"Poetry from the Broken Heart"
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Comment from joann r romei
I always enjoy your writing and tribute to your son, it touches the heart in many ways, I remember watching that movie as a child and would be afraid of the fighting skeletons.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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I always enjoy your writing and tribute to your son, it touches the heart in many ways, I remember watching that movie as a child and would be afraid of the fighting skeletons.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Why thank you for your comment and yes it was a great movie!
Ricky
Comment from R. Marc Goodson
Wow! There's a lot in this piece of writing. Like all writing, it stems from our own life experiences, and is modified to fit the medium (writing.)
I have some suggestions: "The movie entitled and released on June 19th, 1963." This line is superfluous, all you need is the name of the film.
And, in this line, "Golden Fleece.
(To say the least!)
"Jason and the Argonauts" The parentheses interfere with the reading. Avoid using them in this type of writing.
Misspell here: "Of he Pitman movie Theater"
Keep writing...and keep editing. It's the editing part where we really learn.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Wow! There's a lot in this piece of writing. Like all writing, it stems from our own life experiences, and is modified to fit the medium (writing.)
I have some suggestions: "The movie entitled and released on June 19th, 1963." This line is superfluous, all you need is the name of the film.
And, in this line, "Golden Fleece.
(To say the least!)
"Jason and the Argonauts" The parentheses interfere with the reading. Avoid using them in this type of writing.
Misspell here: "Of he Pitman movie Theater"
Keep writing...and keep editing. It's the editing part where we really learn.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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The real writing in is learning to present the content not the context.
That's why I've written over 850 books and manuscripts but I've held off of my publishing until recently.
Always remember do not give lesser reviews just for not crossing the key and dotting the eyes Marn.
For Young writers here on site.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
"Still Preaching the Choir Here at Fanstory"
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ok...I think...maybe.