Ogawaga - Chapter 2
A Meeting Of The Minds Commences9 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoy the stories about Cody and the Sheriff. I didn't get to read the first book but I've read other stories. I'll look forward to seeing how this mystery will be solved.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
I enjoy the stories about Cody and the Sheriff. I didn't get to read the first book but I've read other stories. I'll look forward to seeing how this mystery will be solved.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Much appreciate the review. Thanks!
Comment from Ric Myworld
As someone who never went to school much growing up and didn't learn anything about nouns, verbs, and stories until after 50. Most right here on Fanstory, and books I've read. Most of what I've read explains plot as the most important part of a story. But in my humble opinion, characters make every story, and plot is only what the characters do to make things happen. Like most, I'm sure you have a plot in mind when you start writing, but it's your fine job with detailing your characters that always drawing me in. It's always a pleasure! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
As someone who never went to school much growing up and didn't learn anything about nouns, verbs, and stories until after 50. Most right here on Fanstory, and books I've read. Most of what I've read explains plot as the most important part of a story. But in my humble opinion, characters make every story, and plot is only what the characters do to make things happen. Like most, I'm sure you have a plot in mind when you start writing, but it's your fine job with detailing your characters that always drawing me in. It's always a pleasure! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Wonderful review. So much appreciated!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is well-written and has interesting action occurring. I'm glad you added the information from the first story to make this more understandable. The one thing I think you might reconsider it the word you use with the attribution of who is speaking. Said, asked, shouted, and a few others are more acceptable in recent writing. ("interjected" works but you've just said he is bringing them back to topic) (ascertained doesn't work as that suggests he's doing something to check on it) . . .immediately he assured the group he was no mass murderer. (is a weird sentence as it sounds like the deputy is the one being accused. I look forward to reading more of your story. Cody sounds like an interesting teenager.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
This is well-written and has interesting action occurring. I'm glad you added the information from the first story to make this more understandable. The one thing I think you might reconsider it the word you use with the attribution of who is speaking. Said, asked, shouted, and a few others are more acceptable in recent writing. ("interjected" works but you've just said he is bringing them back to topic) (ascertained doesn't work as that suggests he's doing something to check on it) . . .immediately he assured the group he was no mass murderer. (is a weird sentence as it sounds like the deputy is the one being accused. I look forward to reading more of your story. Cody sounds like an interesting teenager.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Many members feel Cody is interesting, and some other things too.
Appreciate the recommendations and the review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I am looking forward to reading more of this story. It is full of intrigue and action. You also left a great "you have to read more" sentence at the end. Great job. Have a wonderful Saturday. Shirley
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
I am looking forward to reading more of this story. It is full of intrigue and action. You also left a great "you have to read more" sentence at the end. Great job. Have a wonderful Saturday. Shirley
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter and the ending. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I love the idea of investigating cold cases. They help bring closure for the 1st time. There's great tongue-in-cheek humor woven throughout the chapter. I like the ending comment. That is an assurance that the reader will be back.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
I love the idea of investigating cold cases. They help bring closure for the 1st time. There's great tongue-in-cheek humor woven throughout the chapter. I like the ending comment. That is an assurance that the reader will be back.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
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***smile***
Comment from royowen
Some people are completely twisted aren't they Brett, we had a similar set of murders here, in the state where I live, called the Snowtown murders, or "bodies in the barrels" they've got a nutcase on their hands here my friend, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
Some people are completely twisted aren't they Brett, we had a similar set of murders here, in the state where I live, called the Snowtown murders, or "bodies in the barrels" they've got a nutcase on their hands here my friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much appreciate the review. Nutcases are what those who commit these types of murders are.
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That?s right
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another great chapter, Brett. That young Cody is certainly resilient, given all the attempts on his life. His calling might not be a veterinarian. lol I will have to go back to look at the story about Beebo the clown and Fred Taylor to refresh my memory.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
This is another great chapter, Brett. That young Cody is certainly resilient, given all the attempts on his life. His calling might not be a veterinarian. lol I will have to go back to look at the story about Beebo the clown and Fred Taylor to refresh my memory.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Appreciate the wonderful review.
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Your are most welcome, Brett. :)
Comment from Fleedleflump
You've got the beginnings of an intriguing plot here and I found it easy to follow who was talking and how the conversation flowed. One note from right at the end:
'At that moment, he, nor any of the rest of the assembled group of lawmen' - I think you need a 'neither' after 'at that moment,'
Mike
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
You've got the beginnings of an intriguing plot here and I found it easy to follow who was talking and how the conversation flowed. One note from right at the end:
'At that moment, he, nor any of the rest of the assembled group of lawmen' - I think you need a 'neither' after 'at that moment,'
Mike
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Appreciate the review and the catch.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You're doing a really good job of writing this story. I can't wait for more. This is a horrible crime. I have a feeling we have a serial murderer on our hands. I'm curious if Cody is going to wrapped up in helping solving it. I bet he is.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
You're doing a really good job of writing this story. I can't wait for more. This is a horrible crime. I have a feeling we have a serial murderer on our hands. I'm curious if Cody is going to wrapped up in helping solving it. I bet he is.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Who knows what Cody might do? Not always sure even I know the answer to that question.
Appreciate the review.
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I have an idea and my characters refuse to follow suit.