Something Wanting
Love isn't there in the morning14 total reviews
Comment from Marienkiefer
Congratulations on your winning poem! I am in good company, a pleasure to share this honour.
A well designed work, in stylish Bjork. Wishing you continued success in your writing creations.
All the bestt.ð???
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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Congratulations on your winning poem! I am in good company, a pleasure to share this honour.
A well designed work, in stylish Bjork. Wishing you continued success in your writing creations.
All the bestt.ð???
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022
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Thank you and I'm glad you won, too!
Comment from C.A.Currie
Such colorful, creative and poignant pictures painted in this poem! I can't pick a favorite line or tanza because I love them all!
Thanks so much for sharing!
And thanks again for doing it so well!
Hugs and Teddy Bears from my heart to yours!
~ Christine ~
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Such colorful, creative and poignant pictures painted in this poem! I can't pick a favorite line or tanza because I love them all!
Thanks so much for sharing!
And thanks again for doing it so well!
Hugs and Teddy Bears from my heart to yours!
~ Christine ~
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much!
Comment from royowen
I like this poem. I love the fact that our minds are our own to be able to think about what we want to think about, to dream whatever dreams we choose, to blot out the so-called realities we face at the momen. A beautifully written entry in this contest, good luck, Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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I like this poem. I love the fact that our minds are our own to be able to think about what we want to think about, to dream whatever dreams we choose, to blot out the so-called realities we face at the momen. A beautifully written entry in this contest, good luck, Roy
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much!
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Most welcome
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Easily read, flows well, maintains theme and keeps my interest throughout. I read on to discover what happened in the night. What was the "Only the best" and how did it compare to "The ugliness". I can only envision what I must and what your words force me to. I think I understand.
Nice thought-provoking verse.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Easily read, flows well, maintains theme and keeps my interest throughout. I read on to discover what happened in the night. What was the "Only the best" and how did it compare to "The ugliness". I can only envision what I must and what your words force me to. I think I understand.
Nice thought-provoking verse.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you Gary!
Comment from Cecilia Lynne1
You have used your gift to compose a very well deserved rating. You have freely expressed your thoughts keeping in line with the contest request. I love your chosen art to support your writing. It poetically expresses feeling very eloquently.
Your words express that later you will chose the best to remember, as you await change of the unpleasant experience. I embrace the latter statement because so often as humans we chose to wallop in self pity too long when we can chose to look for ways to move on a lot quicker. Your choice of art is excellent and adds positively to your presentation. Well done! All the best to you as you share your talent.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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You have used your gift to compose a very well deserved rating. You have freely expressed your thoughts keeping in line with the contest request. I love your chosen art to support your writing. It poetically expresses feeling very eloquently.
Your words express that later you will chose the best to remember, as you await change of the unpleasant experience. I embrace the latter statement because so often as humans we chose to wallop in self pity too long when we can chose to look for ways to move on a lot quicker. Your choice of art is excellent and adds positively to your presentation. Well done! All the best to you as you share your talent.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for your kind words and that extra star! Both mean a lot to me.
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You are welcome
Comment from victor 66
Perception of self means a great deal. I often wonder why people feel guilt for things that they need and desire, as long as it hurts no one else, I can't see a problem. But, to each his own. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Perception of self means a great deal. I often wonder why people feel guilt for things that they need and desire, as long as it hurts no one else, I can't see a problem. But, to each his own. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
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You?re welcome.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are wild, interesting, thought provoking and
creative. I pondered on the theme of this poem and am still thinking
about it. The author's words flow and connect well. The artwork is
eccentric and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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The author's words are wild, interesting, thought provoking and
creative. I pondered on the theme of this poem and am still thinking
about it. The author's words flow and connect well. The artwork is
eccentric and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Whitewave
Beck,
A clever post where your words leave a heavy, gloomy feeling of something wanting. When we tend to stay, almost enjoy, this place of wanting, we are coming from a place of lack and victim-hood. By the end of your verse, you have made the difficult but necessary change, choosing only the best to remember and letting the ugliness fade.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Beck,
A clever post where your words leave a heavy, gloomy feeling of something wanting. When we tend to stay, almost enjoy, this place of wanting, we are coming from a place of lack and victim-hood. By the end of your verse, you have made the difficult but necessary change, choosing only the best to remember and letting the ugliness fade.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
You did a great job with the prompt, what a fun one!
This is well written, vivid, colorful and emotional. You crafted your carefully chosen words very well. The rhymes used are without force and crate a pace that flows naturally. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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You did a great job with the prompt, what a fun one!
This is well written, vivid, colorful and emotional. You crafted your carefully chosen words very well. The rhymes used are without force and crate a pace that flows naturally. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from LisaMay
'Something Wanting' is a terrific title, setting the scene for lacking something while desiring it. The poem's pared-down style suits the subject, cutting to the bone of loneliness with sharp imagery.
The last stanza seems to hint at drug use (crystal bubbles) with the drug helping to fade the loneliness.
When you see stars you can make wishes. Hold on to those good memories - make your golden eyes smile again - don't fall into the drowning pond of those ever widening circles. Get out of your bedroom and live again.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
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'Something Wanting' is a terrific title, setting the scene for lacking something while desiring it. The poem's pared-down style suits the subject, cutting to the bone of loneliness with sharp imagery.
The last stanza seems to hint at drug use (crystal bubbles) with the drug helping to fade the loneliness.
When you see stars you can make wishes. Hold on to those good memories - make your golden eyes smile again - don't fall into the drowning pond of those ever widening circles. Get out of your bedroom and live again.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
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Smile. I am a pretty happy elder who happens to have a vivid imagination. Thank you for your kind words.
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Good to hear - one never knows how autobiographical poems are when 'I' is used.
I often write in first person myself, sometimes as a man, or someone with 'issues', or a broken heart, or an evil person, but I also am 'a pretty happy elder who happens to have a vivid imagination'.
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It?s good to be old. Sure beats the alternative! Good writing ahead for us both!
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Cheers to that!
