Teddy Bear's Picnic
Greedy Ted gets a tummy ache. (5-7-5)18 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. I anticipated that pun! Yes, that poor teddy bear is stuffed and apparently, the imaginary chef-prepared food was very filling. I think the title refers to a song but I don't know it.
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Lol. I anticipated that pun! Yes, that poor teddy bear is stuffed and apparently, the imaginary chef-prepared food was very filling. I think the title refers to a song but I don't know it.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
Comment from Wendy G
A nice image and a clever play on words also, with a teddy bear being a stuffed toy. And a rhyme as well! Best wishes for your entry in the coming contest.
Wendy
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A nice image and a clever play on words also, with a teddy bear being a stuffed toy. And a rhyme as well! Best wishes for your entry in the coming contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
Comment from royowen
What a great and humorous entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest, don't you just love it, I do, when all is in chaos and disarray hug your Teddy, this is beautifully written, my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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What a great and humorous entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest, don't you just love it, I do, when all is in chaos and disarray hug your Teddy, this is beautifully written, my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This is a cute one. I love the picture. Bears are so cute. The red and white cloth makes it feel like a real old fashion picnic. It put a smile on my face, poor Teddy made himself sick, lol. Thank you for sharing some laughter.
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This is a cute one. I love the picture. Bears are so cute. The red and white cloth makes it feel like a real old fashion picnic. It put a smile on my face, poor Teddy made himself sick, lol. Thank you for sharing some laughter.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the humor contest
with nice rhymes and play on words.
Perfect picture to match poem.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the humor contest
with nice rhymes and play on words.
Perfect picture to match poem.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
Comment from Fleedleflump
What a lovely, funny take on the Teddy bears picnic! You use some clever turns of phrase and keep this tight and entertaining. I know how the poor bear feels :-)
Mike
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What a lovely, funny take on the Teddy bears picnic! You use some clever turns of phrase and keep this tight and entertaining. I know how the poor bear feels :-)
Mike
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Nice poem for the humorous 5-7-5 contest. The poem suggests so much that makes the reader smile--a child, perhaps, pretending to feed his or her Teddy Bear. Poem would be especially liked by children.
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Nice poem for the humorous 5-7-5 contest. The poem suggests so much that makes the reader smile--a child, perhaps, pretending to feed his or her Teddy Bear. Poem would be especially liked by children.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
Comment from mermaids
This is definitely a humorous poem. Poor Teddy ate too much and now he is stuffed, hahaha. You have a creative use of words that brings a smile to the reader's face.
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This is definitely a humorous poem. Poor Teddy ate too much and now he is stuffed, hahaha. You have a creative use of words that brings a smile to the reader's face.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
