Another Life
Life must be better after death.39 total reviews
Comment from Carlos' girl
Now Im confused. You were playing hopscotch with the devil in some other poem. Now you want eternal life? So come on come on make up your mind. I like that you get to have a can of Sprite with you on the journey. Such a juxtaposition to the " perc". Not to be confused with "perp". Badass vocabulary. Don't worry. We all know what a badass you are lol
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Now Im confused. You were playing hopscotch with the devil in some other poem. Now you want eternal life? So come on come on make up your mind. I like that you get to have a can of Sprite with you on the journey. Such a juxtaposition to the " perc". Not to be confused with "perp". Badass vocabulary. Don't worry. We all know what a badass you are lol
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Not eternal life but freedom from pain, sufferings and all my burdens which has become to much. Everything I write is all telling my story and struggles. Lol 😆 I'm glad you think I'm a badass. Thanks for your continous reviews.
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If paradise isn't eternal life than i guess you just want to sleep. Eat sleep therapy at fanstory repeat. Sounds like you found what you want. Then again alot of people here for the " therapy". Merciful God
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Maybe simply a place of peace is what you desire. I hope you attain it. Stay on your healing path.
Comment from Fleedleflump
As always, this is packed full of strong statements that cut to the heart of a feeling. I particularly love the path of death without a scout - mystery can be both terrifying and hold a compelling allure. This is why I think the Christian idea of Heaven/paradise can be dangerous, if it makes death seem like a happy transition.
Once again, you've inspired thoughts :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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As always, this is packed full of strong statements that cut to the heart of a feeling. I particularly love the path of death without a scout - mystery can be both terrifying and hold a compelling allure. This is why I think the Christian idea of Heaven/paradise can be dangerous, if it makes death seem like a happy transition.
Once again, you've inspired thoughts :-)
Mike
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Yes it can be dangerous. Heaven is the place to be if you living in hell on earth. Hell is a condition not a place. I think that might be the title of my next poem.
Comment from dmt1967
This touched my heart and I felt every word. No one understands the pain mentally ill people go through. They think it is all in our heads. I wish that were true and I could turn it off any time I want. Thank you for sharing and take care.
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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This touched my heart and I felt every word. No one understands the pain mentally ill people go through. They think it is all in our heads. I wish that were true and I could turn it off any time I want. Thank you for sharing and take care.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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I'm glad it touched you. You are welcome . Thanks for your feedback.
Comment from karenina
I feel you. Keep sitting on that edge of a ridge.
It's mad scary.
But it's life.
You have SO much talent!
SO much to share!
Channel that... Speak for those who couldn't hold on...and in doing so save the lives of those who, like you, feel so much pain that death feels like a solution.
It's not, Charity.
I have lost five in my family to suicide.
It's not the way out...it's just the hard way down.
Live for your poetry slams!!!
Move us!
Karenina
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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I feel you. Keep sitting on that edge of a ridge.
It's mad scary.
But it's life.
You have SO much talent!
SO much to share!
Channel that... Speak for those who couldn't hold on...and in doing so save the lives of those who, like you, feel so much pain that death feels like a solution.
It's not, Charity.
I have lost five in my family to suicide.
It's not the way out...it's just the hard way down.
Live for your poetry slams!!!
Move us!
Karenina
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Your words are always and encouraging. 5 family members to suicide. I can't even imagine how you dealt with that. Yes I'm staying alive for my fans and for the life of the trenches story to be told. Thanks my friend. I'm glad you think I have so much talent. Thank you for continuing to read every poem I write.
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I try never to miss one. That's because you always write the real world-- No fluff and stuff. Yes, five suicides...it became a learned pattern after the first two. I know the pain of those left behind. I KNOW if any one of them had given themselves one more dawn to think it over they'd still be here. And though I know in my heart I'm not to blame -- I never stop asking myself what if. What if I'd noticed a mood change? What if I'd stopped by that night? Mostly--what if the world was still blessed with their presence? That's why I ask you to hold on, Charity. You have so much more to LIVE and SHARE! --Karenina
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I have to the link to my open mic poetry event from last night. How do I share on here.
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Good question! All I have ever done is cut and pasted the link from my browser to my author's comments or profile thoughts...
There is a way to link it to the bottom of a post...
Check under the "Community" tab at the top of your page and click on "Q&A"--
Scroll down until you see this addressed.
Or, more directly you can contact Tom...or ask on the Community Forum!
Sorry I can't be of more help!
(PM me the browser link excited to see you!)
Comment from royowen
What can I say, there's nothing more to say, I was depressed when I was eighteen, after my first love dumped me, then my best friend committed suicide, and I thought of ending it, but that was ridiculous, even if oblivion ends pain, you won't be conscious of anything, and what if the suffering becomes eternal, according to what I know with any solid foundation, that's worse. But blessing to you, Roy
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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What can I say, there's nothing more to say, I was depressed when I was eighteen, after my first love dumped me, then my best friend committed suicide, and I thought of ending it, but that was ridiculous, even if oblivion ends pain, you won't be conscious of anything, and what if the suffering becomes eternal, according to what I know with any solid foundation, that's worse. But blessing to you, Roy
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Appreciate your concern and for always reading my poems. I hope you have a good day.
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Most welcome
Comment from Whitewave
The moment we are born, we are already on our way home. In essence, death is part of life - an inescapable part there-of. None-the-less, it is primal instinct of our humanity, to want to protect and preserve our life.
I feel your silent tears. I hear your inner cry - 'Severe depression is not a joke.' It seems that you've already met and conversed with death in this life but you have hardly lived.
i trust your writing helps you and others find power to push through.
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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The moment we are born, we are already on our way home. In essence, death is part of life - an inescapable part there-of. None-the-less, it is primal instinct of our humanity, to want to protect and preserve our life.
I feel your silent tears. I hear your inner cry - 'Severe depression is not a joke.' It seems that you've already met and conversed with death in this life but you have hardly lived.
i trust your writing helps you and others find power to push through.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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I hope so too. Glad you can feel what I feel through my poetry.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Your poems really hit at the emotions of this reader, Charity as you share your thoughts, and yourself with us. I hope one day you will be able to write about peaceful thoughts. Until then, keep sharing. Sending a virtual hug,
valda
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Your poems really hit at the emotions of this reader, Charity as you share your thoughts, and yourself with us. I hope one day you will be able to write about peaceful thoughts. Until then, keep sharing. Sending a virtual hug,
valda
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Thank you for your honest feedback.
Comment from Ja Majal
Oooh I know how hard it is !!
I'm so grateful for your existence, this was hard to read emotionally, tears yanked from my face, wanting to interject solutions in some form or way to ease the pain!!
I'm reminded of the scripture
Weeping endures for a night but joy comes in the morning,
You are that joy, just keep moving forward through every tough time and battle you face.
I'm always here to talk if you need too!!
I am appreciative of the art behind pain too, but I must need know you're okay at the end of the day!
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Oooh I know how hard it is !!
I'm so grateful for your existence, this was hard to read emotionally, tears yanked from my face, wanting to interject solutions in some form or way to ease the pain!!
I'm reminded of the scripture
Weeping endures for a night but joy comes in the morning,
You are that joy, just keep moving forward through every tough time and battle you face.
I'm always here to talk if you need too!!
I am appreciative of the art behind pain too, but I must need know you're okay at the end of the day!
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Hey there. Thank you for the 6 star review. Much love. Yes hopefully there is a light ahead. I wrote a poem called light ahead but haven't shared it left.
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okay cool, cant wait to read it !
Comment from Beri Bee
This poem ends with a very big "maybe" that ties back to the beginning of it, which starts with the phrase "desire to survive is part of my imagination." It makes me wonder if desire to survive isn't the concrete part and the other "paradise" is the imagination part. The rhymes chosen show a lot of colorful creativity. I hope you show this poem to whoever you trust. All the best.
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reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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This poem ends with a very big "maybe" that ties back to the beginning of it, which starts with the phrase "desire to survive is part of my imagination." It makes me wonder if desire to survive isn't the concrete part and the other "paradise" is the imagination part. The rhymes chosen show a lot of colorful creativity. I hope you show this poem to whoever you trust. All the best.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Yes sharing it with the world. It will be included in my book called life in the trenches. Thank you for your review.
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That's great! (BTW, I saw my review has that thing at the end that says it won't count... I think I accidentally had 4 stars selected and changed it fast. Sorry that looks confusing)
