than using chickens for a "hen party!"
Very clever.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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A delightful and creative read. I love the idea of a "women's club" At least it is more upscale than using chickens for a "hen party!"
Very clever.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Thanks for reading and commenting, Mary. Linda
