"Poetry from the Broken Heart"
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Comment from country ranch writer
524/22-----+4:49pm
This is such a sad situation, what in the heck were you thinking ?you of all people bringing a drug addict into your home! And, letting your own daughter !shoot up! Damn
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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524/22-----+4:49pm
This is such a sad situation, what in the heck were you thinking ?you of all people bringing a drug addict into your home! And, letting your own daughter !shoot up! Damn
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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The ending will be coming soon be patient!
You will be highly surprised!
Doctor Ricky
Comment from country ranch writer
524/22-----+4:49pm
This is such a sad situation, what in the heck were you thinking ?you of all people bringing a drug addict into your home! And, letting your own daughter !shoot up! Damn
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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524/22-----+4:49pm
This is such a sad situation, what in the heck were you thinking ?you of all people bringing a drug addict into your home! And, letting your own daughter !shoot up! Damn
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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What you got to realize is I had no idea.
True I made the mistake bringing him in my house but I wasn't bringing him in my house for him to turn my daughter into a heroin addict it was because he was lonely and I figured he'd stay a couple hours and talk to her and she could help him.
I will finish this tomorrow and you will see the results thanks for your review.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The topic you are addressing may be healing for readers who can identify. They may identify with the addict, or the loved ones who just don't know what to do. Well expressed.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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The topic you are addressing may be healing for readers who can identify. They may identify with the addict, or the loved ones who just don't know what to do. Well expressed.
Comment Written 22-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Well thank you very much Liz for stopping by and reading my work.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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***You're welcome***
Comment from B_A_Duga
There are several spots where there is a word misspelled or replaced with a different word. Such as 'hard sink and pumping functions'. I am not sure exactly what that is referring to except 'heart sync'? And 'parents had a very young age' should have been 'parents at a very young age'. Also, 'girl into a strong' perhaps 'grew into a strong'? And 'it's very own strength' should have been 'his very own strength'. Should have used a '.' instead of a '?' at the end of 'found his drug of relief'. Instead of 'relief' might have been better to use 'choice'.
The end kind of threw me. I guess your daughter either helped this guy or he got her hooked on drugs or killed her.
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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There are several spots where there is a word misspelled or replaced with a different word. Such as 'hard sink and pumping functions'. I am not sure exactly what that is referring to except 'heart sync'? And 'parents had a very young age' should have been 'parents at a very young age'. Also, 'girl into a strong' perhaps 'grew into a strong'? And 'it's very own strength' should have been 'his very own strength'. Should have used a '.' instead of a '?' at the end of 'found his drug of relief'. Instead of 'relief' might have been better to use 'choice'.
The end kind of threw me. I guess your daughter either helped this guy or he got her hooked on drugs or killed her.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Apparently you don't understand what I'm writing which is quite all right.
I never chastise anybody's writing based on the way they want me to write or grammar issues.
There Are Young writers on this site and it's not appropriate for them.
Just my own personal opinion.
Now we have two choices I can either block you or you can reread this and then give me another opinion and another rating.
My work here on Fanstory is always exceptionally and if there's a couple of grammar issues.
it's because I didn't get a chance to edit this I was in a club listening to music and having a beer.
Doctor Ricky 1024