My Son
My youngest son worshiped his older brother.15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Annie,
I'm so sorry to hear of your son's passing. Is this picture of your oldest or youngest son playing the bass guitar? Such a shame, and so difficult for you and Bill.
This is a fine entry for the Rhyming Poem contest, in ABCB rhyme scheme. A sad story to tell.
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Hi Annie,
I'm so sorry to hear of your son's passing. Is this picture of your oldest or youngest son playing the bass guitar? Such a shame, and so difficult for you and Bill.
This is a fine entry for the Rhyming Poem contest, in ABCB rhyme scheme. A sad story to tell.
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for reviewing. The picture is of my oldest son who is the musician in the family. My youngest was the writer. He is missed by so many of the family. He was a gem.
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
Thank you for this heartfelt poem! So very sad to read your explanation at the end. My heart goes out to you and the grief that will live with you forever. I really like the poem and appreciate the emotional struggle it must have taken to write it considering what happened. My partner also had a child who was murdered as a young adult and I know the grief of it lives in his heart. The poem is beautifully written and, though a tribute to the older brother, it speaks well of the younger one too. I especially like the line: "Who's always looking up to him And substitutes no other." Unfortunately, in this stanza you use the word "always" twice. Any way you can see how to fix this?
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you for this heartfelt poem! So very sad to read your explanation at the end. My heart goes out to you and the grief that will live with you forever. I really like the poem and appreciate the emotional struggle it must have taken to write it considering what happened. My partner also had a child who was murdered as a young adult and I know the grief of it lives in his heart. The poem is beautifully written and, though a tribute to the older brother, it speaks well of the younger one too. I especially like the line: "Who's always looking up to him And substitutes no other." Unfortunately, in this stanza you use the word "always" twice. Any way you can see how to fix this?
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you for being so observant and yes I will go back and fix the problem. I appreciate your wonderful review. It was difficult to write but something I finally had to do. Both are such great sons and it was a big loss to the whole family. Thanks for your review/
Comment from livelylinda
AnnieDawn: Your oldest son deserves praise and admiration from you for the rest of your life. Being a single mom is not an easy task. I was a single mom with 3 daughters with all very different and unique characters. Such a tragedy to lose your baby boy. Your older boy should be an excellent father if he has any children. I'm sure that he feels the terrible loss of his baby brother. God bring peace to you and yours. Linda
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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AnnieDawn: Your oldest son deserves praise and admiration from you for the rest of your life. Being a single mom is not an easy task. I was a single mom with 3 daughters with all very different and unique characters. Such a tragedy to lose your baby boy. Your older boy should be an excellent father if he has any children. I'm sure that he feels the terrible loss of his baby brother. God bring peace to you and yours. Linda
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. My oldest really was a helpful influence on his younger brother and he worshiped him. Thank you again.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a heart rendering poem about your sons, Annie Dawn, but your notes explaining it brought a tear to my eye. A mother's worst fear. So sorry. Good luck in the contest. Hugs.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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This is a heart rendering poem about your sons, Annie Dawn, but your notes explaining it brought a tear to my eye. A mother's worst fear. So sorry. Good luck in the contest. Hugs.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. My oldest really was a helpful influence on his younger brother and he worshiped him. Thank you again.
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You?re most welcome!:)
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I enjoyed your lovely poem about your older son, and your notation about your younger one broke my heart. It's hard to keep going when you have such a difficult heartache. God's comfort is the only thing I know that can get us through such hard places. I hope it does well in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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I enjoyed your lovely poem about your older son, and your notation about your younger one broke my heart. It's hard to keep going when you have such a difficult heartache. God's comfort is the only thing I know that can get us through such hard places. I hope it does well in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. My oldest really was a helpful influence on his younger brother and he worshiped him. Thank you again.
Comment from Michael Cassar
Loved the choice of rhyming words. They gently exhibit the beauty and example your son has been to his younger brother. I feel the waves pushing ashore gently, with their sound praising your son.
Michael
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Loved the choice of rhyming words. They gently exhibit the beauty and example your son has been to his younger brother. I feel the waves pushing ashore gently, with their sound praising your son.
Michael
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. My oldest really was a helpful influence on his younger brother and he worshiped him. Thank you again.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are caring, loving, descriptive, clear and creative.
The author's notes are heartfelt and I am saddened by your loss. How
wonderful that your older was a hero and a loving example to his younger
brother. The author's words show admiration throughout this poem.
May you continue to write and have peace in your life.
With Prayers and Sincere Condolences, Maria
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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The author's words are caring, loving, descriptive, clear and creative.
The author's notes are heartfelt and I am saddened by your loss. How
wonderful that your older was a hero and a loving example to his younger
brother. The author's words show admiration throughout this poem.
May you continue to write and have peace in your life.
With Prayers and Sincere Condolences, Maria
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. My oldest really was a helpful influence on his younger brother and he worshiped him. Thank you again.
Comment from royowen
I am so so, sorry, this is truly truly, my younger brother always looked up to me, although I wasn't a great influence on him, I've done better later in life, so tragic for you, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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I am so so, sorry, this is truly truly, my younger brother always looked up to me, although I wasn't a great influence on him, I've done better later in life, so tragic for you, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. My oldest really was a helpful influence on his younger brother and he worshiped him. Thank you again.
Comment from Janet Foor
I am so sorry for your loss Anne. I think you did an outstanding job raising your sons especially as a single parent.
This must have been very difficult to write but you did a wonderful job conveying an emotional story.
Blessings
Janet.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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I am so sorry for your loss Anne. I think you did an outstanding job raising your sons especially as a single parent.
This must have been very difficult to write but you did a wonderful job conveying an emotional story.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. My oldest really was a helpful influence on his younger brother and he worshiped him. Thank you again.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine tribute to your son and I enjoyed the sentiments as you describe his upstanding character here Annie, you obviously did a great job with his upbringing, the last line should be (toed) the line,
ie:
toe the line (phrase of toe)
accept the authority, policies, or principles of a particular group, especially unwillingly. "he knew that he had to toe the official line because he couldn't afford to be put on the dole"
love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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A fine tribute to your son and I enjoyed the sentiments as you describe his upstanding character here Annie, you obviously did a great job with his upbringing, the last line should be (toed) the line,
ie:
toe the line (phrase of toe)
accept the authority, policies, or principles of a particular group, especially unwillingly. "he knew that he had to toe the official line because he couldn't afford to be put on the dole"
love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. My oldest really was a helpful influence on his younger brother and he worshiped him. Thank you again.
