George Floyd (1973-2020)
A new poetic form in honor of George Floyd (1973-2020)15 total reviews
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Wow! Very impressive. The poetry form itself is interesting... would be hard to write, but can contain so much. The poem itself is heartbreaking and inspiring, devastating and true. Wonderful!
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Wow! Very impressive. The poetry form itself is interesting... would be hard to write, but can contain so much. The poem itself is heartbreaking and inspiring, devastating and true. Wonderful!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from Earl Corp
I think I read the original poem you posted. I can see where you might feel the need to remind us of this tragic event. Kudos for inventing your own form of poetry.
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I think I read the original poem you posted. I can see where you might feel the need to remind us of this tragic event. Kudos for inventing your own form of poetry.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Technically, this is so innovative and creative. Realistically, I wonder if I could hold off that long to finish it, but maybe?
I truly like what you've done here. That picture though - gave me chills.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Technically, this is so innovative and creative. Realistically, I wonder if I could hold off that long to finish it, but maybe?
I truly like what you've done here. That picture though - gave me chills.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Hi Pam,
thanks for the six stars of merit.
I?d be glad to hope you write a Sidecar poem.
- Jer
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good poem in remembrance of that horrible day. Just too much racism in this world to have anyone think this is the right way for a police officer to react to any traffic stop.
It is good you want to leave a new poem style for posterity, I don't think a lot of people want to wait three years to post a poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
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This is a good poem in remembrance of that horrible day. Just too much racism in this world to have anyone think this is the right way for a police officer to react to any traffic stop.
It is good you want to leave a new poem style for posterity, I don't think a lot of people want to wait three years to post a poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 30-May-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write about a tragedy where too much force was applied, although it was not the intention to kill, it was accidental. Good luck with your new form, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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A poignant write about a tragedy where too much force was applied, although it was not the intention to kill, it was accidental. Good luck with your new form, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Hi my friend,
Always great to hear from you.
Re: )it was not the intention to kill( - I think that makes it Second Degree Murder.
- Lobber
Comment from Whitewave
Lobber,
Thank you for your verse, addressing a very complex situation, while promoting an interesting, new form of rhyming poetry.
The picture is almost too hard to look at as is the ugly 9 minutes of torture that it captures. Yes, every life matters but that has to apply equally to the perpetrator and the victim. Perhaps, this has you gasping, "I can't breathe", because it is too hard to accept?
Foe me, there is resounding truth in the words - "Hurt people hurt people" and this truth abides in every tragic happening, although it might be the hardest thing to see or accept. I believe that we are all one - from One Source, walking different paths, leading back to One Home.
Focusing on the dark does not remove it but sustains it. Looking into the dark, tracing back to its point of origin, helps us begin to understand the incomprehensible. I believe there is a punishment worse than death and that is the criminal locked away for a life of misery, unloved, alone, tormented and terrified. My heart aches for the victim; my prayers are for all humanity, past and present.
The following verse by Carl Jung says it all for me: -
That I feed the hungry,
forgive an insult, and love my enemy-
these are great virtues.
But what if I should discover
that the poorest of the beggars
and most impudent of offenders
are all within me,
and that I stand in need
of the alms of my own kindness,
that I myself am the enemy
who must be loved-
what then?
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Lobber,
Thank you for your verse, addressing a very complex situation, while promoting an interesting, new form of rhyming poetry.
The picture is almost too hard to look at as is the ugly 9 minutes of torture that it captures. Yes, every life matters but that has to apply equally to the perpetrator and the victim. Perhaps, this has you gasping, "I can't breathe", because it is too hard to accept?
Foe me, there is resounding truth in the words - "Hurt people hurt people" and this truth abides in every tragic happening, although it might be the hardest thing to see or accept. I believe that we are all one - from One Source, walking different paths, leading back to One Home.
Focusing on the dark does not remove it but sustains it. Looking into the dark, tracing back to its point of origin, helps us begin to understand the incomprehensible. I believe there is a punishment worse than death and that is the criminal locked away for a life of misery, unloved, alone, tormented and terrified. My heart aches for the victim; my prayers are for all humanity, past and present.
The following verse by Carl Jung says it all for me: -
That I feed the hungry,
forgive an insult, and love my enemy-
these are great virtues.
But what if I should discover
that the poorest of the beggars
and most impudent of offenders
are all within me,
and that I stand in need
of the alms of my own kindness,
that I myself am the enemy
who must be loved-
what then?
Comment Written 29-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Hi there,
I agree with you: ) Looking into the dark, tracing back to its point of origin, helps us begin to understand the incomprehensible.(
Thank you for your wise words and stopping by.
- Lobber
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Lobber looks like I have my answer of where you are from, as you wrote about what we lived here in Minnesota with horror as we watched this inhumane pig cop kill George Floyd. These men completely screwed up the world of the good cops, and now I know why some called them pigs, and not the flying kind. Because of especially this one, our whole state was thrown into turmoil and we would soon worry that it would spread 50 miles west of the city into our small suburb of Buffalo, MN.
The father of a friend of mine was killed while trying to protect his business and watching the innocent suffer was as painful as watching the show off cop trying to prove that he didn't have to listen to any of the people begging for him to stop.
I noticed that you once were from Michigan, which is not that far away, considering all the people here at FS living around the world. So I would like to thank you for this unusual sidecar format that I can't wait to hear more about. And of course the awesome read and I am very happy that I just came here to check you out, and you so deserve this six star review, as you really took on a big one Jerry! The begging to breathe, heard throughout the world, was the perfect subject for the poem and the poem that you wrote was perfectly perfect!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Lobber looks like I have my answer of where you are from, as you wrote about what we lived here in Minnesota with horror as we watched this inhumane pig cop kill George Floyd. These men completely screwed up the world of the good cops, and now I know why some called them pigs, and not the flying kind. Because of especially this one, our whole state was thrown into turmoil and we would soon worry that it would spread 50 miles west of the city into our small suburb of Buffalo, MN.
The father of a friend of mine was killed while trying to protect his business and watching the innocent suffer was as painful as watching the show off cop trying to prove that he didn't have to listen to any of the people begging for him to stop.
I noticed that you once were from Michigan, which is not that far away, considering all the people here at FS living around the world. So I would like to thank you for this unusual sidecar format that I can't wait to hear more about. And of course the awesome read and I am very happy that I just came here to check you out, and you so deserve this six star review, as you really took on a big one Jerry! The begging to breathe, heard throughout the world, was the perfect subject for the poem and the poem that you wrote was perfectly perfect!
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Hi My Mich. friend,
The Extended Sidecar is not the easiest. It requires passion and commiment. I?d be glad to help you write one - it all starts with a Lune poem.
Jer aka Lobber
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A virtual six. This is Lobber at his creative and unique best, developing the intricate and extended sidecar format that adds depth and contemplation to the poem. Well done, my friend. Hope all is well. Drop me a review sometime soon and let me know what you think of some of my new work. Thinking of you.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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A virtual six. This is Lobber at his creative and unique best, developing the intricate and extended sidecar format that adds depth and contemplation to the poem. Well done, my friend. Hope all is well. Drop me a review sometime soon and let me know what you think of some of my new work. Thinking of you.
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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HI there,
Thank you for your support and praise. The Extended Sidecar takes passion and commitment.
I like your new poems. They seem more spartan and well-focused with fewer adverbs in the way.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your new style is interesting but complex. I would have a
difficult time waiting then writing for the length of time it
requires. However that takes nothing away from your
current poem. You did a great job The colored fonts add
much to the overall appearance.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
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Your new style is interesting but complex. I would have a
difficult time waiting then writing for the length of time it
requires. However that takes nothing away from your
current poem. You did a great job The colored fonts add
much to the overall appearance.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 27-May-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about police brutality and the tragic execution of George Floyd in plain sight. It's hard to bieve it has been two years. How many more African Americans have been killed by police since then?
I like the presentation and the eloquent font color and style. Well done!!!
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Excellent poem about police brutality and the tragic execution of George Floyd in plain sight. It's hard to bieve it has been two years. How many more African Americans have been killed by police since then?
I like the presentation and the eloquent font color and style. Well done!!!
Comment Written 27-May-2022
