New Furrow
100 word Dash13 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, New Furrow, has the required word count and seems to find the well-worked plowman in transition from 'he who does' to 'he who teaches'.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This one-hundred-word story, New Furrow, has the required word count and seems to find the well-worked plowman in transition from 'he who does' to 'he who teaches'.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Tom Horonzy
At his age, help or not I thought better ending was a rich man with a tote of cash asking him if what he had was enough to purchase what he had plowed.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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At his age, help or not I thought better ending was a rich man with a tote of cash asking him if what he had was enough to purchase what he had plowed.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was excellent. You have to have a diploma for everything these days! But this one came just in time for the James. He can sit back and let the students take over while he watches them!!! Lol. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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That was excellent. You have to have a diploma for everything these days! But this one came just in time for the James. He can sit back and let the students take over while he watches them!!! Lol. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Loved this review zanya
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
You satisfied the 100-word requirement on the nose while supplying main character (James), setting (plow field), conflict (tired of plowing), resolution (plow for instruction).
13th sentence: Mr should have a period (Mr.)
Good job, good story.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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You satisfied the 100-word requirement on the nose while supplying main character (James), setting (plow field), conflict (tired of plowing), resolution (plow for instruction).
13th sentence: Mr should have a period (Mr.)
Good job, good story.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a good one. I might offer one change. I would have the last sentence read, "Diplomas in plowing, is it?" Either way is fine. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This is a good one. I might offer one change. I would have the last sentence read, "Diplomas in plowing, is it?" Either way is fine. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
You did a great job with the prompt, very creative. You managed to tell a complete story only using 100 words. Not easy to do, but you did it well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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You did a great job with the prompt, very creative. You managed to tell a complete story only using 100 words. Not easy to do, but you did it well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Great review zanya
Comment from dmt1967
This story made me smile as, when I was at college, the school had a farming degree and ploughing was one of the modules. I thought this story very inventive. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This story made me smile as, when I was at college, the school had a farming degree and ploughing was one of the modules. I thought this story very inventive. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice start to a story. Pretty tough for this one to fit one hundred words.
I see the character and setting okay, thanks largely to the photograph. I'm not sure without it. And the conflict is the work v. his age and physical condition.
But I don't think the resolution resolved anything, just added to his workload.
Best wishes and good luck.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Nice start to a story. Pretty tough for this one to fit one hundred words.
I see the character and setting okay, thanks largely to the photograph. I'm not sure without it. And the conflict is the work v. his age and physical condition.
But I don't think the resolution resolved anything, just added to his workload.
Best wishes and good luck.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a nice wee piece for the competition.
he muttered,' how long more can I do this, at seventy?'- space needs to be before the opening speech mark rather than after it.
Morning Mr Smith,' the man said:
'I'm from the Agri department.- no need for the colon here. Just use a period or comma. Same thing for the following dialogue.
I mentioned the colon thing mainly for consistentency. In the first dialogue you use commas then switch to colon usage. It's always best to present these things in the same manner.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Hi there,
This is a nice wee piece for the competition.
he muttered,' how long more can I do this, at seventy?'- space needs to be before the opening speech mark rather than after it.
Morning Mr Smith,' the man said:
'I'm from the Agri department.- no need for the colon here. Just use a period or comma. Same thing for the following dialogue.
I mentioned the colon thing mainly for consistentency. In the first dialogue you use commas then switch to colon usage. It's always best to present these things in the same manner.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thanks for reading & SPAGS reminder zanya
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent writing. Your descriptive words set the scene, and you set up the problem as well as created a suitable solution. To this you added humour. Very well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Excellent writing. Your descriptive words set the scene, and you set up the problem as well as created a suitable solution. To this you added humour. Very well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Great reveiw zanya
