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Spider

A rhyming short poem

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Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
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This is a terrific rhyming poem, the photo is pretty creepy but effective:)
I responded in a positive way to the overall format and rhyming pattern. The carefully chosen rhymes flow naturally creating a tempo that is just right without force. Thanks for sharing and keep writing,

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


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Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
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Hi Bridge, first I want to tell you that you have a very cute poem here.
But if you don't mind a few pointers, I think it could be a contender for the contest. And I would love to see you make it the best that it can be. So please know that
I am only trying to help you. So first thing is, you need to find your rhythm and putting extra spaces only chops it up but no rhythm. So first line is good. Second and fifth are good. Third line needs two more syllables, such as,
"it's tangled web was near the door" then your missing a syllable in the fourth line. But the phrase doesn't go together so I would get rid of the word four. Try this to see if you like it. "Stuck to it were flies galore" Then when you do that and get rid of the extra spaces, you may have a good chance in the contest. As you read it you should be able to feel the bounce of the rhythm that is so important.
Good luck my friend and I hope that helps. Let me know!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


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Comment from karenina
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You're a better soul than I am! My arachnophobia would qualify me as a serial spider murderer...

Somewhere, if there's a Spider Bureau of Investigation. (SBI!)

I'm on the most wanted list!!!!

(Sad but true!)

Karenina


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
    Thanks for the wonderful review. I hate spiders too and this is pure fiction. With regards
reply by karenina on 28-Jun-2022
    A fun read that tweaked my inner fear of these wee beasties!
Comment from royowen
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You must have swatted the spider when it was in the middle of feasting itself on those delicious flies, yum! Beautifully written my friend, clever and funny at the same time, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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reply by royowen on 02-Jun-2022
    Welcome
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    Welcome
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words interesting, descriptive, clear and creative. I
thought about spiders and how I like to look at their webs as long
as there outside! The poem flows and connects well. the artwork
is great and compliments this poem.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2022


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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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An awesome entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. The rhymes don't seem forced. Spiders are creepy but keep bugs away.

--It flows well with beautifully descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.

Well done! I wish you the best.

Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2022


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Comment from C.A.Currie
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Hey Bridge! Nice writing, I didn't quite 'get' the last line. Perhaps you used an electric carpet sweeper for that eight-legged creeper? LOL
Thanks for sharing!
Hugs and Lollipops from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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reply by C.A.Currie on 02-Jun-2022
    the pleasure was all mine.
    ~ Christine ~
Comment from jessizero
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This was a good little piece of rhyming poetry. I don't like spiders, anyway, so I wasn't too upset when this one met its end. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 31-May-2022


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Comment from Carolyn Dooley
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I would do the same thing. If I see a spider, I try to kill it. They sometimes get away, they go so fast. There are some spiders that are dangerous. Like the brown recluse. And black widows. Thank you for posting.

 Comment Written 31-May-2022


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reply by Carolyn Dooley on 31-May-2022
    You are welcome.
Comment from Sanku
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This is a cute little rhyming poem .very good for children to sing.I liked the oo rhymes .It will go well while singing. All the best for the contest. Flies four is a good idea.

 Comment Written 31-May-2022


reply by the author on 31-May-2022
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. It is greatly appreciated.
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