When
A short rhymed poem18 total reviews
Comment from Lulube
Absolutely correct, so simple I can't remember a single thing, other than knowing what the photos are that my mom has. but to feel how i felt, doesn't compute. now if it was chaotic, I'd have a better chance at remembering it. lol enjoyed this playful poem, rhyming poem, it's so you
lulube
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Absolutely correct, so simple I can't remember a single thing, other than knowing what the photos are that my mom has. but to feel how i felt, doesn't compute. now if it was chaotic, I'd have a better chance at remembering it. lol enjoyed this playful poem, rhyming poem, it's so you
lulube
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Lulube :) Glad you enjoyed the read. Best wishes as always, Debra
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Mama Baer
Debra, I absolutely LOVE this piece!! You captured it p-e-r-f-e-c-t-l-y. It is as if you knew me when I was six, hehe. And the illustration to match makes for a complete set. This made me smile with glee! May was such a busy month for me; I have not written a thing! I must get back to it. Thanks for this wonderful read.
Sending well wishes!
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Debra, I absolutely LOVE this piece!! You captured it p-e-r-f-e-c-t-l-y. It is as if you knew me when I was six, hehe. And the illustration to match makes for a complete set. This made me smile with glee! May was such a busy month for me; I have not written a thing! I must get back to it. Thanks for this wonderful read.
Sending well wishes!
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Hi Mama Baer :) Thank you so much for your enthusiastic feedback and generous star rating!! I'm really happy you enjoyed the read :)
Now, it's time for you to put pen to paper! Have a happy weekend... Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Aussie
If only we could return to those perfect days when we were children. Our days were simple, lots of play and mother chasing us every day. If only we could go back in time. Being an adult ain't fine. :-(
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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If only we could return to those perfect days when we were children. Our days were simple, lots of play and mother chasing us every day. If only we could go back in time. Being an adult ain't fine. :-(
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you for your feedback, Aussie :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Val Crisson
Love this, and at this time in history I am so glad to think of older times. When life was so much more predictable. Maybe "when I was six" is what we all should focus on. I am sorry, but school murders in Texas have me very sad. Nice job on this one
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Love this, and at this time in history I am so glad to think of older times. When life was so much more predictable. Maybe "when I was six" is what we all should focus on. I am sorry, but school murders in Texas have me very sad. Nice job on this one
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Val :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from AP Apgar
I like this poem- good presentation picture- poem is sequenced well and flows well - painting a picture of a make believe world where everything is perfect using recognizable child icons eg butterflies, counting sheep jumping clouds to fall asleep- bobble heads and arms like sticks- all perfect- when you're 6- and 76
Good job
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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I like this poem- good presentation picture- poem is sequenced well and flows well - painting a picture of a make believe world where everything is perfect using recognizable child icons eg butterflies, counting sheep jumping clouds to fall asleep- bobble heads and arms like sticks- all perfect- when you're 6- and 76
Good job
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you so much, AP :) Glad you enjoyed the read. Best wishes, Debra
Comment from karenina
No limerick? (smile)
I see you've exorcised the Limerick imp for now! (I loved each one!)
This! Though many would find it doubtful, despite the decades upon decades I well remember when I was six.
I pondered nothing. I soaked up life like a sponge and if squeezed would drip joy!
So it is with this poem!
I remember thinking, at six, on my First Holy Communion Sunday--why in the wordle were there people about mowing lawns? Shuffling down sidewalks with groceries? Did they not know it was my day???
Ah, to be young...
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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No limerick? (smile)
I see you've exorcised the Limerick imp for now! (I loved each one!)
This! Though many would find it doubtful, despite the decades upon decades I well remember when I was six.
I pondered nothing. I soaked up life like a sponge and if squeezed would drip joy!
So it is with this poem!
I remember thinking, at six, on my First Holy Communion Sunday--why in the wordle were there people about mowing lawns? Shuffling down sidewalks with groceries? Did they not know it was my day???
Ah, to be young...
Karenina
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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LOL! I'm glad you enjoyed this one, Karenina :)
The limerick is still lurking, waiting to pounce!
Thank you for your feedback and have a wonderful day :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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Love to see little children still lost in that place where they are the center of the universe! :)
Comment from emmaysavage
I really liked your treatment of this subject, and the way the art became an integral part of it. The language captures childhood well and takes me back to my own six year old self
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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I really liked your treatment of this subject, and the way the art became an integral part of it. The language captures childhood well and takes me back to my own six year old self
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Carlos' girl
This is superb poetry. The images you conjure up are so perfect and the rhymes too. You have crafted an adorable poem here. Congratulations Debra! A joy to read.
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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This is superb poetry. The images you conjure up are so perfect and the rhymes too. You have crafted an adorable poem here. Congratulations Debra! A joy to read.
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Carlos' girl, for your lovely feedback and generous star rating :) I'm appreciative of both and I'm glad you enjoyed the read! Best wishes, Debra
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Very welcome
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good poem. I especially liked the last line and the visual you selected. It all makes sense. However, I do feel the third stanza/verse with the butterfly is a stanza that could stand some tweaking. Overall, good work.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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This is a good poem. I especially liked the last line and the visual you selected. It all makes sense. However, I do feel the third stanza/verse with the butterfly is a stanza that could stand some tweaking. Overall, good work.
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Hello Sandra :) Thank you for your feedback. I agree with you about the third stanza!
Best wishes, Debra
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a cute rhyming poem Debra and it flows like a dream with dreamy sentiments too. Much enjoyed and if only life was this simple in adulthood, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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This is a cute rhyming poem Debra and it flows like a dream with dreamy sentiments too. Much enjoyed and if only life was this simple in adulthood, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Hello Dolly :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and for the pretty stars! I appreciate both and am happy you enjoyed the read :) Best wishes as always, Debra xx
