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Our Armed Forces Day 2022

This is an honoring of Armed Forces Day

4 total reviews 
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Excellent
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We should all be proud and thankful for those of us who stand in harm's way to preserve our freedom.

1st Para, 3rd sentence "bread basket" should be "breadbasket"
1st Para, 3rd sentence: "MidWest" should be "Midwest"
Paragraph spacing would help the read a great deal.

I am from the Viet Name era, and it wasn't really like your story when I came home, it should have been though.

Nice sentiment.

 Comment Written 26-May-2022


reply by the author on 26-May-2022
    Thank you so much, Gary.
    I'm going to make the grammar corrections soon,
    thank you for helping me with that. If you want to,
    send me your experience
    story. I really appreciate the
    5 stars. Blessings to you ~
reply by GARY MACLEAN on 26-May-2022
reply by GARY MACLEAN on 26-May-2022
    I try my best not to re-visit my time in the military. It was hideous. Nothing against the US, it's just the timing of my being drafted. The enemy hated us then we come home, and our own people hated us. There was no winning for Viet Nam vets.
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
    Thank you, Gary, for the constructive
    grammar corrections. Us in America
    can never repay all our war Veteran's
    and our war fallen. I have every
    respect for all of you. Thank you. ~
Comment from Beri Bee
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Dear Regina, Sometimes I have a hard time reading Memorial and Veterans' Day poems and prose. But you have told so much truth here in real terms, real relations, real process of joining an belonging. Many of my patients over the years are veterans, from every war. I've seen pride and shame and everything in between. One thing I always have is respect. I've helped people get meddles that were promised but never received, and restitution for agent orange exposure. And you know what else? The wives and widows have been the kindest to me than any other group! I've always wondered if it was a southern thing, since so many soldiers passed through Fort Ord from the south and settled here. After reading your piece, I think it's part of what it means to be military. Thank you for credit to the allies and for the cause of the higher road.

 Comment Written 23-May-2022


reply by the author on 24-May-2022
    Thank you, Beri! I really
    appreciate the 6 stars. Our
    U.S. government dragged its
    feet with the Atomic vets,
    Agent Orange vets, and our
    Burn pit vets. The VA system
    needed many improvements.
    The U.S. government has
    finally, after being exposed,
    come around for some of
    our sick veterans. Bless you
    for helping them. You're
    very kind. Blessings to you.
Comment from lancellot
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While, I commend those who fight and serve our country, the members of your family as well, this entry has issues. Form and format are the first to come to mind. Paragraph structure, and spacings. Also, this is missing the elements needed for a true 'story'. You make excellent points and statements but some reorganization, plotting and characters are needed.

 Comment Written 23-May-2022


reply by the author on 24-May-2022
    Thank you, lancellot. Your
    constructive criticism is
    much appreciated. All the best. ~
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Excellent
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces the protagonist's patriotic salute to the American and Allies Armed Forces.

The work highlights sacrifices made by families, and individuals to the course of regional and global peace.

The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with jettisoned freedom in honour of achieving global peace.

 Comment Written 23-May-2022


reply by the author on 24-May-2022
    Thank you, Lloyd, for the
    generous review with 5 stars.
    It's very kind of you. Have a
    creative week. All the best. ~
reply by Lloyd T. Okoko on 24-May-2022
    Remain Blessed.