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An unexpected friendship blossoming6 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Hope springs eternal, and friendships should as you said in your ending line of poetry herein. My everlasting never-ending FRIEND. Though life carries us away from each other at times, life everlasting may give us time to reunite.
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Hope springs eternal, and friendships should as you said in your ending line of poetry herein. My everlasting never-ending FRIEND. Though life carries us away from each other at times, life everlasting may give us time to reunite.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
Comment from LisaMay
You have used so many creative expressions to describe the joy you feel in this wonderful friendship - I can't single any one out as my favourite. The combination of sentiment and faith in the future is delightful.
In the last stanza, perhaps the rhyme in the 2nd line could be changed so that 'friend' is not used twice. (I like the final FRIEND capitalised for emphasis.) I suggest a slight change:
You are my ever sparkling sunbeam
An incredible heartsong without end,
Winter's fierce magical wonderland
My everlasting never-ending FRIEND.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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You have used so many creative expressions to describe the joy you feel in this wonderful friendship - I can't single any one out as my favourite. The combination of sentiment and faith in the future is delightful.
In the last stanza, perhaps the rhyme in the 2nd line could be changed so that 'friend' is not used twice. (I like the final FRIEND capitalised for emphasis.) I suggest a slight change:
You are my ever sparkling sunbeam
An incredible heartsong without end,
Winter's fierce magical wonderland
My everlasting never-ending FRIEND.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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LisaMay,
Thank you for the 6 star review. I truly value and appreciate great thoughtful reviews. Your suggestion is welcomed and a perfect revision. This is the first time I've received 6 stars from 2 fellow poets for one of my contests entries.
All the best,
Eugene
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Terrific! I hope the voters appreciate your story as much as I did.
Comment from oliver818
I like the atmosphere and feel
you have this poem, it's really well-done and touching. The use of "you" makes it more powerful and emotional. Thanks for sharing this
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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I like the atmosphere and feel
you have this poem, it's really well-done and touching. The use of "you" makes it more powerful and emotional. Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Oliver,
Thank you for your encouraging review. I truly value and appreciate great thoughtful reviews. I am pleased your enjoyed this write. This is the first time I've received 6 stars from 2 fellow poets for one of my contests entries.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think that any age we feel like teenagers when it comes to love as our hearts always stay young and willing to explore companionship and closeness, much enjoyed, well rhymed and a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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I think that any age we feel like teenagers when it comes to love as our hearts always stay young and willing to explore companionship and closeness, much enjoyed, well rhymed and a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Dolly,
Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review. I truly value and appreciate great thoughtful reviews. This is the first time I've received 6 stars from 2 fellow poets for one of my contests entries.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-written beautiful poem. The rhyme scheme is well-done and does not seem forced. I like it being centered on the page too. The visual is large and fits well with the poem. If I would offer any suggestions, it would be for the last verse. It would be good if you could find another word to rhyme with friend other than befriend. Befriend takes some of the special feel of the word friend as the ending word. If you decide to keep it as is, then perhaps make the word friend in all capital letters. That way it still remains special. I would also make the font size a bit larger to balance out the large visual. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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This is a well-written beautiful poem. The rhyme scheme is well-done and does not seem forced. I like it being centered on the page too. The visual is large and fits well with the poem. If I would offer any suggestions, it would be for the last verse. It would be good if you could find another word to rhyme with friend other than befriend. Befriend takes some of the special feel of the word friend as the ending word. If you decide to keep it as is, then perhaps make the word friend in all capital letters. That way it still remains special. I would also make the font size a bit larger to balance out the large visual. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Sandra,
Thank you for helpful review. I truly value and appreciate great thoughtful reviews. Your suggestions are welcomed and a perfect revision. I've made the changes and revised the poem accordingly. This is the first time I've received 6 stars from 2 fellow poets for one of my contests entries.
All the best,
Eugene
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You are most welcome. Wonderful job on your 6's~Good poetry cannot be denied. Have you finished the book on Kindle?
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I've finished creating a theme for the first book. Beginning work on assembling the poems to match the story expressed using each poem starting today.
This first book will be titled "Forever Yours" and is dedicated
to my ex-wife and mother to my only child. It will comprise a series of friendship and romance poems that reflect our 17 years as husband and wife.
Cheers,
Eugene
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Sounds like you are well on your way to getting your book started. Best of luck!
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I love the changes you made. It's just a great poem.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a lovely poem about a friendship for all seasons. You have even managed a bit of the Bermudian language lilt in the words you have chosen. Quite wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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This is a lovely poem about a friendship for all seasons. You have even managed a bit of the Bermudian language lilt in the words you have chosen. Quite wonderful poem.
Comment Written 31-May-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Carol,
Thank you for the 6 star review. I truly value and appreciate great thoughtful reviews. This is the first time I've received 6 stars from 2 fellow poets for one of my contests entries.
All the best,
Eugene
