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Papal Fighter 2: Kremlin Kombat

A (VERY) Irreverent short script

9 total reviews 
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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Quite an image, almost tongue in cheek humor. Certainly deserves a gallows chuckle: This game is stupid. I don't want to knock you over with lame effects. I want to tear out your spine and strangle you with the cord." I suppose watching it on the screen, might be less attractive, but your way of having the characters is amusing to me: "Yes, agree totes. Switch to Mortal Kombat so I can wear your face and make Russian dolls from your organs." Quite an ending...or maybe only the beginning.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
    Oh, you dug out an older one :-). I had no chance in the contest I wrote this for - way too left field for most voters, lol. I did have a great time writing it, though. Thanks so much for the great comments!

    Mike
Comment from Bill Schott
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This satire of the meetings between the Pope and the Russian religious leader, as seen through the techno-battles of gamers, is fun and entertaining.

 Comment Written 23-May-2022


reply by the author on 23-May-2022
    Thanks Bill :-). I think I went a bit too mad for the contest, but I had a lot of fun writing it!
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
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I know all the games mentioned, I just haven't played them. I'm a RuneScape guy. The dialogue sounds something like what I hear when my grandson is playing though. I noted several spelling and grammatical errors, but I chalked them up to "conversational liberties".

Surprising ending. How and why did "real-life" enforcement get involved.

Anyway, good, fun read.

 Comment Written 23-May-2022


reply by the author on 23-May-2022
    The real life law enforcement is based on a real phenomenon of online gamers calling in false police reports of hostage situations at their opponents' houses. Terrifying thought! I figured, if one of these two was going to do it, it'd be the Russian leader. Bit on the nose, I know :-). Thanks for the great review!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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What can I say not understanding what is in play here. I thought these would be about the Pope of Rome. ..........................................................................

 Comment Written 23-May-2022


reply by the author on 23-May-2022
    Thanks, Tom. I think I went a bit too left field with this entry :-)
Comment from HarambeForPresident
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Well done with this entertaining and highly creative approach to the challenge. It's been a while since I did FPS (Halo 2 probably) so this was a helpful refresher on appropriate gaming lingo. Hopefully Francis gets some frags from inside his Russian prison cell, if he is taken alive.

The only thing I would suggest for clarity is to make sure that all of your non-speaking action sequences are either in parentheses or italicized or something, to fully delineate them from the spoken lines. you do this with about half of the sequences I think.

Thanks for a great read and for making this contest great.


 Comment Written 22-May-2022


reply by the author on 23-May-2022
    Noted and implemented :-). I had a lot of fun writing this. I was worried I'd been a bit too risque but perhaps it's the other way around!

    Many thanks for the great fun contest prompt!
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
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I enjoyed reading this script. This is well written and somewhat
graphic, but not offensive. Although I can't relate, my kids are
gamers, so I was able to follow the jargon.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thank you:-). I still game a bit but the rage you see in online games is astonishing and puts me off playing with others. As such, it seemed the perfect setting for the contest, which required a game that gets out of control.

    Mike
Comment from LisaD123
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I really enjoyed reading this. The language was authentic and demonstrated the character's personalities clearly. The banter between them was very authentic and the reader has a strong sense of what is going on in the games. I would love to watch this in a cinema to get the full sense of the character's emotions. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-May-2022


reply by the author on 20-May-2022
    Thanks, Lisa. I might have to tone down some of the references for the worldwide release, but we'll see :-)
Comment from John Ciarmello
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It was exciting and clever. I'd like to be able to see Francis playing this game. It certainly has met all the qualifications for the contest. I wish you much success.

 Comment Written 20-May-2022


reply by the author on 20-May-2022
    Thanks so much, John. I got to exercise my zany side writing this!
Comment from royowen
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I must admit, I've never played on an Xbox so I recognise any of the language, but I do know bad language, I was a long time competitive sportsman, the closest I've got is Wii. Well done, a well crafted script, whic are quite rare, beautifully written, good luck, blessings

 Comment Written 20-May-2022


reply by the author on 20-May-2022
    Thanks so much, Roy! I let loose a bit with this one so hopefully won't offend anybody. Really happy you enjoyed it :-)
reply by royowen on 20-May-2022
    I was fine with it