Another Life
Life must be better after death.39 total reviews
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Charity a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. Once again like your previous works you deliver your deep thoughts from the depths of your soul onto the paper with a good flow and rhyme. Good stuff!
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Hello Charity a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. Once again like your previous works you deliver your deep thoughts from the depths of your soul onto the paper with a good flow and rhyme. Good stuff!
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you my brother.
Comment from Lilly Flowers
Depression is such a powerful emotion and when people self-medicate, it's a recipe for disaster. It becomes a circle of trying to feel better and becoming more addicted until death has more and more appeal.
This is another well-constructed poem, filled with truth and gut-wrenching emotion. Your words grab hold of me and demand my attention from beginning to end. Regards, Lilly
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Depression is such a powerful emotion and when people self-medicate, it's a recipe for disaster. It becomes a circle of trying to feel better and becoming more addicted until death has more and more appeal.
This is another well-constructed poem, filled with truth and gut-wrenching emotion. Your words grab hold of me and demand my attention from beginning to end. Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for the great feedback.
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Your poem startled me because I see it as a plea for help from a desperate soul on a terrible verge. I am filled with a desire to reassure you that there is another side to your despair, called HOPE.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Your poem startled me because I see it as a plea for help from a desperate soul on a terrible verge. I am filled with a desire to reassure you that there is another side to your despair, called HOPE.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Just telling my story. Thanks for the remarkable review.
Comment from JLR
Charity, WOW! Powerful, evocative, honest, and pure. For those who have struggled with addictions, depression is so often the root cause - that moving target called worthiness - always a strong culprit to fight against. Thank you for your brilliance to share words for those who may be struggling - Power on! Great success in getting your message out to those who need to hear a winner - say it only the way that you can!
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Charity, WOW! Powerful, evocative, honest, and pure. For those who have struggled with addictions, depression is so often the root cause - that moving target called worthiness - always a strong culprit to fight against. Thank you for your brilliance to share words for those who may be struggling - Power on! Great success in getting your message out to those who need to hear a winner - say it only the way that you can!
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Why do I keep giving you fives?
Don't drop out of life.
It won't be the same.
The stress and the strife
Is part of the game.
Take life as it comes
And give it your best.
God adds up your sums
At your final rest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Why do I keep giving you fives?
Don't drop out of life.
It won't be the same.
The stress and the strife
Is part of the game.
Take life as it comes
And give it your best.
God adds up your sums
At your final rest.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I think you give me fives because it's so much truth, honesty and it's raw and real. I'm grateful that you are still reading my poems and that it captures you in a way. Thank you.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is heavy and strong. Your message is provocative and worrisome. You have a gift and I don't want to see you not be able to share it. Your style of poetry is inspiring to me, as it always has a great rhythm and pace. Find your strength.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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This is heavy and strong. Your message is provocative and worrisome. You have a gift and I don't want to see you not be able to share it. Your style of poetry is inspiring to me, as it always has a great rhythm and pace. Find your strength.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem once again. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
If this isn't true to life, you certainly have a very high level of empathy and understanding. You totally got it right. I hope, if this refers to you, that you are in a better frame of mind now. I have totally craved death on occasion, and I felt that in your poem. Good job!
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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If this isn't true to life, you certainly have a very high level of empathy and understanding. You totally got it right. I hope, if this refers to you, that you are in a better frame of mind now. I have totally craved death on occasion, and I felt that in your poem. Good job!
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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All my poems are truth, never fiction. Telling my story.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a very powerful and frightening poem and, if it is autobiographical, I hope you have people helping support you through this. Thank you for opening people's eyes to what depression and hopelessness feel like, but I hope you can also introduce us (and yourself) to what finding relief and a reason for living feel like.
On a technical level, excellent selection of rhyming words.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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This is a very powerful and frightening poem and, if it is autobiographical, I hope you have people helping support you through this. Thank you for opening people's eyes to what depression and hopelessness feel like, but I hope you can also introduce us (and yourself) to what finding relief and a reason for living feel like.
On a technical level, excellent selection of rhyming words.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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All my poems are true, never fiction. Telling my story and reaching out to those who are struggling as well with similar issues.
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I'm sure it will help many people to know they're not alone, and that there are people like you who understand what they're going through.
Comment from Goosey Gander
This is an amazing poem! I love how you loosely rhyme the words. this is such a fantastic poem, and I thank you very much for sharing this here!
-GG :)
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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This is an amazing poem! I love how you loosely rhyme the words. this is such a fantastic poem, and I thank you very much for sharing this here!
-GG :)
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Charity,
Straight of the bat, and because I relate to this more than I'd like to care for I see and read a pattern... no, not of words, but despair.
I know all my problems with 'will' disappear in another life. Although there is a slight misuse of a word there I suspect it to be a slight mistaken use... but that line?
Nah, nothing is guaranteed in this life or any other... just the feeling and hoping it will, or could be.
There are so many reasons and versions that allow depression to rule one's life... it may be a chemical imbalance, a sense of hopelessness, a lack of self love... etc, etc,but these patterns are real and take us into a dark-dingy hole that seems to close around one's soul, squeezing the life force right from your grasp.
I grew up with depression. I hated myself, my circumstance, my place in life... although I had glimpses of light the 'Black Dog' always returned to claim yet another piece of me.
So Charity, I know you pretty much write from your heart and your experience... so, if I'm not being too invasive... is this you now, or is it where you've been?
I leave the analyzing for another conversation, and go to your poem... but It's hard to separate words that are written from the reality on the soul.
So, yes, the poem is dark and at times sad and hopeless, but it is still a great melodic write that has this reader engaged within the pain of it.
I'll leave you with some script I had tattooed on my bicep...
Pain and suffering are inevitable, misery is optional.
It's there so I can read it regularly and actually live by my attitude towards any adversity... it demands it, it's indelibly within my belief.
I hear you... and there's nothing better than writing, composing and working things out in one's own mind. The more one strives to change for the betterment of ones soul, the easier things become.
I leave you with this... depression is a pattern, like most things we go to with ease. Once we recognise the effects and timing of these patterns, it's then we can address the frequency... if we let, say... depression for instance... to hang around for too long without recognition, and changing those thoughts and pattern then it takes that much longer for depression to leave our presence, and we both know the danger of that!
As always Charity, I love reading the rawness of your truth... you are an artist... live in that, love that, love who you are, warts and all!
With our thoughts we create...
the space between darkness.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Hi Charity,
Straight of the bat, and because I relate to this more than I'd like to care for I see and read a pattern... no, not of words, but despair.
I know all my problems with 'will' disappear in another life. Although there is a slight misuse of a word there I suspect it to be a slight mistaken use... but that line?
Nah, nothing is guaranteed in this life or any other... just the feeling and hoping it will, or could be.
There are so many reasons and versions that allow depression to rule one's life... it may be a chemical imbalance, a sense of hopelessness, a lack of self love... etc, etc,but these patterns are real and take us into a dark-dingy hole that seems to close around one's soul, squeezing the life force right from your grasp.
I grew up with depression. I hated myself, my circumstance, my place in life... although I had glimpses of light the 'Black Dog' always returned to claim yet another piece of me.
So Charity, I know you pretty much write from your heart and your experience... so, if I'm not being too invasive... is this you now, or is it where you've been?
I leave the analyzing for another conversation, and go to your poem... but It's hard to separate words that are written from the reality on the soul.
So, yes, the poem is dark and at times sad and hopeless, but it is still a great melodic write that has this reader engaged within the pain of it.
I'll leave you with some script I had tattooed on my bicep...
Pain and suffering are inevitable, misery is optional.
It's there so I can read it regularly and actually live by my attitude towards any adversity... it demands it, it's indelibly within my belief.
I hear you... and there's nothing better than writing, composing and working things out in one's own mind. The more one strives to change for the betterment of ones soul, the easier things become.
I leave you with this... depression is a pattern, like most things we go to with ease. Once we recognise the effects and timing of these patterns, it's then we can address the frequency... if we let, say... depression for instance... to hang around for too long without recognition, and changing those thoughts and pattern then it takes that much longer for depression to leave our presence, and we both know the danger of that!
As always Charity, I love reading the rawness of your truth... you are an artist... live in that, love that, love who you are, warts and all!
With our thoughts we create...
the space between darkness.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for the detailed review and advice. Much love. The rawness of my poem comes from deep within. It's my story and it's so real. Thank you for your feedback.
