Self Reflection
When I look in the mirror, what do I see?24 total reviews
Comment from Carlos' girl
This is a simple but beautiful writing. I like the way you utilized your paragraph breaks it makes it starkly effective . i like that it reaches the reader with a simplicity of words that are very relatable. Its really down to earth. I understand the authors suffering she gives a glimpse into her pain without being over dramatic. Im sure she does not face damnation...because from where I am looking? She is beautiful.
Many many people have stood in this place where you stand and come out stronger and wiser. I have faith in you. No doubt.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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This is a simple but beautiful writing. I like the way you utilized your paragraph breaks it makes it starkly effective . i like that it reaches the reader with a simplicity of words that are very relatable. Its really down to earth. I understand the authors suffering she gives a glimpse into her pain without being over dramatic. Im sure she does not face damnation...because from where I am looking? She is beautiful.
Many many people have stood in this place where you stand and come out stronger and wiser. I have faith in you. No doubt.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank for this honest review.
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Most welcome.
Comment from Goosey Gander
The line, "Released my soul, let it burn." is tied for favorite line with "Worthless seeds that I planted." I think that this poem implies depression, and I thank you for writing it.
-GG
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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The line, "Released my soul, let it burn." is tied for favorite line with "Worthless seeds that I planted." I think that this poem implies depression, and I thank you for writing it.
-GG
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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You welcome. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Aussie
"To every man there opens a highway and a low. Each man decides which way his soul shall go."
Your words put you down, it is up to you to change. There are many ways up. Continually reflecting on past bad deeds is soul destroying. Look up and ask for His help and love; to rise above the darkness to His glorious light. Be a volunteer and help those going through what you have been through. The past is gone, the future a new chapter in your life. K xx
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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"To every man there opens a highway and a low. Each man decides which way his soul shall go."
Your words put you down, it is up to you to change. There are many ways up. Continually reflecting on past bad deeds is soul destroying. Look up and ask for His help and love; to rise above the darkness to His glorious light. Be a volunteer and help those going through what you have been through. The past is gone, the future a new chapter in your life. K xx
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for your advice but I'm telling my story and reaching out to those going throfub smiling struggles. Releasing my emotions and rrsfic experience is very therapeutic.
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Thanks for your advice but I'm telling my story and reaching out to those going throfub smiling struggles. Releasing my emotions and rrsfic experience is very therapeutic.
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Sending blessings your way.
Comment from Ja Majal
I really felt the burden you carry, I feel like I at one point in my life
could see nothing but loneliness, isolation, anxiety, rejection...the list goes on. I relate all too well, thank you for expressing your vulnerabilities with us, beautifully may I add! Never stop writing.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I really felt the burden you carry, I feel like I at one point in my life
could see nothing but loneliness, isolation, anxiety, rejection...the list goes on. I relate all too well, thank you for expressing your vulnerabilities with us, beautifully may I add! Never stop writing.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you.ill write until the day I die.
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Thank you.ill write until the day I die.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Rapping on I see. little sister. I wish I could raise a ray of hope for you, for the essence of our being is to return from where we came. Mortality is but a test. We were given two options. Follow Lucifer, or Jesus Christ. Those who chose the first, were cast from His grace, never to return or gain a physical body. As for the second, there were soldiers that were more valiant than others, and those struggle 'here', not understanding what it was they enlisted to because agency to choose the right or reap the consequences can be confusing.
Four lines from this piece stood out. They are:
"Can't put the bottle down so I'm still drinking.
Trying so hard to get my life in order."
Here is an example of what I stated. Trying hard? with a bottle in hand?, is thinking I cannot make a layup with someone giving me a lift.
HE's offering His hand, with nails wounds showing sincerity.
"I feel stuck like immigrants hoping to cross the border.
I feel like I've been cursed since exiting the womb."
and yet your choice remains only yours. Kin of yours have chosen well and live above the mean average; others chose to go alone and live beneath comfort.
Do you see?
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Rapping on I see. little sister. I wish I could raise a ray of hope for you, for the essence of our being is to return from where we came. Mortality is but a test. We were given two options. Follow Lucifer, or Jesus Christ. Those who chose the first, were cast from His grace, never to return or gain a physical body. As for the second, there were soldiers that were more valiant than others, and those struggle 'here', not understanding what it was they enlisted to because agency to choose the right or reap the consequences can be confusing.
Four lines from this piece stood out. They are:
"Can't put the bottle down so I'm still drinking.
Trying so hard to get my life in order."
Here is an example of what I stated. Trying hard? with a bottle in hand?, is thinking I cannot make a layup with someone giving me a lift.
HE's offering His hand, with nails wounds showing sincerity.
"I feel stuck like immigrants hoping to cross the border.
I feel like I've been cursed since exiting the womb."
and yet your choice remains only yours. Kin of yours have chosen well and live above the mean average; others chose to go alone and live beneath comfort.
Do you see?
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I see some of what you mean. I'm just telling my story and reaching out fo those who are struggling with similar issues. It's therapeutic to release what's inside instead of keeping it all inside. The past made me who I am today I'm still struggling but there is a light at the end of the tunnel.
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I see some of what you mean. I'm just telling my story and reaching out fo those who are struggling with similar issues. It's therapeutic to release what's inside instead of keeping it all inside. The past made me who I am today I'm still struggling but there is a light at the end of the tunnel.
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A-ha. That's nice to hear my dear. Your talent is evident. Somewhat dark but very evident. I like how you write.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Charity a terrific Thursday to you. I hope this finds you well. Damn, I know I said it before but ya shit be deep. You are truly looking into yourself. I think we should all do that more but more importantly we should be real about what we see when we do and not just see what we want to see but what's really there. Anyway, great job and have a great day!
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Hello Charity a terrific Thursday to you. I hope this finds you well. Damn, I know I said it before but ya shit be deep. You are truly looking into yourself. I think we should all do that more but more importantly we should be real about what we see when we do and not just see what we want to see but what's really there. Anyway, great job and have a great day!
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you so much for your review and for reading my poem.
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Thank you so much for your review and for reading my poem.
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Thank you so much for your review and for reading my poem.
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Thank you so much for your review and for reading my poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Our past can sometimes weigh heavy on our shoulders and letting go of it lets our spirit soar. Perhaps you could then look in the mirror and see a survivor with some inners strength, a sorrowful write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Our past can sometimes weigh heavy on our shoulders and letting go of it lets our spirit soar. Perhaps you could then look in the mirror and see a survivor with some inners strength, a sorrowful write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Yes im a living testimony of a survivor. Still struggling but there may be a light at the end of the tunnel.
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Yes im a living testimony of a survivor. Still struggling but there may be a light at the end of the tunnel.
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Yes im a living testimony of a survivor. Still struggling but there may be a light at the end of the tunnel.
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Yes im a living testimony of a survivor. Still struggling but there may be a light at the end of the tunnel.
Comment from LisaMay
What a desperately negative view of yourself. I feel so sad that your young life is full of such difficulties. You describe them with such a forcefully authentic tone; I'm sure others will relate, but I hope at some stage your writing gift can show some hope in overcoming your feelings of 'internal damnation'. As your stated desire is to reach out to those who are fighting depression, anxiety, addiction, pain and other different struggles, it would be wonderful to shine a positive light at some stage.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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What a desperately negative view of yourself. I feel so sad that your young life is full of such difficulties. You describe them with such a forcefully authentic tone; I'm sure others will relate, but I hope at some stage your writing gift can show some hope in overcoming your feelings of 'internal damnation'. As your stated desire is to reach out to those who are fighting depression, anxiety, addiction, pain and other different struggles, it would be wonderful to shine a positive light at some stage.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Yes hoping it is a light at the end of the tunnel. I wrote this poem called light ahead and hoping it can come true one day. I appreciate your review. Yes it's more hard loving than dying.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Charity, Charity. What am I going to do with you? Write me a poem about what you wanted to be when you a child. Don 't put any negative thoughts in it. There's a challenge for you.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Charity, Charity. What am I going to do with you? Write me a poem about what you wanted to be when you a child. Don 't put any negative thoughts in it. There's a challenge for you.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Hey.. you still think my writing is excellent though. I can only right and truth. I have a poem called light ahead that I will be posting soon. Hoping that it csn be true one day. It will be the last poem in my book when it comes out soon. Hope all is well with you.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is well written, emotional, and provocative
The photo grabbed me straight away, shook me, led me done the page and spit me out at the end.
Your writing is engaging and tends to make me feel a certain way. All signs of a great poet.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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This is well written, emotional, and provocative
The photo grabbed me straight away, shook me, led me done the page and spit me out at the end.
Your writing is engaging and tends to make me feel a certain way. All signs of a great poet.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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I'm honor you think I'm a great poet. I'm glad you are enjoying every poem I right and it keeps your attention.
