Pipe Dreams
The allure of bubbles remains with all of us.27 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, I've had the opportunity and indeed, the privilege of seeing life through the eyes of my 5 year old grandson Dion, so that perspective veiled by time has returned, a beautifully written, rhymed in rich language, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Oh yes, I've had the opportunity and indeed, the privilege of seeing life through the eyes of my 5 year old grandson Dion, so that perspective veiled by time has returned, a beautifully written, rhymed in rich language, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Roy,
Thanks once again for taking the time to read and review my work. Hope your family is well and yes bubbles seem to generate fun and happiness wherever they are. Take Care
Barry Penfold.
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That do indeed
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem for use these words. Beautuful photo of the bubbles compliment your words well. Nicely done. Good luck on the contest.
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This is a nicely written poem for use these words. Beautuful photo of the bubbles compliment your words well. Nicely done. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Joanne,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and yes the art really just fits so well. Take Care .
Barry Penfold.
Comment from BeckyMann
I loved the juxtaposition of young and old, and you are certainly right about bubbles. I have three kids, and hardly a day goes by when we don't see some bubbles! Thank you for sharing your beautiful words.
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I loved the juxtaposition of young and old, and you are certainly right about bubbles. I have three kids, and hardly a day goes by when we don't see some bubbles! Thank you for sharing your beautiful words.
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and it certainly brings back many memories. Take care and have a lovely day.
Comment from Pantygynt
He is probably blowing smoke rings now and the purpose of his thoughts are probably much the same as the they were when he was a child. He will have leared a little wisdom and will know he cannot right all the wrongs in the world so it is better to learn to exist contentedly within it.
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He is probably blowing smoke rings now and the purpose of his thoughts are probably much the same as the they were when he was a child. He will have leared a little wisdom and will know he cannot right all the wrongs in the world so it is better to learn to exist contentedly within it.
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and you are right about not being able to right all the wrongs. Take care .
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Whitewave
Barry,
Beautiful bubbles in your picture - makes the kid in me want to chase them as they float and burst. Your words capture the high energy of children and the soft transience of bubbles - both equally beautiful. And as for the old man smoking pipe dreams, I can feel his state of peace as childhood memories rise and pass softly by, inside the bubbles.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Barry,
Beautiful bubbles in your picture - makes the kid in me want to chase them as they float and burst. Your words capture the high energy of children and the soft transience of bubbles - both equally beautiful. And as for the old man smoking pipe dreams, I can feel his state of peace as childhood memories rise and pass softly by, inside the bubbles.
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Yes the Art work did fit so well. Glad you enjoyed the piece. Take Care.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Kids do love to blow bubbles. You can wish all you want for those bubbles to last. But they burst. Then the pipe gets filled with tobacco blowing smoke making circles. Thank you for sharing this poem.
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Kids do love to blow bubbles. You can wish all you want for those bubbles to last. But they burst. Then the pipe gets filled with tobacco blowing smoke making circles. Thank you for sharing this poem.
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Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and I hope you have a great day. Perhaps blow a few bubbles.
Cheers
Barry.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Cory Young
This is well-written, containing memorable imagery, and has a nice musical flow to it. The use of parallelism to bridge the young boy in the first stanza and the old man in the second stanza is a nice touch. I don't think there's much that could be done to improve this, nicely done!
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This is well-written, containing memorable imagery, and has a nice musical flow to it. The use of parallelism to bridge the young boy in the first stanza and the old man in the second stanza is a nice touch. I don't think there's much that could be done to improve this, nicely done!
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Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Cory,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Take care and have a great day. Perhaps blow some bubbles.
Cheers
Barry
