Ma's Mirror
Heredity tells44 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Tummey
A clever way of describing looking at your reflection in a mirror. I like the syllable count, and the fact you view yourself as being "refined by life", not jaded. Very positive.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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A clever way of describing looking at your reflection in a mirror. I like the syllable count, and the fact you view yourself as being "refined by life", not jaded. Very positive.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you. Reflections sometimes show us more than we expect.
Comment from dmt1967
I thought this poem was a delight to read and we all seem to change into our mothers, however hard we try not to lol. This poem is a well thought out piece. Thank you for sharing and take care.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I thought this poem was a delight to read and we all seem to change into our mothers, however hard we try not to lol. This poem is a well thought out piece. Thank you for sharing and take care.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you--delight is a lovely reaction!
Comment from Beri Bee
This poem holds a great surprise... that when some of us are lucky and wise we realize we've become our parents. It's a lovely reminder that genes are strong! I imagine it can also be a way of feeling that parent is really still with us. How wonderful! Thanks!
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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This poem holds a great surprise... that when some of us are lucky and wise we realize we've become our parents. It's a lovely reminder that genes are strong! I imagine it can also be a way of feeling that parent is really still with us. How wonderful! Thanks!
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you for reading and for your kind words.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an extremely clever Senryu that I enjoyed reading very much. I had great fun looking at which parts of your mother's face didn't change, and imagining where you are on the scale of refinement.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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This is an extremely clever Senryu that I enjoyed reading very much. I had great fun looking at which parts of your mother's face didn't change, and imagining where you are on the scale of refinement.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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I am glad you enjoyed it. St 70, I am aout 2/3 toward the elder version. I ppreciate you time, your stars and your words.
Comment from Aussie
Good luck with your mother Senryu entry. It reminded me of my father when he said, "your mother will never be gone whilst you are alive." I didn't think much about it. I do now at age 77 I am the spitting image of my mother. Thanks for sharing and especially the double photo of mum. It gave us a look at changes over the years. K xx
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Good luck with your mother Senryu entry. It reminded me of my father when he said, "your mother will never be gone whilst you are alive." I didn't think much about it. I do now at age 77 I am the spitting image of my mother. Thanks for sharing and especially the double photo of mum. It gave us a look at changes over the years. K xx
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Sounds ike we have had very similar experiences, Thanks for reading.
Comment from Goosey Gander
This poem is amazing! I love the images you included, and the "double edged sword" reference in the author's notes section. Your poem truly gives one something to think about.
-GG
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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This poem is amazing! I love the images you included, and the "double edged sword" reference in the author's notes section. Your poem truly gives one something to think about.
-GG
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you. You are very kind.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Ma's Mirror
by NANCY V. FORREST
Hello, Nancy,
Sometimes moms and daughters look the same as they grow older. I don't see it with my daughters but people always say that. What a beautiful haiku for the mother event. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Nice presentation. I would change the font color to white so it's easier to read. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Ma's Mirror
by NANCY V. FORREST
Hello, Nancy,
Sometimes moms and daughters look the same as they grow older. I don't see it with my daughters but people always say that. What a beautiful haiku for the mother event. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Nice presentation. I would change the font color to white so it's easier to read. Well done!
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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I will look at changing the color. Thanks for your advice.
Comment from Laurie Holding
I loved this one! Haiku looks like it's so easy, but anyone who's tried knows that it's tough to express an actual thought in those few syllables. Thank you for posting; your mom has such a fun glint in her eye!
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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I loved this one! Haiku looks like it's so easy, but anyone who's tried knows that it's tough to express an actual thought in those few syllables. Thank you for posting; your mom has such a fun glint in her eye!
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you. Fun--and a temper in those eyes..
Comment from Frank Malley
If you squint, the changes that age brings are diminished and the similarities between these two portraits of the same woman become noticeable. I think 'wistful' in the first line is not the best word choice, since it tends to suggest regret or a longing for something from the past. Is that likely in a young woman?
The smiles in both photos are slightly different; on second thought, the younger portrait may indeed be wistful.
"Tempered and refined" are generous words to describe what life does to us, but they might well be characteristics of the older woman. She certainly harbors a gold nugget of welcome and good will in her smile.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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If you squint, the changes that age brings are diminished and the similarities between these two portraits of the same woman become noticeable. I think 'wistful' in the first line is not the best word choice, since it tends to suggest regret or a longing for something from the past. Is that likely in a young woman?
The smiles in both photos are slightly different; on second thought, the younger portrait may indeed be wistful.
"Tempered and refined" are generous words to describe what life does to us, but they might well be characteristics of the older woman. She certainly harbors a gold nugget of welcome and good will in her smile.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Wistful was true of her---she was intellectual and an artist at a time and place when that was not considered important in girls and women. At that time of her life, she looked for acceptance when there was little to be found. SHe made peace with her reality in emerged a strong individual. Thank you for your thoughtful response.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This was excellently written. I smiled when I looked at my own mother's picture on Mother's day and saw much that reminded me of myself-then looked in the mirror at the same.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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This was excellently written. I smiled when I looked at my own mother's picture on Mother's day and saw much that reminded me of myself-then looked in the mirror at the same.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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It is an interesting experience to see what the mirror shows. Thank you for your stars and words.
