A Penny for you Fought
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Finger of Fear"Dragon Dance Chronicles Book 2
6 total reviews
Comment from N.K. Wagner
**********************************************Ouch! Roz put up a pretty good fight before lights out. I wonder who the wizard is. :) Nancy ***************************************
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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**********************************************Ouch! Roz put up a pretty good fight before lights out. I wonder who the wizard is. :) Nancy ***************************************
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Aww, thank you :-). It felt good to write some action after lots of talking, but I wanted to make sure it felt nasty, to contrast the silliness. It's been exciting to read your responses as you catch up.
Mike
Comment from royowen
Obviously she can fight, besting most her attackers, but where is Terence, I'm enjoying the action bits, probably easier to describe from a first person perspective than a global or third person one. But some great suspense and angst in this episode, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Obviously she can fight, besting most her attackers, but where is Terence, I'm enjoying the action bits, probably easier to describe from a first person perspective than a global or third person one. But some great suspense and angst in this episode, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you, Roy :-). I've always loved writing action sequences, although they can be challenging. First person does make things simpler, yes, as you can sink into deep pov and focus on the character's experience. Many thanks for the review!
Mike
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Well done
Comment from Maria Millsaps
Predictably, within a short space of time, it all went wronger than a politician's sex life. (please reread this sentence, it sounds awkward to me.)
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Predictably, within a short space of time, it all went wronger than a politician's sex life. (please reread this sentence, it sounds awkward to me.)
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you, Maria. I'll take another look.
Mike
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No problem.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am normally not one who likes to read tons of descriptions, but that being said you're a master at putting in the exact amount of description to keep the reader wanting more. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I am normally not one who likes to read tons of descriptions, but that being said you're a master at putting in the exact amount of description to keep the reader wanting more. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you, Barbara :-). I have one rule - never describe my main character in detail (only mention relevant features). That way, the reader is free to image the protagonist however suits them. In terms of the story itself, I try to intersperse description with dialogue, but sometimes it's fun to pause and paint a picture :-)
Mike
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Thank you. I have the same rule, although I ger many reviewers who want a detailed description.
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Yeah, me too, but I just know how annoying it is when I read a description that clashes with the image I've formed while I'm reading, so I try to stick to small hints (long hair, unusual walk, average etc) and only go into depth if it's relevant. Of course, not everyone's cup of tea!
Mike
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I tell my reviewers that what I imagine as beautiful and handsome may not be the same as theirs.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Definitely can not be permanent!! Someone will pay for laying her out, and I know just the right barbarian for the job!! Goodness me, she's a little demon when she gets started! Now I have to wait to read the next part. This one was wonderful. Well done!! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Definitely can not be permanent!! Someone will pay for laying her out, and I know just the right barbarian for the job!! Goodness me, she's a little demon when she gets started! Now I have to wait to read the next part. This one was wonderful. Well done!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you, Sandra :-). I love writing action scenes and it was high time this story got one. Hopefully, I also changed the tone a little, from flippant to perilous (temporarily:-)).
Mike
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces a combat prodded run embarked upon by the protagonist and Terence that ends up in the latter being found in a quagmire.
The work highlights their run towards an ongoing battle; Terence's increased sprinting to the battle ground occasioned by the protagonist's prodding, whose advancement is superstitiously stalled by a flurry of "speeding shapes," which culminates into a fierry fight that knocks her out.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with spiritual warfare.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces a combat prodded run embarked upon by the protagonist and Terence that ends up in the latter being found in a quagmire.
The work highlights their run towards an ongoing battle; Terence's increased sprinting to the battle ground occasioned by the protagonist's prodding, whose advancement is superstitiously stalled by a flurry of "speeding shapes," which culminates into a fierry fight that knocks her out.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with spiritual warfare.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you, Lloyd :-). I'm really glad you liked this chapter - a bit more action than previous ones!
Mike
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Remain Blessed.
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Remain Blessed.