Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Choosing the best memories helps us to gloss over the poor ones and we feel less lonely and more positive about life even we have empty beds, a poignant and romantic write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022

Thank you very much Dolly!

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

I floated on a feeling reading this, drifting on the thermals of your wistful thoughts, both of reality and a chosen dream - word weaves wrought in the weft of written beauty.

I loved this - thank you for sharing.

Mike

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022

You honor me. Thank you.

Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

I love this metaphor and parallel: "Crumpled dawn" Also this makes a good example of personification & animation. This is a genius image: "I am empty Even of loneliness" Nice hopefulness at the end. Well done.

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 Comment Written 07-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022

Thanks very much, Liz!

Comment from T B Botts

Excellent

Hello Beck,
What a tragic poem, to be empty even of loneliness, how very sad. You've written this poem as if you know what it's like to awaken unloved, I hope that isn't the case. Well done gal. Very well written.
Have a blessed day.
Tom

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 Comment Written 07-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022

Thanks, Tom. I've had moments but not like this...

reply by T B Botts on 07-Jun-2022

Ah, I'm so glad to hear that. You've done a fine job of writing something that you can only imagine, Well done.