Show, Don't Tell - part VIII
the colour purple22 total reviews
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
My early writings were very purple and yes, I felt smug and clever at times. It seemed a good idea to add as many adjectives as possible to try and look like a real 'author'. But someone pointed out that they did not like a story I had written because it had too many adjectives. I read it back and finally, the penny dropped. I still occasionally slip into purple mode so thank you for the reminder. Now I need to remove the exclamation mark key from my keyboard.
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reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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My early writings were very purple and yes, I felt smug and clever at times. It seemed a good idea to add as many adjectives as possible to try and look like a real 'author'. But someone pointed out that they did not like a story I had written because it had too many adjectives. I read it back and finally, the penny dropped. I still occasionally slip into purple mode so thank you for the reminder. Now I need to remove the exclamation mark key from my keyboard.
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Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Robust verbs are definitely the way to go. Nothing wrong with the occasional flight but many times it's a matter of pacing and momentum that can struggle when we over-write. many thanks for your thoughts on this. G
Comment from Fleedleflump
A well-written essay on how we can interject excessive effervescence into prose because, like birds in a feeding frenzy, we bite too often and flap so hard that life becomes an entropic parody of dismal distraction...
Oops, lol. Great write - I very much enjoyed, and no suggestions for changes.
Mike
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reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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A well-written essay on how we can interject excessive effervescence into prose because, like birds in a feeding frenzy, we bite too often and flap so hard that life becomes an entropic parody of dismal distraction...
Oops, lol. Great write - I very much enjoyed, and no suggestions for changes.
Mike
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Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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lol. Much appreciated, my friend. G
