Autumn Years
Contest Entry6 total reviews
Comment from Beri Bee
This is a surprise haiku of great beauty, imho. You've captured a season (and it even has a double meaning). Then, the last image is a perfect metaphor, again, doubling up on the feeling of what Autumn is and does. Profound! Thank you! (Would be 6 if I had them)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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This is a surprise haiku of great beauty, imho. You've captured a season (and it even has a double meaning). Then, the last image is a perfect metaphor, again, doubling up on the feeling of what Autumn is and does. Profound! Thank you! (Would be 6 if I had them)
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much! This means a lot to me. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
So near for me and yet I would change one word being 'tears for years.' Falling leaves are like tears and with fewer hours of sunlight they sap their strength. idk/ We all write differently. Good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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So near for me and yet I would change one word being 'tears for years.' Falling leaves are like tears and with fewer hours of sunlight they sap their strength. idk/ We all write differently. Good luck.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from pookietoo
You may want to change your poem. You were supposed to have the word Autumn in your poem. I don't know why you weren't notified. Take care, and have a great night.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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You may want to change your poem. You were supposed to have the word Autumn in your poem. I don't know why you weren't notified. Take care, and have a great night.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
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Welcome
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I didn't know. Thank you for telling me. I have placed the word Autumn in the poem. Thank you for your help!
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Sure.
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Did you read Autumn is Vibrant?
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Yes, I have read it now. It is beautiful poetry of Autumn. I love it!
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🙂
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-The description of the leaves relates nicely
to the last two lines showing the nature
of a relationship in the second one, and
the impact is reinforced by the last line.
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-The description of the leaves relates nicely
to the last two lines showing the nature
of a relationship in the second one, and
the impact is reinforced by the last line.
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
Comment from LisaMay
I caught a tone of despondency and emotion as leaves detach, like shared lives can - 'trees shed many years' seems to reflect 'trees shed many tears'.
Or the words could indicate 'standard brown' was boring and now it is time to shed some years and embrace a different life.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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I caught a tone of despondency and emotion as leaves detach, like shared lives can - 'trees shed many years' seems to reflect 'trees shed many tears'.
Or the words could indicate 'standard brown' was boring and now it is time to shed some years and embrace a different life.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Theodore McDowell
I absolutely love this response to the writing prompt. The imagery is great ("standard brown"), and you say so much below the words, emotionally, spiritually, and philosophically. It deserves an absolute six. I owe you one.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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I absolutely love this response to the writing prompt. The imagery is great ("standard brown"), and you say so much below the words, emotionally, spiritually, and philosophically. It deserves an absolute six. I owe you one.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you! I'm happy you enjoyed it.
