Heartbreak at the Beach
Remembering when she loved me.3 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Perhaps one of the greatest pains we, any of us, will ever experience is the pain of lost love. Your words paint the picture of extreme loneliness and regret.
Good job.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Perhaps one of the greatest pains we, any of us, will ever experience is the pain of lost love. Your words paint the picture of extreme loneliness and regret.
Good job.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from Pantygynt
I liked the way the rhythm of this poem changed in the closing tercet where the true sadness of the situation was made apparent. There is little sadder than old pleasure that cannot be continued. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I liked the way the rhythm of this poem changed in the closing tercet where the true sadness of the situation was made apparent. There is little sadder than old pleasure that cannot be continued. Nicely done.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. Appreciated.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Aw, that poor guy in the blue swim trunks. That looks like exactly what he's doing -- missing his love and watching everyone else have a good time.
I like your word choices, such as naked footprints, whispering waves...
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Aw, that poor guy in the blue swim trunks. That looks like exactly what he's doing -- missing his love and watching everyone else have a good time.
I like your word choices, such as naked footprints, whispering waves...
Nicely done.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. Appreciated.
