Coffee Minute Poem
coffee perfect morning3 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Tummey
A good idea for a minute poem. The title made me want to read it.
Line 2 and the last line are 5 syllables, not 4. Also, the 'Sunset' line needs to be 8 syllables. "But when it comes to the sunset", or something similar. Hope that helps.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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A good idea for a minute poem. The title made me want to read it.
Line 2 and the last line are 5 syllables, not 4. Also, the 'Sunset' line needs to be 8 syllables. "But when it comes to the sunset", or something similar. Hope that helps.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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thanks did not quite work as a minute poem but I learned a lot writing it.
Comment from Mark D. R.
very fine rhyme scheme for this contest entry
like your transition from morning to night with your favorite beverages
honestly, I only drink tea at night with an occasional wine
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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very fine rhyme scheme for this contest entry
like your transition from morning to night with your favorite beverages
honestly, I only drink tea at night with an occasional wine
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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cool
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer!
How I adore and crave coffee, and I enjoyed your poem.
However, it is lacking in a number of the Minute form's requirements:
1. The Minute Poem is rhyming verse form consisting of 12 lines of 60 syllables written in strict iambic meter. The poem is formatted into 3 stanzas of 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4.
Your poem is composed of the following syllable count in 3 stanzas
8,5,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 4,4,4,4.
2. First two lines need to rhyme, but must not be the same word:
morning, morning.
3. A Minute poem needs to be written in strict iambic meter: short/long/short/long or one unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable.
Plenty of time to edit.
Hoping I have not offended!
Best Wishes.
Let me know when or if you choose to amend.
Take Care,
diane
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Hello Mystery Writer!
How I adore and crave coffee, and I enjoyed your poem.
However, it is lacking in a number of the Minute form's requirements:
1. The Minute Poem is rhyming verse form consisting of 12 lines of 60 syllables written in strict iambic meter. The poem is formatted into 3 stanzas of 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4.
Your poem is composed of the following syllable count in 3 stanzas
8,5,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 4,4,4,4.
2. First two lines need to rhyme, but must not be the same word:
morning, morning.
3. A Minute poem needs to be written in strict iambic meter: short/long/short/long or one unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable.
Plenty of time to edit.
Hoping I have not offended!
Best Wishes.
Let me know when or if you choose to amend.
Take Care,
diane
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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thanks, Diane for the detailed critique. I will revise it accordingly. I have a hard time with iambic meter which is why I usually avoid writing it.
