Self Reflection
When I look in the mirror, what do I see?24 total reviews
Comment from royowen
You probably don't believe me, but if we build our life on the ruins and foundations of our past, we'll never leave the that broken city. Life has always been built on our next step, hope is walked towards, not standing still, or looking bac. I remember someone saying ever since they focussed on other people's problems and not their own, they've never experienced so much joy. Beautifully written Charity, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
You probably don't believe me, but if we build our life on the ruins and foundations of our past, we'll never leave the that broken city. Life has always been built on our next step, hope is walked towards, not standing still, or looking bac. I remember someone saying ever since they focussed on other people's problems and not their own, they've never experienced so much joy. Beautifully written Charity, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Hey my friend. Thanks for the feedback. Always good to hear from you and hear your perspective.
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Well done
Comment from LJbutterfly
You are achieving your goal which was to share, in writing, your thoughts and life story with other writers. You offer a dark but realistic perspective of a life desiring but not accepting assistance. "Desperately needing help but I don't have any room." Your creativity, word choices, and rhymes demonstrate rays of the sunshine of acknowledgement, leading to a brighter future. Keep writing. You're beginning to shine.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
You are achieving your goal which was to share, in writing, your thoughts and life story with other writers. You offer a dark but realistic perspective of a life desiring but not accepting assistance. "Desperately needing help but I don't have any room." Your creativity, word choices, and rhymes demonstrate rays of the sunshine of acknowledgement, leading to a brighter future. Keep writing. You're beginning to shine.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Wow must needed feedback. I'm so glad you feel that way. I'm just trying to tell my story and be a voice to others struggling.
Comment from karenina
As always, Charity, the angst and the truth in your poems cry out off the page and shake me out of my illusion that life is "all fine -- nothing to see hers."
In fact, for so many people, yourself included, life is a battle -- but you know what? You beat back the beast with your creativity, your unrelenting words, and your "back in our face" truth!
You challenge us to see, acknowledge, and accept that THIS is the TRUTH in your world, and you have every right __ in fact, I think a calling__to express it.
I'm waiting for you to blow us away with your link to the recitation of your work in a poetry slam. We can't change what we don't acknowledge.
Society could do a whole lot more to level the playing field. It should.
It must!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
As always, Charity, the angst and the truth in your poems cry out off the page and shake me out of my illusion that life is "all fine -- nothing to see hers."
In fact, for so many people, yourself included, life is a battle -- but you know what? You beat back the beast with your creativity, your unrelenting words, and your "back in our face" truth!
You challenge us to see, acknowledge, and accept that THIS is the TRUTH in your world, and you have every right __ in fact, I think a calling__to express it.
I'm waiting for you to blow us away with your link to the recitation of your work in a poetry slam. We can't change what we don't acknowledge.
Society could do a whole lot more to level the playing field. It should.
It must!
Karenina
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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You are always so honest and pumping me up. Yes poetry slam next weekend. I will have it recorded. I'll share the link.
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I'm routing for you!
Comment from nomi338
Your words paint a picture of internal torment. I hope they are just words and not indicative of what is really happening in your life right now. I feel that you like to keep it real, but some things can be too real, and I would really hate to think that your young life was actually that troubled. Nevertheless, good solid poem.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
Your words paint a picture of internal torment. I hope they are just words and not indicative of what is really happening in your life right now. I feel that you like to keep it real, but some things can be too real, and I would really hate to think that your young life was actually that troubled. Nevertheless, good solid poem.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Gold to hear for you. Sorry to tell you but it's all true. It applies to my life and life experiences. Thanks for your review. Going through hell at the moment.
Comment from C2
I really enjoyed this exercise in self reflection. Some hreat lines here: " Chronic migraines destroying my thinking. Can't put the bottle down so I'm still drinking." 'I am become doom."
Is it wierd that I heard it as a rap song in Eminem's voice when I read it?
Thanks for sharing it!
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
I really enjoyed this exercise in self reflection. Some hreat lines here: " Chronic migraines destroying my thinking. Can't put the bottle down so I'm still drinking." 'I am become doom."
Is it wierd that I heard it as a rap song in Eminem's voice when I read it?
Thanks for sharing it!
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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No it's not weird you could of heard something similar. I appreciate your positive feedback.
Comment from Sarah Tummey
Hi, Charity. This is a dark poem. I was glad to see it was categorised as General Poetry and not Biographical. My favourite line is: "Toxicity runs through me like a river".
Just a couple of thoughts: "I'm a prodigal child" and "I feel stuck like immigrants" would work if they were shorter. Also, I remember an English teacher telling me "That" refers to a thing, and "Who" to a person; so maybe "Prodigal child who can't return", and "Stuck like immigrants trying to cross the border"? They're just suggestions, but it's your work.
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reply by the author on 12-May-2022
Hi, Charity. This is a dark poem. I was glad to see it was categorised as General Poetry and not Biographical. My favourite line is: "Toxicity runs through me like a river".
Just a couple of thoughts: "I'm a prodigal child" and "I feel stuck like immigrants" would work if they were shorter. Also, I remember an English teacher telling me "That" refers to a thing, and "Who" to a person; so maybe "Prodigal child who can't return", and "Stuck like immigrants trying to cross the border"? They're just suggestions, but it's your work.
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Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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All my poems are true story about my life and life experiences. I just keep all my poems under general. I can only write truth. It's therapy for me. Thanks for your review.
Comment from JoannaN
Your poem is dark, haunting. The picture of self-doubt, desperation is convincing, understandable particularly for these who have experienced depression, loneliness in their lives."My mirror shows a broken vessel" - this is the best part in my opinion.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
Your poem is dark, haunting. The picture of self-doubt, desperation is convincing, understandable particularly for these who have experienced depression, loneliness in their lives."My mirror shows a broken vessel" - this is the best part in my opinion.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you for your feedback. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Beri Bee
This is an amazing interior poem that expresses, very personally, the struggle for self-acceptance, set against the presence of a large voice... maybe religion's in general... that has already set the poet up to think and feel the worst. I like the choice to rhyme the poem. It anchors it and reminds the reader that this is crafted.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
This is an amazing interior poem that expresses, very personally, the struggle for self-acceptance, set against the presence of a large voice... maybe religion's in general... that has already set the poet up to think and feel the worst. I like the choice to rhyme the poem. It anchors it and reminds the reader that this is crafted.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you so much for your honest feedback.
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Thank you so much for your honest feedback.
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Thank you so much for your honest feedback.
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Thank you so much for your honest feedback.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Such powerful, disturbing words, Charity, which I'm hoping is helping you to rid yourself of those memories and get to build nice ones. You're not only helping you, but I'm sure it's helping others who have gone through what you have, to know they aren't alone. That it is possible to release those awful emotions. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
Such powerful, disturbing words, Charity, which I'm hoping is helping you to rid yourself of those memories and get to build nice ones. You're not only helping you, but I'm sure it's helping others who have gone through what you have, to know they aren't alone. That it is possible to release those awful emotions. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you for your positive feedback and yes it's very therapeutic.
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Thank you for your positive feedback and yes it's very therapeutic.
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Thank you for your positive feedback and yes it's very therapeutic.
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Thank you for your positive feedback and yes it's very therapeutic.
Comment from Pantygynt
If this is biographical I am so sorry. It is often difficult to tell as some writers are so skilled they can make an imagined situation appear very real. Perhaps this is so in your case. I hope so.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
If this is biographical I am so sorry. It is often difficult to tell as some writers are so skilled they can make an imagined situation appear very real. Perhaps this is so in your case. I hope so.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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All my poem are never fiction. It's based on my life and experiences. Thank you for caring.