Peace
A seeking of solitude, a break from the chaos.26 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good poem. The verses fit the title. The rhyme scheme is consistent in every stanza/verse except in 2 areas. Verse #1 wood and brook do not rhyme. In verse #2 top and chaos do not rhyme. I think if you fix those two spots you will have a better rhyming poem. I think also a visual of a babbling brook would add to the mood of the poem.
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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This is a good poem. The verses fit the title. The rhyme scheme is consistent in every stanza/verse except in 2 areas. Verse #1 wood and brook do not rhyme. In verse #2 top and chaos do not rhyme. I think if you fix those two spots you will have a better rhyming poem. I think also a visual of a babbling brook would add to the mood of the poem.
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Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for the thoughtful comments. I appreciate your review.
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You are welcome!
Comment from leather
This is a nice poem. I think addresses the ephemeral feeling of Godliness in the peace and comfort of nature. It seems to be always there, even in the brief rainbows that visit us on occasion. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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This is a nice poem. I think addresses the ephemeral feeling of Godliness in the peace and comfort of nature. It seems to be always there, even in the brief rainbows that visit us on occasion. Best wishes.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much. I like the visual you painted.
Comment from Ja Majal
You caught my attention with the rhyming of 'mountain top' and 'most chaos' It doesn't seem like it works but its oddly satisfying. :)
I appreciated this poem, I am a nature boy myself, and haven't had the chance to enjoy nature as I once did so I got to live vicariously through your poem!!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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You caught my attention with the rhyming of 'mountain top' and 'most chaos' It doesn't seem like it works but its oddly satisfying. :)
I appreciated this poem, I am a nature boy myself, and haven't had the chance to enjoy nature as I once did so I got to live vicariously through your poem!!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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That?s awesome. It makes my heart happy to hear you say you lived vicariously through it. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Janet Foor
I think you have found the right answer to the chaos and turmoil of our daily lives. Turning intentionally to God certainly brings me contentment and joy even in the face of heartbreak.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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I think you have found the right answer to the chaos and turmoil of our daily lives. Turning intentionally to God certainly brings me contentment and joy even in the face of heartbreak.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Yes! "And I will keep him in perfect peace whose mind is stayed on me because he trusts in me." Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from royowen
The best way to regain what was lost, such as joy, is to observe that scripture, "If you draw close to God, He will draw close to you." "In your presence is fulness of joy." This is beautifully written my friend, they are magnificently done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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The best way to regain what was lost, such as joy, is to observe that scripture, "If you draw close to God, He will draw close to you." "In your presence is fulness of joy." This is beautifully written my friend, they are magnificently done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much Roy. I appreciate the encouragement. Truly.
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Most welcome
Comment from Anne Johnston
Good rhyming and easy to read. Our world is filled with turmoil and strife but we can find peace in spending some quiet time with the Lord, and letting Him renew our hearts and minds.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Good rhyming and easy to read. Our world is filled with turmoil and strife but we can find peace in spending some quiet time with the Lord, and letting Him renew our hearts and minds.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Yes! "The peace of God will guard your hearts and your minds in Christ Jesus." Thank you for the encouragement and for taking the time to write a review.
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You are welcome
Comment from Lilly Flowers
We are living in such terrible times and I can certainly understand why you would need to find comfort in nature. This poem flowed and I found it very relatable. Regards, Lilly
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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We are living in such terrible times and I can certainly understand why you would need to find comfort in nature. This poem flowed and I found it very relatable. Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for telling me about relating to the descriptions. I appreciate your review and the encouragement.
Comment from mermaids
I like your theme and agree, getting out in nature brings us peace. You have a smooth flow of rhyming words that gives your poem an almost musical feel to it. I like the line about the mountain top relieving chaos, so true.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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I like your theme and agree, getting out in nature brings us peace. You have a smooth flow of rhyming words that gives your poem an almost musical feel to it. I like the line about the mountain top relieving chaos, so true.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Poetry always sounds musical to me. Thank you so much for saying so! I appreciate your encouragement so much.
Comment from harmony13
I loved your poem! The author's words are filled with seeing the
important things of life, are descriptive, clear, meaningful and creative.
I pondered on these words and after raising my sons, now watching my
grandchildren grow up - what is most important to me is "Peace".
Thank you for this beautiful poem....Maria
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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I loved your poem! The author's words are filled with seeing the
important things of life, are descriptive, clear, meaningful and creative.
I pondered on these words and after raising my sons, now watching my
grandchildren grow up - what is most important to me is "Peace".
Thank you for this beautiful poem....Maria
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Yes, Maria. To me too. I?m focusing on that in my life currently. Thank you for taking the time to write a review and for the encouragement.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest.
Good poem about nature and God with a great presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear poetic vision..
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Excellent entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest.
Good poem about nature and God with a great presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear poetic vision..
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for the beautiful words of encouragement. Peace and tranquility are my pursuits these days.
