Show, Don't Tell - part IX
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Comment from Malcolm Rothery
I have learnt a great deal from your Show Don't Tell series. You have great insight and should consider making a book out of it. So much better than picking up some huge self-help book. Thank you.
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reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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I have learnt a great deal from your Show Don't Tell series. You have great insight and should consider making a book out of it. So much better than picking up some huge self-help book. Thank you.
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Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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I think the bite-size presentation helps! lol
Comment from Fleedleflump
You have a friendly tone and clear methods of expression, helping to impart the lessons here. Some solid examples did a good job of illustrating your points.
A well written and informative article!
Spag notes:
'through a little spanner' - should be 'throw'
'One of the best ways of doing so it to use it' - the first 'it' should be 'is'
'or lead to the thins the reader (and characters) care about.' - 'thins' should be 'things'
'There's enough information of the reader to get the scene' - should be 'for the reader'
'The less importance something is to the story' - either 'is' should be 'has' or 'importance' should be 'important'
'Purists of showing can always find sensory ways of where and when a scene takes place' - feels as though it's missing 'describing' or 'letting us know'' before 'where'
I hope some of that helps :-)
Mike
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reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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You have a friendly tone and clear methods of expression, helping to impart the lessons here. Some solid examples did a good job of illustrating your points.
A well written and informative article!
Spag notes:
'through a little spanner' - should be 'throw'
'One of the best ways of doing so it to use it' - the first 'it' should be 'is'
'or lead to the thins the reader (and characters) care about.' - 'thins' should be 'things'
'There's enough information of the reader to get the scene' - should be 'for the reader'
'The less importance something is to the story' - either 'is' should be 'has' or 'importance' should be 'important'
'Purists of showing can always find sensory ways of where and when a scene takes place' - feels as though it's missing 'describing' or 'letting us know'' before 'where'
I hope some of that helps :-)
Mike
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Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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That's superb, mate. Cheers
