One Sun
Seasons Change8 total reviews
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written poem it has a great flow and rhyme scheme. Few things do not change And time does rearrange But I'll see you in the sun Forever we are One.nice photo to compliment your words as well. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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This is a beautifully written poem it has a great flow and rhyme scheme. Few things do not change And time does rearrange But I'll see you in the sun Forever we are One.nice photo to compliment your words as well. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Experiencing the seasons and the changes that take place can fill us with either sorrow and joy. My favourite is spring and summer and as the autumn winter period takes hold it brings with it some regret for me as it is a period of solitude and change, a fine contemplative write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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Experiencing the seasons and the changes that take place can fill us with either sorrow and joy. My favourite is spring and summer and as the autumn winter period takes hold it brings with it some regret for me as it is a period of solitude and change, a fine contemplative write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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It is interesting your favorite and least favorite. I am just the opposite; i love Fall and do not care for Spring at all.
Thank you Dolly I am glad you liked this.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Carlos' girl, your poem is beautifully written, albeit sad. I could feel your loss, and like the seasons change, so does the cycle of life...life goes on. Of special note:
I keep you deep within
(Poignant)
Also:
But I'll see you in the sun
Forever we are One
("I'll follow the sun" ~ the Beatles.
Lovely, contemplative artwork choice. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Hi Carlos' girl, your poem is beautifully written, albeit sad. I could feel your loss, and like the seasons change, so does the cycle of life...life goes on. Of special note:
I keep you deep within
(Poignant)
Also:
But I'll see you in the sun
Forever we are One
("I'll follow the sun" ~ the Beatles.
Lovely, contemplative artwork choice. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you for a honest and authentic review. Always a breath of fresh air. The Beatles reference so on point
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A very personal and authentic poem that expresses the cold sadness and aloneness you are feeling, but the post ends on an optimistic tone with the reference to seeing each other together in the sun.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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A very personal and authentic poem that expresses the cold sadness and aloneness you are feeling, but the post ends on an optimistic tone with the reference to seeing each other together in the sun.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Xoxo
Comment from leather
This has a nice rhyming pattern that is maintained throughout the poem. There is a sadness to this poem that leads to hopes of reuniting with a lost one. Good luck with this entry.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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This has a nice rhyming pattern that is maintained throughout the poem. There is a sadness to this poem that leads to hopes of reuniting with a lost one. Good luck with this entry.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your choice of words communicate to the reader how the speaker is feeling without them having to state it. The metaphor of seasons sets the mood. It is left open for the reader to project their own experience into this poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Your choice of words communicate to the reader how the speaker is feeling without them having to state it. The metaphor of seasons sets the mood. It is left open for the reader to project their own experience into this poem. Well done.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you Liz for this expressive review.
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***smile***
Comment from jessizero
I liked reading about your feelings in the different seasons, and how you hold someone in your heart. I love your last lines. Thanks for sharing this here.
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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I liked reading about your feelings in the different seasons, and how you hold someone in your heart. I love your last lines. Thanks for sharing this here.
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. Take good care.
C.G
Comment from Sarah Tummey
This is a moving piece on the loss of a loved one. I'm sorry for your heartache, but you write about it beautifully ("I feel the cold alone" was my favourite line). Well done.
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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This is a moving piece on the loss of a loved one. I'm sorry for your heartache, but you write about it beautifully ("I feel the cold alone" was my favourite line). Well done.
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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I thank you for your review. So long ago i lost someone i loved but it is fine now.
