Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The distance between their homes is certainly a problem, especially as she has her own business and so does he. Long distance romances aren't usually all that successful. I'm interested in how you are going to solve this problem. One little problem--"I don't(.)"
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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The distance between their homes is certainly a problem, especially as she has her own business and so does he. Long distance romances aren't usually all that successful. I'm interested in how you are going to solve this problem. One little problem--"I don't(.)"
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I will fix my error.
Comment from nomi338
I totally agree, when it is right, there are signals to indicate this is the right one. When I was younger, I was involved with so many women that my signals often confused sexual attraction with real desire for a committed relationship. In retrospect, I realize now that the relationship I have with my wife would has lasted far longer than would have been the case with any of the other women I dated in the past.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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I totally agree, when it is right, there are signals to indicate this is the right one. When I was younger, I was involved with so many women that my signals often confused sexual attraction with real desire for a committed relationship. In retrospect, I realize now that the relationship I have with my wife would has lasted far longer than would have been the case with any of the other women I dated in the past.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the understanding.
Comment from Jay Squires
"If our relationship continues to grow, we'll have to work out a compromise like we did with the pizza." Cordero motioned for Rico to bring the pizza. [This is a good analogy. Now I understand why you took extra time over their pizza choices.]
Spanish accents have been removed so I don't get weird characters in my posts. [Except for the tilde over the n in jalapeños.]
I like your slow development of their relationship, especially Cord's insistence that everything gets expressed. (I wish my wife and I had that understanding.)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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"If our relationship continues to grow, we'll have to work out a compromise like we did with the pizza." Cordero motioned for Rico to bring the pizza. [This is a good analogy. Now I understand why you took extra time over their pizza choices.]
Spanish accents have been removed so I don't get weird characters in my posts. [Except for the tilde over the n in jalapeños.]
I like your slow development of their relationship, especially Cord's insistence that everything gets expressed. (I wish my wife and I had that understanding.)
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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I have fixed jalapenos. I'll double check it. Thank you for the help.
Comment from Sankey
This was a lovely chapter. I like all the dialogue between Ali and Cord. Lovely meeting more of his friends, too. Be good to see where this is going and especially how they sort out their locations. No spags.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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This was a lovely chapter. I like all the dialogue between Ali and Cord. Lovely meeting more of his friends, too. Be good to see where this is going and especially how they sort out their locations. No spags.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Anne Johnston
I like this chapter very much. You had a great idea using the illustration about compromising on the Pizza as an example how couples can learn to handle any decisions in their relationship. Seems like these two are beginning to understand each other better.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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I like this chapter very much. You had a great idea using the illustration about compromising on the Pizza as an example how couples can learn to handle any decisions in their relationship. Seems like these two are beginning to understand each other better.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice development. Good writing.
I'm only surprised she didn't want tomatoes - on a pizza that famous for tomato sauce! I also thought she'd try to get used to jalapenos with just a couple on it.
Well done. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Nice development. Good writing.
I'm only surprised she didn't want tomatoes - on a pizza that famous for tomato sauce! I also thought she'd try to get used to jalapenos with just a couple on it.
Well done. Best wishes.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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She wants the tomato sauce, just not tomatoes. I happen to love tomatoes and usually eat veggie pizza, but don't like the baked tomatoes on it. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
I guess the main problem for this couple is that if the relationship leads to marriage one of the will have to compromise. It seems Ali is happy where is is but I'm clients for a high class lawyer would be in New York. I'm sure your work it out for them . I'm enjoying the story and I hope you enjoy the vacation.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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I guess the main problem for this couple is that if the relationship leads to marriage one of the will have to compromise. It seems Ali is happy where is is but I'm clients for a high class lawyer would be in New York. I'm sure your work it out for them . I'm enjoying the story and I hope you enjoy the vacation.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Ali is a New Yorker and Cord is a rancher. Hmmmm
Comment from amahra
I like the fact that Alexandra and Cordeo admitted not feeling sizzles for their ex. And the romance seems to be developing nicely. Just a couple of things below:
"As they walked.... Which [is] the real Ali?"
One words [storefront, medium-thin, hand-tossed, ever-renewing]
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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I like the fact that Alexandra and Cordeo admitted not feeling sizzles for their ex. And the romance seems to be developing nicely. Just a couple of things below:
"As they walked.... Which [is] the real Ali?"
One words [storefront, medium-thin, hand-tossed, ever-renewing]
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the help. I've made the corrections.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I'm glad that Cord and Ali have finally opened up to each other, and now have a better understanding of their possibilities. I look forward to seeing where this relationship goes too. Well done.
This one sentence gave me some grief. I've made a couple of suggestions: "It seems there are(is) (the) professional(,) confident Alexandra(,) and then a(the) girl-next-door Ali. Which in(is) the real Ali?"
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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I'm glad that Cord and Ali have finally opened up to each other, and now have a better understanding of their possibilities. I look forward to seeing where this relationship goes too. Well done.
This one sentence gave me some grief. I've made a couple of suggestions: "It seems there are(is) (the) professional(,) confident Alexandra(,) and then a(the) girl-next-door Ali. Which in(is) the real Ali?"
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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I initially had there is personal, but because there are two Ali's I have decided 'are' is correct. I will wait and see what other reviewers say about it. I did correct the 'is') Thank you for the help. I appreciate it.
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You're most welcome, Barbara. I contemplated it too and saw why you wanted to use the plural, but it just felt a little awkward. I included "the" in each one in my suggestion to make them singular. But it is entirely up to you, of course. Well done.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
Two well developed characters having a feel your way conversation. The flow is good. The dialogue is believable. The images are clear. The scene stays on point. It ends with an unresolved question which is good.
Thanks for a good read.
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Two well developed characters having a feel your way conversation. The flow is good. The dialogue is believable. The images are clear. The scene stays on point. It ends with an unresolved question which is good.
Thanks for a good read.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
