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The Tree

Contest Entry

16 total reviews 
Comment from jessizero
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I see what you did there. Very amusing. Congratulations on having this piece recognized! I appreciate that you chose to share this here. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
    Thank you for the great review, Jessi. Yeah, it was pretty obvious. Lol. Have a great rest of your weekend.

    Ron
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
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This seemed real. You have written a great story that had me believing. The picture is different. I enjoyed reading your post. Keep up the great writing. Take Care. I hope you have a great weekend.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
    Thank you for the great review, Carolyn. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a wonderful rest of your weekend as well.

    Ron
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Exceptional
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Dragonskulls: stars for you for this creative story of kids being kids and the cool surprise ending. I like the tech skills of the action photo. Enjoy your weekend. flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
    Thank you so much for the great review and giant sixer, Flylikeaneagle. Yeah, I love playing around in my art program just as much as I do writing. I really appreciate the generous rating, Fly. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have yourself a great rest of the weekend as well and thank you again.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Simply put, if you step into a batter's box sooner or later you are going to make contact, get on base and perhaps score the winning run. This dadny, handy. Good luck.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
    Lol. Yep, I'll keep trying. Haha. Thank you for the great review, Tom. I'm glad you liked this silliness.

    Ron
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Wow, amazing picture and story, well done! It's very scary and well thought out. Nice flow and engagement...I was hooked from beginning to end. Poor Brad, what a horrible way to die.

Excellent entry for the ... Outing writing prompt... Good luck in the contest!!!

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
    Thank you for the fantastic review, Gypsy. Love the heal quote. I really appreciate the stars and kind comments. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
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Interesting read. I'm glad it is fiction, cause it would be too scary if it was true.

A couple of suggestions:

Para 6, 3rd sentence. How mean. The paragraph started off like a "Hallmark moment" and ended up like a "Twilight Zone" episode.

Para 9, 1st sentence: "half way" should be "halfway"

Strange little story but I liked it. Too bad about Brad.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
    Thank you for the great review and getting me straight with the goof, Gary. I really appreciate the stars and help, friend. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece. Have a great rest of your weekend.

    Ron
reply by GARY MACLEAN on 05-Jun-2022
    It was ridiculous enough to keep my interest and entertain me at the same time. LOL
Comment from Bill Schott
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Well, I certainly would have never expected that ending had the image you created with the story not made that a possibility. Still, I guess if a kid has to die, what better way than doing a Donnie Darko exit.

I wonder about this: "...beautiful (fawn) in the clearing.", only because, once it was hit, it went "...wailing to its momma."


I wonder

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
    Hey, Bill, hi. Thank you for the great review and for pointing out my goof. Yes, fawn is correct. I'm an idiot. Lol. Thanks for getting me straight. I fixed it. You're the second one to mention Donnie Darko. I'll have to look that up. I appreciate the stars and help, friend. Thanks again.

    Ron
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I'm glad to learn this is fiction and it is inventive and entertaining. We never know what can drop from the sky and thankfully there aren't too many plane crashes to deal with, air travel is pretty safe, but there is always a risk. A fun post with a tragic end, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
    Thank you for the great review, Dolly. Yeah, I just wanted to come up with some ridiculous way off someone else, as usual. Haha. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silliness.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from Wendy G
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Hmm. I'm sure you know already what I am thinking about your outing with its extremely sad ending!
Cleverly written, as always. Best wishes for the contest with this dramatic entry! Lol.
Wendy

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
    Haha. I couldn't resist.

    Thank you for the great review and stars, Wendy. Congrats on the giant win. Have a great rest of your weekend.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from LisaMay
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Oh I do love a good piss-take and this one is wonderful, parodying so many recent stories - referencing childhood deaths by gators, quicksand etc. Glory, glory, hallelujah praise the Lord and pass the ammunition to shoot another little, beautiful doe.
You are truly naughty, Ron.

the giant fireball came hurdling down - probably should be 'hurtling'.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
    lol. Thank you for the great review and catching the goof, Lisa. I fixed it. Yeah, you know me. I couldn't pass up an opportunity to enter my own tragedy. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece. Thank you again.

    =]
    Ron