No Angel
250 Word Max - Flash Fiction competition Entry2 total reviews
Comment from leather
I read this through and was left with some questions or it may be that I am just clueless. My biggest question is why are they looking for "her"? Also, I couldn't determine if "her" or the searchers left the smoking canister burning in the snow. I figured out that K.S. Brooks produced the photo and that that name also appears in the snow. However, does that name in the snow mean a man or woman wrote it? I know this has to be a short entry, but I couldn't get a good grasp of what this story was all about.
The dialogue seemed fine.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I read this through and was left with some questions or it may be that I am just clueless. My biggest question is why are they looking for "her"? Also, I couldn't determine if "her" or the searchers left the smoking canister burning in the snow. I figured out that K.S. Brooks produced the photo and that that name also appears in the snow. However, does that name in the snow mean a man or woman wrote it? I know this has to be a short entry, but I couldn't get a good grasp of what this story was all about.
The dialogue seemed fine.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I'm very disappointed in your review. This is the second time you have reviewed one of my stories, and you were confused both times. Save yourself the trouble of being confused and let someone else give me some feedback.
Let me try to explain, what I considered a given.
1. If someone is lost, they try to do everything in their power to help any potential searchers to find them - thus the writing in the snow.
2. When someone is reported missing, usually a search party is formed to help find the missing person. It makes no difference whether the person lost is a male or female, a search party tries to find them.
3. If someone is exploring and gets lost, I wouldn't think they would be carrying a smoke cannister to help find them - so the searcher was the one who lit the smoke cannister to alert the rest of the search party.
4. K.S. Brooks (Kat Brooks) is the webmistress of the Indies Unlimited site. She has been managing that site for over 10 years.
She is also a highly recognized photographer, which is why she has watermarked her photos. SHE should get a kick that I took her watermark as a writing in the snow (which it was not).
I would be interested in you forwarding your attempt at a story given that picture and the word prompt "Signal."
Good luck in your writing career.
Thanks again,
Dick
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Again, thanks for taking the time to explain your entry.
Yes, it seems that confusion abounds when I read your works. Your suggestion that I not read them is well -taken. I don't need any more of confusion in my life.
I wish us both the best from here on out.
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Well said.
If I can help YOU in any way, please let me know.
Best regards,
Dick
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is a well written piece with no obvious errors, but it's very wordy for flash fiction. I feel you could have told it in half the word count, so there's room here for more plot. Still, didn't stop me enjoying it.
Mike
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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This is a well written piece with no obvious errors, but it's very wordy for flash fiction. I feel you could have told it in half the word count, so there's room here for more plot. Still, didn't stop me enjoying it.
Mike
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you Mike for reading this story and for the very nice review. Another reviewer wanted more words, which means you can't please everybody.
I do appreciate you taking time to provide your feedback. Good luck in your writing career.
Thanks again,
Dick
