They Did What?
When fireworks go wrong51 total reviews
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Terry Broxson,
It's a nice piece of Humor Non-Fiction having impressive phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting Eric and John's adventure as well as its after effects!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
Hello Terry Broxson,
It's a nice piece of Humor Non-Fiction having impressive phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting Eric and John's adventure as well as its after effects!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing! Terry.
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Terry, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Cass Carlton
Golly gosh, so much for wisdom at an early age.What were they thinking? Perhaps they thought the toilet was indestructible for some reason. WRONG!!!! It wasn't the only loo in the house (fortunately), so there was no need for midnight visits to the neighbors. I enjoyed the comment on the agent's reaction to enquiries about cover.
He laughed. I'll bet he did too. Probably lightened his day no end. I am really glad this escapade didn't ruin their futures after all.
It would have been a loss to humanity for these two young minds not to reach their full potential. All's well that ends well, eh what!! cheers Cass
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
Golly gosh, so much for wisdom at an early age.What were they thinking? Perhaps they thought the toilet was indestructible for some reason. WRONG!!!! It wasn't the only loo in the house (fortunately), so there was no need for midnight visits to the neighbors. I enjoyed the comment on the agent's reaction to enquiries about cover.
He laughed. I'll bet he did too. Probably lightened his day no end. I am really glad this escapade didn't ruin their futures after all.
It would have been a loss to humanity for these two young minds not to reach their full potential. All's well that ends well, eh what!! cheers Cass
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Cass, thank you for your fun and kind review! Terry.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A cautionary tale at an appropriate time of the year. The piece flows well. The images are clear. The piece stays on point. Well done.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
A cautionary tale at an appropriate time of the year. The piece flows well. The images are clear. The piece stays on point. Well done.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for the kind review. Terry.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Dear Terry Broxson,
Thank you so much for the opportunity to read this great piece of work!! I really enjoyed it!! May God bless you and your loved ones!!!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
Dear Terry Broxson,
Thank you so much for the opportunity to read this great piece of work!! I really enjoyed it!! May God bless you and your loved ones!!!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Terry.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Good story about the antics of teenaged boys. I like how you developed the plot by describing their book knowledge and educational accomplishments. It was a good foundation for the event to come. The graphic/visual makes sense after reading the story. It fits well.
This line in the story is a bit of an overstatement~ Our now dumber than dirt delinquents surveyed the bathroom. They are hardly dumb, and this one incident doesn't make them delinquents. I feel it would have been good to mention they had book knowledge but were lacking in the commonsense department. Well-done as you know from the honors this piece was awarded.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
Good story about the antics of teenaged boys. I like how you developed the plot by describing their book knowledge and educational accomplishments. It was a good foundation for the event to come. The graphic/visual makes sense after reading the story. It fits well.
This line in the story is a bit of an overstatement~ Our now dumber than dirt delinquents surveyed the bathroom. They are hardly dumb, and this one incident doesn't make them delinquents. I feel it would have been good to mention they had book knowledge but were lacking in the commonsense department. Well-done as you know from the honors this piece was awarded.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and your suggestions which are welcome. Terry.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done, Terry, and very timely, too. Many fireworks incidents have turned out much more worse than Eric's and John's experiment. Have a safe fourth.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
Nicely done, Terry, and very timely, too. Many fireworks incidents have turned out much more worse than Eric's and John's experiment. Have a safe fourth.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much and you enjoy the 4th as well, Terry.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Terry, Oh dear, they didn't know what they were getting themselves into. I do believe they learned their look lesson. I must beadmit that the parents took it very well. But then again they must have realised boys are boys. Hmm!
I loved it. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
Hi Terry, Oh dear, they didn't know what they were getting themselves into. I do believe they learned their look lesson. I must beadmit that the parents took it very well. But then again they must have realised boys are boys. Hmm!
I loved it. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Ulla, thank you very much, I am glad that you enjoyed it. Terry.
Comment from GTG345
That was a great humorous Non-Fiction poem. It was nice how the detail made it so climatic to where the cherry was launched from and what covered it.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
That was a great humorous Non-Fiction poem. It was nice how the detail made it so climatic to where the cherry was launched from and what covered it.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
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Thank you! Terry
Comment from LJbutterfly
I thoroughly enjoy your conversational storytelling style. You usually give an introduction to let the reader know what they might encounter, and in this story, you describe the successful outcome of the lives of the two boys the story is about. Then the backstory provides the 'meat' of the story. This was a delight to read.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
I thoroughly enjoy your conversational storytelling style. You usually give an introduction to let the reader know what they might encounter, and in this story, you describe the successful outcome of the lives of the two boys the story is about. Then the backstory provides the 'meat' of the story. This was a delight to read.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much, I did think it was important to establish that these were smart successful guys...who did a dumb thing! Thanks for reading and for your insightful review. Terry.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Terry a good day to you sir. As always I hope this finds you well. I always enjoy reading your stories, they're well written and almost always has a useful message or piece of wisdom. Great job!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
Hello Terry a good day to you sir. As always I hope this finds you well. I always enjoy reading your stories, they're well written and almost always has a useful message or piece of wisdom. Great job!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Sir. I do appreciate you reading my story and reviewing it. Terry.