Growing old
Remembering what I used to be able to do.15 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Quiet times make you think so you remember the good and bad times. Getting older brings many great memories to the surface. The happy times are always the best.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
Quiet times make you think so you remember the good and bad times. Getting older brings many great memories to the surface. The happy times are always the best.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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I agree, thanks!
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Who woulda thought you could say so much in such a restrictive poetry style? The words bounce along nicely, and the syllable count is perfect and so is the message.
Very nice.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
Who woulda thought you could say so much in such a restrictive poetry style? The words bounce along nicely, and the syllable count is perfect and so is the message.
Very nice.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
I love this poem, as it really shows how getting older seems so far off. Then you blink and twenty years are gone. And as much as you know many things that happened in those years, you just don't know how it went so fast. And you are so right that as much as yearn for years of past, its nice to be in your comfort zone, doing what you enjoy. What a wonderful job, painting the picture of what so many are going through. Nice job!
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
I love this poem, as it really shows how getting older seems so far off. Then you blink and twenty years are gone. And as much as you know many things that happened in those years, you just don't know how it went so fast. And you are so right that as much as yearn for years of past, its nice to be in your comfort zone, doing what you enjoy. What a wonderful job, painting the picture of what so many are going through. Nice job!
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from Bill Schott
This tetractys, Growing Old, has the proper formatting and paints a somber picture of the life left after we have thought our best thoughts and made all our moves.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
This tetractys, Growing Old, has the proper formatting and paints a somber picture of the life left after we have thought our best thoughts and made all our moves.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Might be true. I long longer rattle sabres but occasionally a butter knife I can cut almost to bone. Aah, the memories of youth, the smell of an exotic perfume, wind through my hair upon the sea. Peace, be still.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
Might be true. I long longer rattle sabres but occasionally a butter knife I can cut almost to bone. Aah, the memories of youth, the smell of an exotic perfume, wind through my hair upon the sea. Peace, be still.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you for those comments.
Comment from Wendy G
I am with you here, as will be a lot of readers. Well said, with the metaphor of time as a thief. I think you have crafted an excellent entry. I wish you success in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
I am with you here, as will be a lot of readers. Well said, with the metaphor of time as a thief. I think you have crafted an excellent entry. I wish you success in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A good entry for the Tetractys Contest. It doesn't flow well i had to read it a few times to understand. .
The theme about wasted time and failed relationships is interesting.
Well done! I wish you the best in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
A good entry for the Tetractys Contest. It doesn't flow well i had to read it a few times to understand. .
The theme about wasted time and failed relationships is interesting.
Well done! I wish you the best in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, very good. Your message is clear, and it's a message that is understood as a person ages. Your poem reads and flows well.
Of special note:
And thus, I now love quiet times the best.
(Amen, and in the midst of silence, there is beauty.)
Well-chosen photo. A poem of truth. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
Hello author, very good. Your message is clear, and it's a message that is understood as a person ages. Your poem reads and flows well.
Of special note:
And thus, I now love quiet times the best.
(Amen, and in the midst of silence, there is beauty.)
Well-chosen photo. A poem of truth. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you very much!
Comment from lyenochka
I like the addressing of time personified as a "beast" that steals one's "mind and body." But there is a peaceful acceptance of enjoying the quiet times. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
I like the addressing of time personified as a "beast" that steals one's "mind and body." But there is a peaceful acceptance of enjoying the quiet times. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This poem makes a sad comment, one that I'm all too familiar with. I reflect up days I could skip and climb trees and oh so many other things in more recent times. This struck a chord with me.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
This poem makes a sad comment, one that I'm all too familiar with. I reflect up days I could skip and climb trees and oh so many other things in more recent times. This struck a chord with me.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you!