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Comment from Mark Schardine
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A person may devote his life to contemplative prayer in a monastery, or simply take a moment to think carefully about life. We must allow ourselves moments of calm and self-understanding to occur to us.

 Comment Written 22-May-2022

reply by the author on 22-May-2022
    Thank you, Mark :)

    Gypsy Blue Rose
    "The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Your haiku reads well, Gypsy. The picture is beautiful.
Great job with the style. I like the deep in reflection--
that could be the mountain and the praying monk.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 17-May-2022

reply by the author on 18-May-2022
    Thank you very, Jan. I appreciate your kind review. Take care.

    Gypsy
Comment from Debra White
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Hello Gypsy :)
I really enjoyed your haiku.
The play on words is lovely and the imagery is vivid.
Beautiful presentation, too.
Best wishes as always, Debra x

 Comment Written 16-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Hello, Debra,

    thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate your kind feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
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Gypsy Rose,
You've written a great Haiku; I love the subtle play on words with "reflection."
Your photo and the graphics you use are beautiful and aesthetic.
Good luck with all your writing.
Cindy

 Comment Written 16-May-2022

reply by the author on 16-May-2022
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate your kind feedback. Take care, Cindy.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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Lovely presentation as always! Your final line brings the whole poem together playing on the word "reflection" which "reflects" the praying of the first line.

 Comment Written 16-May-2022

reply by the author on 16-May-2022
    Yes! you got it. Thank you very much for the six stars and exceptional feedback. I appreciate it. When you like it this much I knw it's a good one. I don't always get it right.

    Hugs!!
Comment from karenina
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I swear, no wine tonight!

Still...

I keep counting 2-9-5!!!

"where Mount Fuji lies at river's edge"

9 syllables right?

Which is fine...but then it's 16 syllables, not 17....



Which is also acceptable? So I should say fine poem and go back uncork the Merlot?

I'm giggling here....

Karenina




 Comment Written 16-May-2022

reply by the author on 16-May-2022
    American haiku is 17 syllables or less I'm any combination. I guess this is more of the contemporary haiku. I added links, one of them explains why. I understand why so many links can be overwhelming. Contemporary haiku can be written in one to four lines as brief as possible. If you read samples of modern haiku you will be surprised how far they are of the 5-7-5 form many people have in mind. Even Japanese write one to three lines. I try to familiarize different styles of haiku to expose fs to all the possibilities of haiku. Anyway...I could write about haiku all day. LoL..I'll spare you.

    Thank you very much for your time and review. I appreciate the feedback.

    Gypsy hugs ♡
reply by karenina on 16-May-2022
    I do understand that (although I'm notoriously bad at writing them)

    I only mentioned the syllable count because you labeled your poem as:
    ________________
    2/10/5 Ekphrastic Haiku for Haiku Club
    Praying Monk
    _____________________

    And I couldn't find that tenth syllable!

    (Silly me)

    Smile, K
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
    ohhhh I get it now. Sorry. I changed it. Thank you for letting me know :)
reply by karenina on 16-May-2022
    No problem. I should have just sent you a PM! (duh on me)
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your poem- good picture presentation of Japan's most iconic mountain- with spiritual religious focus- as I recall- approximately 12k - active volcano- goodness of blossoms- poem about monk praying at waters edge- good job tying the prayer together with the reflection!

 Comment Written 16-May-2022

reply by the author on 16-May-2022
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate your kind feedback. Take care, AP.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from l.raven
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HI Gypsy, it sounds like a beautiful place
for the monks to pray...to reflect on their
spiritual beliefs...

I love your poem sweet girl...and I love your
beautiful picture...very well written my sweet friend...
love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 15-May-2022

reply by the author on 16-May-2022
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate your kind feedback. Take care, Linda. Love you!

    Gypsy hugs
reply by l.raven on 16-May-2022
    your so welcome sweet girl...
    and you take care as well...love you...xxoo
Comment from Goosey Gander
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This poem is amazing! It seems as though this monk is excellent at meditation! I love the last line, as it surely gives readers plenty to think about. Thank you for sharing!!!
-GG

 Comment Written 15-May-2022

reply by the author on 17-May-2022
    Thank you very much, Goosey,

    I appreciate your exceptional review and six stars! I am glad you like it.

    Gypsy hugs