"Poetry from the Broken Heart"
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Comment from Fleedleflump
Your slightly scattered word style works perfectly for this, emulating the chaos and urgency, the sheer speed thoughts can reach in crisis mode. This was affecting and effective.
Mike
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Your slightly scattered word style works perfectly for this, emulating the chaos and urgency, the sheer speed thoughts can reach in crisis mode. This was affecting and effective.
Mike
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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I guess if I wanted to write it as a rap it would come up well too?
But the seriousness and the importance is what will make this piece shine the way it needs to.
Thanks Fleedleflump,
Doctor Ricky
Comment from leather
I think your commentary was as strong or even stronger than your poem. I did not quite understand the line, "Umbilical fluid out my ears." But I don't want an explanation. I am so sorry for your loss and the circumstances surrounding it.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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I think your commentary was as strong or even stronger than your poem. I did not quite understand the line, "Umbilical fluid out my ears." But I don't want an explanation. I am so sorry for your loss and the circumstances surrounding it.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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That whole incident that night would be enough to give a parent nightmares the rest of their life.
I can handle that myself now.
Basically it's going on two decades.
Yes, and grieve with it and educate with it.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky