Wedding Day Bonus
A short tale about step-brothers22 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your flash fiction entry is well written, lighthearted, and realistic. Your story builds in suspense as it progresses, and has an unexpected but delightful and satisfying ending. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Your flash fiction entry is well written, lighthearted, and realistic. Your story builds in suspense as it progresses, and has an unexpected but delightful and satisfying ending. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you so much, LJbutterfly, for your very encouraging review of my shortie. I am delighted you enjoyed it. Rod
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Hello, Rod,
I like your sweet family story. Your concise use of 150 words is great. The end has great humor.
Good luck with this one, Rod!
Great work
Ps I'm working on a story of my own; prose is difficult for me.
Have a nice day.
Cindy
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Hello, Rod,
I like your sweet family story. Your concise use of 150 words is great. The end has great humor.
Good luck with this one, Rod!
Great work
Ps I'm working on a story of my own; prose is difficult for me.
Have a nice day.
Cindy
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you very much for sharing my story, Cindy. I am so pleased you enjoyed its humor. If writing prose is difficult for you, may I suggest using one of FanStory?s prompts. Usually they give enough SPECIFIC details to get you going. Knowing the maximum word count really helps me. It?s a lot easier to trim words than add them. Rod
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Thank you for your suggestion, Rod.
I will try some flash fiction again.
Blessings to you.
Stay healthy 😊,
Cindy
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading this flash story. I am a fan of this genre to both read and write. Often times these can read awkwardly, however this does not. You did a creative job with the prompt , as this is a good contest entry that should do well.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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I enjoyed reading this flash story. I am a fan of this genre to both read and write. Often times these can read awkwardly, however this does not. You did a creative job with the prompt , as this is a good contest entry that should do well.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you so much for your most encouraging review of my shortie. Rod
Comment from Dick Waters
An extremely nice job on this story.
It put a smile on my face.
I miss not having any siblings, but stories like this do give me a chance.
Good to see one of your stories again.
Best regards,
Dick
(Thanks for the moolah)
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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An extremely nice job on this story.
It put a smile on my face.
I miss not having any siblings, but stories like this do give me a chance.
Good to see one of your stories again.
Best regards,
Dick
(Thanks for the moolah)
Comment Written 22-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Hi, Dick. It?s so good to hear from you again and receive all those kudos AND bright stars. Many thanks for both. Rod
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Rod,
Most people think more about the adults when a marriage brings kids together. I'm sure that kids have a difficult time bonding... step brothers and step sisters. Some will be able to bridge the gap. Some won't. Here, there's definitely some animosity towards Davy. But after success with his mischievous plan (muddy pants and sprained ankle) while playing catch with a football, and noting the good humor of his new step-brother riding joyfully on his back, referring to him as "Bro" and his father as "Dad", I think things will work out after all between the two.
Nice entry for the Flash Fiction! Good Luck!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Hi Rod,
Most people think more about the adults when a marriage brings kids together. I'm sure that kids have a difficult time bonding... step brothers and step sisters. Some will be able to bridge the gap. Some won't. Here, there's definitely some animosity towards Davy. But after success with his mischievous plan (muddy pants and sprained ankle) while playing catch with a football, and noting the good humor of his new step-brother riding joyfully on his back, referring to him as "Bro" and his father as "Dad", I think things will work out after all between the two.
Nice entry for the Flash Fiction! Good Luck!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 22-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Thank you, Kimbob, for taking the time to comment on my shortie so extensively. I agree with your conclusion that things will work out between the two step-brothers. Rod.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Rod
Smiles to the ending of your great story making amends with your half brother. I liked how you got in 150 words and how well you wrote your Flash fiction.
Gert
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Rod
Smiles to the ending of your great story making amends with your half brother. I liked how you got in 150 words and how well you wrote your Flash fiction.
Gert
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Hi, Gert. I am so pleased you enjoyed my shortie. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Sugarray77
I like this one Rod. The hidden affection of two boys bonding into brotherhood is precious and a really good idea for a theme. 150 words is a challenge, but you wrote an excellent piece within the limits. Good luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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I like this one Rod. The hidden affection of two boys bonding into brotherhood is precious and a really good idea for a theme. 150 words is a challenge, but you wrote an excellent piece within the limits. Good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Melissa, thank you so much for your marvelous response to my shortie. Those six bright stars are much appreciated. Rod
Comment from Judy Lawless
In a flash the step-brothers became allies. This is a brilliant piece of writing, Rob. The lead up to the surprise ending is well described. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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In a flash the step-brothers became allies. This is a brilliant piece of writing, Rob. The lead up to the surprise ending is well described. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thank you very much, Judy, for your high praise of my shortie. Rod
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You're very welcome, Rod.
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Comment from Wendy G
Turns out this accident was a good thing in the bonding of these two new step-brothers, otherwise there might have been on-going resentment and /or annoyance at the wedding! And the step-son was able to call him "Dad" straight off. Well written story, with a great ending for the Flash Fiction. best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Turns out this accident was a good thing in the bonding of these two new step-brothers, otherwise there might have been on-going resentment and /or annoyance at the wedding! And the step-son was able to call him "Dad" straight off. Well written story, with a great ending for the Flash Fiction. best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thank you very much, Wendy, for your great response to my story. Rod
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A short story of brothers soon fitting into their roles and getting on with life and unaffected by the changes. If life is good then small changes don't interrupt life, a fine write Rod, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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A short story of brothers soon fitting into their roles and getting on with life and unaffected by the changes. If life is good then small changes don't interrupt life, a fine write Rod, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thank you very much, Dolly, for sharing and praising my shortie. Rod
