Sam and the Jackrabbit
A little humor walking a dog.46 total reviews
Comment from amahra
That story was nice coming from Sam. But I really would have seen Sam a little more naughty. Maybe not...like Sam said, "Who'd walk him next time. I loved your story. Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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That story was nice coming from Sam. But I really would have seen Sam a little more naughty. Maybe not...like Sam said, "Who'd walk him next time. I loved your story. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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LOL, Thank you so much for your great review. Terry.
Comment from cat frenette
I loved your story Terry!
What an interesting perspective, reading it from the dog's point of view.
You clearly know dogs ("Oh no, you're hurt! Did any treats fall out of your pockets when you fell?" Classic dog!)
I would have liked your story to continue, but maybe I have a longer attention span than Sam does.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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I loved your story Terry!
What an interesting perspective, reading it from the dog's point of view.
You clearly know dogs ("Oh no, you're hurt! Did any treats fall out of your pockets when you fell?" Classic dog!)
I would have liked your story to continue, but maybe I have a longer attention span than Sam does.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Cat, LOL, Very fun review, Thank you, Terry.
Comment from Averil Drummond
Very good. A lovely take (out of left field) as we might say in Australia, of a dog's life. Just a couple of things. I would leave out 'or not' after the tremendous drama. Being Australian I would just call it 'Sam's story' or something similar. I know many things in America revolve around religion, but not so much in the rest of the world. You have included plenty of other unique American things in the story. Always good to aim for universal appeal, I think.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Very good. A lovely take (out of left field) as we might say in Australia, of a dog's life. Just a couple of things. I would leave out 'or not' after the tremendous drama. Being Australian I would just call it 'Sam's story' or something similar. I know many things in America revolve around religion, but not so much in the rest of the world. You have included plenty of other unique American things in the story. Always good to aim for universal appeal, I think.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your review and suggestions! Terry.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is so amusing, especially as told from Sam's POV. He is quite an interesting dog, especially since he can decide a jackrabbit might not be a good idea. Congratulations on your new digs and your fiftieth post.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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This is so amusing, especially as told from Sam's POV. He is quite an interesting dog, especially since he can decide a jackrabbit might not be a good idea. Congratulations on your new digs and your fiftieth post.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Carol, thank you for the six stars!!! You are very kind. Terry.
Comment from leather
Is there a name for the dog's point of view? If not, I think one is needed. This is a humorous account of Sam and the jackrabbit. It's fun to step outside the box now and then--and this story did that.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Is there a name for the dog's point of view? If not, I think one is needed. This is a humorous account of Sam and the jackrabbit. It's fun to step outside the box now and then--and this story did that.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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LOL, Thank you for your fun and kind review. Terry.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting approach to a story. I love that the narrator changes in the middle. The story flows well. The language is humorous and warm. The images are sharp.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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An interesting approach to a story. I love that the narrator changes in the middle. The story flows well. The language is humorous and warm. The images are sharp.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thank you for that wonderful review! Terry.
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You are welcome.
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
I always love stories where the four footed perspective is the narrative. It takes a good imagination to get inside furry head. Sam is a fine charcter an the story is amusing and bright.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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I always love stories where the four footed perspective is the narrative. It takes a good imagination to get inside furry head. Sam is a fine charcter an the story is amusing and bright.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Sam is very cool, thank you for reading! Terry.
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:-)
Comment from Jay Squires
You are, young Terry, gathering quite a following here. I see this piece has rightfully achieved the number one ATB for June. It's no wonder. It is light, conversational, witty, with an underlying wisdom that can, when you want it to, bare teeth to the mouth of your wit.
Here's what I mean:
Okay, it was 245 months or so past the minimum, but nobody asked for proof of age. [hahahaha! Your humor shines through.]
I was worried for two or three minutes, and then I started looking for treats just in case she dropped one. [Your comedic timing is impeccable.]
Nothing endears a writer to his reader more than ego deflating humor when the ego is the writer's. You decorate and elevate this site with your writing. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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You are, young Terry, gathering quite a following here. I see this piece has rightfully achieved the number one ATB for June. It's no wonder. It is light, conversational, witty, with an underlying wisdom that can, when you want it to, bare teeth to the mouth of your wit.
Here's what I mean:
Okay, it was 245 months or so past the minimum, but nobody asked for proof of age. [hahahaha! Your humor shines through.]
I was worried for two or three minutes, and then I started looking for treats just in case she dropped one. [Your comedic timing is impeccable.]
Nothing endears a writer to his reader more than ego deflating humor when the ego is the writer's. You decorate and elevate this site with your writing. Keep it up!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Jay, thank you for the six stars!!! Your reviews are the best for their insight , Thank you! Terry.
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You are always a joy to read and comment on.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent post for a milestone one, even though I can't connect with yor POV as I am probably the least animal-orientated person on the planet. No longer needing to have cats, dogs, chickens etc in my life was the one positive side of my kids gowing up. I must just say though, like Sam, my world is filled with dreams of bacon (they do it so badly in France compared to the UK). Kate xx PS I am glad you seem to have renounced your decision to stop writing. K
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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This is an excellent post for a milestone one, even though I can't connect with yor POV as I am probably the least animal-orientated person on the planet. No longer needing to have cats, dogs, chickens etc in my life was the one positive side of my kids gowing up. I must just say though, like Sam, my world is filled with dreams of bacon (they do it so badly in France compared to the UK). Kate xx PS I am glad you seem to have renounced your decision to stop writing. K
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Lol, I did unretire, love the part about you and the bacon! Thanks for reading! Terry,
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
What a clever and cute perspective to write a story. I am a proud owner of a 13-year-old Cocker Spaniel, and I plan to do a poem from his perspective. I enjoyed your story, but what was missing was the mention of his breed. All dog lovers would want to know this. Each breed has its on distinctive personality. The perfect place to put it is in paragraph #4 in this sentence, Diane, who has a very smart and good-looking Collie named Sam. This is a fun story that I enjoyed.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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What a clever and cute perspective to write a story. I am a proud owner of a 13-year-old Cocker Spaniel, and I plan to do a poem from his perspective. I enjoyed your story, but what was missing was the mention of his breed. All dog lovers would want to know this. Each breed has its on distinctive personality. The perfect place to put it is in paragraph #4 in this sentence, Diane, who has a very smart and good-looking Collie named Sam. This is a fun story that I enjoyed.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Sandra, the breed is mentioned in the notes at the bottom of the story. Thank you for reading. Terry.
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Yes, I noted that, but if a dog is the focal point/ main character of a plot the breed would be somewhere in the text. It's one of his main identifiable traits. It's a good story no matter what you do. You are welcome.
