Wedding Day Bonus
A short tale about step-brothers22 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I guess the stepbrother narrator made sure that there wouldn't be anyone to outshine him in dancing at the wedding. I was surprised that the football was so carefully planted even with the wedding preparations to pack. That narrator must have had planned ahead! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I guess the stepbrother narrator made sure that there wouldn't be anyone to outshine him in dancing at the wedding. I was surprised that the football was so carefully planted even with the wedding preparations to pack. That narrator must have had planned ahead! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Hi, lyenochka. Thank you so much for being such a supportive fan of my writing. This story almost got away from me because of ALL I wanted to say about the brothers. I may extend it into a "family" story in the near future. Rod
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That would be great! It feels like a longer story wanting to be told.
Comment from royowen
What an interesting thing, one's new "brother" is well aware of what's going on, nut not our hazy hero, but isn't that always the case? This is an amazing thing, well done Rod, this is an excellent post, good luck blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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What an interesting thing, one's new "brother" is well aware of what's going on, nut not our hazy hero, but isn't that always the case? This is an amazing thing, well done Rod, this is an excellent post, good luck blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my story, Roy. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
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Most welcome
Comment from Mark D. R.
I enjoyed this Rod!
It would be funnier if Davy was a female! Regardless, it is a good story you composed. The 'twist' at the end is really terrific writing.
Mark
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I enjoyed this Rod!
It would be funnier if Davy was a female! Regardless, it is a good story you composed. The 'twist' at the end is really terrific writing.
Mark
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you so much for reviewing my story, Mark. I thought about making Davy a "sister," butI wanted to stay with the theme of the artwork. I?m glad you enjoyed the ending. Rod
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well was there are pre planning here, or not? I enjoyed your
contest entry. You led readers along, then . . wow, a great
twist. All in all it turned out to be a great bonding experience.
Best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Well was there are pre planning here, or not? I enjoyed your
contest entry. You led readers along, then . . wow, a great
twist. All in all it turned out to be a great bonding experience.
Best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Jan, for your enthusiastic review of my shortie.. Rod
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A VERY intriguing and interesting piece of flash fiction. It deserves six stars. You implied a lot of underlying emotions and relational issues below the surface of the action and the conversation. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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A VERY intriguing and interesting piece of flash fiction. It deserves six stars. You implied a lot of underlying emotions and relational issues below the surface of the action and the conversation. Well done.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you very much, Theodore, for the high praise of my shortie and the virtual six-star rating. It was a fun piece to write because of the "relational issues below the surface." Rod
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I really liked this story with everything necessary for a great story, including characters, setting, plot, even dialogue. I hope it does really well in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I really liked this story with everything necessary for a great story, including characters, setting, plot, even dialogue. I hope it does really well in the contest!
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I really appreciate your enthusiastic response to my story, Verna. Thank you so much for sharing. Rod
Comment from Jay Squires
Cleverly written story. I hate to tell you, but if the contest uses MS word (which I believe is the same that FS word count shows, you will have 146 words. You have four words that are hyphenated that Apple pages counts as double words, but MS Word & FS count as single words. I do believe that the conest will use MS Word for their counting. I hope I'm wrong. Of course if you find I am right, you can add four more words before the contest closes, which shouldn't be too hard.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Cleverly written story. I hate to tell you, but if the contest uses MS word (which I believe is the same that FS word count shows, you will have 146 words. You have four words that are hyphenated that Apple pages counts as double words, but MS Word & FS count as single words. I do believe that the conest will use MS Word for their counting. I hope I'm wrong. Of course if you find I am right, you can add four more words before the contest closes, which shouldn't be too hard.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you, Jay, for sharing and praising my story. I also appreciate your suggestion. In previous contests I have told them about Apple Pages whose word count they accepted. We?ll see if that still holds true. Rod
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's always a pleasure to look up and find your name in my inbox, knowing that I'm in for a treat of a story to read. The subtle way you slide rich information into your sentences makes me think of those like Ezra Pound, and maybe Don Delillo. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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It's always a pleasure to look up and find your name in my inbox, knowing that I'm in for a treat of a story to read. The subtle way you slide rich information into your sentences makes me think of those like Ezra Pound, and maybe Don Delillo. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Hi, Ric. I really appreciate your fan loyalty, my friend, and your encouragement. This story became increasingly more fun to write as I got to know my characters. Rod
Comment from jessizero
That was a very sweet story! I enjoyed it very much. I know that blending families can go awry, so I am glad this one went well. Thank you for sharing this here.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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That was a very sweet story! I enjoyed it very much. I know that blending families can go awry, so I am glad this one went well. Thank you for sharing this here.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my shortie, jessizero. It was fun to write. Rod
Comment from Anne Johnston
I love your story, a great entry for the contest. Sounds like these two boys are going to get along fine as their family situation changes. Very well written, a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I love your story, a great entry for the contest. Sounds like these two boys are going to get along fine as their family situation changes. Very well written, a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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What a pleasure to hear a long-time reviewer like yourself say you LOVED my story, Anne. Thank you so much for sharing and your enthusiastic response. Rod
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You are very welcome, Rod
