When
A short rhymed poem18 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
I love everything about this poem, starting with the chalk drawing on a blackboard.
The simple facts are it was nice when everything seemed simple and right in its place, particularly when one in six.
Perfect metre and rhyme and a fine poem for children of all ages.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I love everything about this poem, starting with the chalk drawing on a blackboard.
The simple facts are it was nice when everything seemed simple and right in its place, particularly when one in six.
Perfect metre and rhyme and a fine poem for children of all ages.
Gloria
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Hi Gloria :)
Thank you so much for your feedback. I'm happy you enjoyed the read! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from lyenochka
You should have entered this into the Children's poem contest! This is adorable! It shows exactly how children draw (maybe not actually perceive) but you described the childlike generalizations which help them make sense of the overwhelming world.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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You should have entered this into the Children's poem contest! This is adorable! It shows exactly how children draw (maybe not actually perceive) but you described the childlike generalizations which help them make sense of the overwhelming world.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Hi Helen :) Thank you so much for your feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed the read. I came across the picture and it struck me that every house, every tree and every flower I ever drew when I was small looked just like the ones in the picture - it could have been one of my own pictures from years gone by. The pictures the kids in my class draw are very much the same too... our vision of the world at that age is so simple.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Shirley McLain
I love your cute poem. It was fun to read and had an excellent story about a six year old's art work. You did a good job. I didn't see any errors. Have a good evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I love your cute poem. It was fun to read and had an excellent story about a six year old's art work. You did a good job. I didn't see any errors. Have a good evening. Shirley
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Shirley :) I'm glad you enjoyed the read! Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Sally Law
I have been missing a simpler time. After spending a week at the shore with my grandchildren, life has slowed and simplified. I think I'm going to rest here awhile. Sending you my best for this delightful poem,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I have been missing a simpler time. After spending a week at the shore with my grandchildren, life has slowed and simplified. I think I'm going to rest here awhile. Sending you my best for this delightful poem,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I bet you're having the best time with your grandchildren :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback, Sal.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Father Flaps
Very nice, Debra. Whimsical! A bit of nonsense thrown in.
Life was definitely easier when we were young... no debt, no bills, no clock to punch. There was a brook out in the woods to fish. And we could play Hide n' Seek or Frozen Tag. And then there was fairy time. We'd watch for them... pixies. But all we'd see were fireflies. And we'd catch them in a bottle. Oh, I didn't have to comb my hair! I hadn't discovered that girls were different yet.
My favorite lines,
"The butterflies' antennas were
as large as lollipops"
and,
"The people all had bobbleheads
with arms and legs like sticks
and ev'rything made perfect sense
when I was only six."
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Very nice, Debra. Whimsical! A bit of nonsense thrown in.
Life was definitely easier when we were young... no debt, no bills, no clock to punch. There was a brook out in the woods to fish. And we could play Hide n' Seek or Frozen Tag. And then there was fairy time. We'd watch for them... pixies. But all we'd see were fireflies. And we'd catch them in a bottle. Oh, I didn't have to comb my hair! I hadn't discovered that girls were different yet.
My favorite lines,
"The butterflies' antennas were
as large as lollipops"
and,
"The people all had bobbleheads
with arms and legs like sticks
and ev'rything made perfect sense
when I was only six."
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Kimbob :) Glad you enjoyed the read!
I came across the picture and it struck me that every house, every tree and every flower I ever drew when I was small looked just like the ones in the picture - it could have been one of my own pictures from years gone by. The pictures the kids in my class draw are very much the same too... our vision of the world at that age is so simple.
Thanks for sharing some of your boyhood memories with me - it sounds like you had the best time! I'm thinking that 'Frozen Tag' is what we call 'Tiggy Statue' over here LOL. I spent most of my time outdoors too....still do if I can!
Have a great day! Debs x
Comment from jessizero
I could picture the drawings of a six-year-old when I was reading your poem. Everything did seem simpler then, and, yes, it made perfect sense. Thanks for sharing!
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reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I could picture the drawings of a six-year-old when I was reading your poem. Everything did seem simpler then, and, yes, it made perfect sense. Thanks for sharing!
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Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Jessi :) Glad you enjoyed the read! Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from robyn corum
Debra,
I like this so much! And ain't it the truth! My little grands are in such a hurry to grow up - hmmmm - never saw that before, right? When we all know there's nothing waiting there but hard work and trouble. hahaha The days you describe are magical! Loved it!
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Debra,
I like this so much! And ain't it the truth! My little grands are in such a hurry to grow up - hmmmm - never saw that before, right? When we all know there's nothing waiting there but hard work and trouble. hahaha The days you describe are magical! Loved it!
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Hi Robyn :) What were we thinking, wishing our lives away?!
Thank you so much for our great feedback and generous star rating - I appreciate both!! 😊
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Debra a good day to you. I hope all is well with you. I enjoyed your poetic offering. It was a fun and whimsical poem with a nice flow and good rhymes. Good job!
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reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Hello Debra a good day to you. I hope all is well with you. I enjoyed your poetic offering. It was a fun and whimsical poem with a nice flow and good rhymes. Good job!
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Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you so much for your feedback. I'm happy you enjoyed the read :) Best wishes, Debra
