Go Away Please
An unwelcome guest50 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Bait the hook. Throw it in the water. Twitch it occasional and reel them in. That summarizes what I read in this humorous story. I never expected the ending as you wrote. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Bait the hook. Throw it in the water. Twitch it occasional and reel them in. That summarizes what I read in this humorous story. I never expected the ending as you wrote. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked this silly story. It popped into my mind when I read the writing prompt. Hugs.
Comment from evilynne
That was a wonderful suspenseful, well written tale. I did suspect that the intruder was of the four-legged variety. We have visiting skunks in our apartment complex, thankfully not indoors so far! Your writing certainly did deserve its win! Evi
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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That was a wonderful suspenseful, well written tale. I did suspect that the intruder was of the four-legged variety. We have visiting skunks in our apartment complex, thankfully not indoors so far! Your writing certainly did deserve its win! Evi
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Thank you, and thanks for the six stars. I do appreciate them. I love to write funny stories with surprise endings. Hugs
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Go Away Please, had me going for a second and you kept that up to the very last line. I began wondering who "Us" was, as hubby was still doing the Z thing. The cats were the rest of the potential sufferers.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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This story, Go Away Please, had me going for a second and you kept that up to the very last line. I began wondering who "Us" was, as hubby was still doing the Z thing. The cats were the rest of the potential sufferers.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Thank you. Yep, the cats and human were (us) This is fiction but I suppose it could happen. Hugs
Comment from strandregs
The unexpected, expected climax, without the knife is always pleasing.
If it would have been a unicorn we would be in fantasy land without a paddle.
I do fancy white water rafting, so exciting.
So you have it the look, and it skulked away.
The most believable part of the story is:
The grumpy husband. :-))Z.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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The unexpected, expected climax, without the knife is always pleasing.
If it would have been a unicorn we would be in fantasy land without a paddle.
I do fancy white water rafting, so exciting.
So you have it the look, and it skulked away.
The most believable part of the story is:
The grumpy husband. :-))Z.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Thank you. Well, it is fiction, but I know a person who really did have a skunk in their house. How did you do two reviews on this story? Hugs
Comment from Goodadvicechan
The plot is good I like the beginning to wake the husbAnd up and then ends to find out what happens
The writing is good, keep it up and thanks for sharing.
I enjoy the story
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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The plot is good I like the beginning to wake the husbAnd up and then ends to find out what happens
The writing is good, keep it up and thanks for sharing.
I enjoy the story
Comment Written 11-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Hugs
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your story. It moved along nicely and the house break plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development. I like how you made us think there's a human thief in the house but it's a racoon lol
Well done, my friend. Blessed be.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." -- Atticus
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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I enjoyed reading your story. It moved along nicely and the house break plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development. I like how you made us think there's a human thief in the house but it's a racoon lol
Well done, my friend. Blessed be.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." -- Atticus
Comment Written 11-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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Thank you. A review from you is much appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow, you had me going from the moment I read the wife was going to take care of it herself I knew there was trouble. But I had no idea as I read further the intruder was going to be a skunk! You had me on the edge of my seat! A thriller and intrigue, this story had it all! I love the picture drawn by Seshadri, he was a friend of mine when he wrote for FS. I assumed it was the cats then a man but never a skunk.
Thanks for the thrills.
Jesse
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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Wow, you had me going from the moment I read the wife was going to take care of it herself I knew there was trouble. But I had no idea as I read further the intruder was going to be a skunk! You had me on the edge of my seat! A thriller and intrigue, this story had it all! I love the picture drawn by Seshadri, he was a friend of mine when he wrote for FS. I assumed it was the cats then a man but never a skunk.
Thanks for the thrills.
Jesse
Comment Written 11-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I love to write funny stuff with surprise endings. Hugs
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
This is a cute one. Not until the last sentence did I ever expect there to be a skunk in the house.
A couple of suggestions;
Para 5, sentence 2: add comma after "kitchen"
Para 5, 3rd sentence: "it s" should be "it's"
The next to the last paragraph had me puzzled until I finished the whole thing. "too many witnesses" and "all of us" I was thinking you had some very intelligent cats there for awhile.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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This is a cute one. Not until the last sentence did I ever expect there to be a skunk in the house.
A couple of suggestions;
Para 5, sentence 2: add comma after "kitchen"
Para 5, 3rd sentence: "it s" should be "it's"
The next to the last paragraph had me puzzled until I finished the whole thing. "too many witnesses" and "all of us" I was thinking you had some very intelligent cats there for awhile.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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Thank you for catching my errors. It was actually supposed to read (it is) I edited and corrected the mistake. Thanks again. Hugs
Comment from C.A.Currie
You got me! I was genuinely surprised to discover your unwanted guest was actually a skunk. Please, if he should return and you get the chance, could you please send him my way! I know how crazy it sounds, so please don't judge - but I happen to LOVE the smell of skunk! (They used to use it to make the world's best perfumes - I don't know that they still do, but for me - I would love it! )
Thanks for sharing!
Sunshine, Rainbows, and Unicorns from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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You got me! I was genuinely surprised to discover your unwanted guest was actually a skunk. Please, if he should return and you get the chance, could you please send him my way! I know how crazy it sounds, so please don't judge - but I happen to LOVE the smell of skunk! (They used to use it to make the world's best perfumes - I don't know that they still do, but for me - I would love it! )
Thanks for sharing!
Sunshine, Rainbows, and Unicorns from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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Thank you. Well, I never heard of anyone who likes the smell of skunk. It's a new one for me. I guess one is never to old to learn something new. Hugs
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Hey prettybluebirds! I am in pretty good company when it comes to liking the smell of skunk. Check out # 25 of Trace Adkin's interview. https://www.usmagazine.com/celebrity-news/news/trace-adkins-25-things-you-dont-know-about-me/
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is well done and humorous. I love in your story that YOU had to go downstairs instead of your husband. It all sounds about right. Excellent job on this. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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This is well done and humorous. I love in your story that YOU had to go downstairs instead of your husband. It all sounds about right. Excellent job on this. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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Thank you. This is fiction so it never happened. If it did happen to me I would have insisted my husband go check. Hugs.