Pipe Dreams
The allure of bubbles remains with all of us.27 total reviews
Comment from bob cullen
What an absolute delight to read this poem. It certainly deserves it's rating of ALL TIME BEST. Commencing with its first line and carrying right through to the last, it tells the story of a life well spent and it brought a smile to this old face. It also deserved every one of the six stars.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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What an absolute delight to read this poem. It certainly deserves it's rating of ALL TIME BEST. Commencing with its first line and carrying right through to the last, it tells the story of a life well spent and it brought a smile to this old face. It also deserved every one of the six stars.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Bob,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. And wow six stars. You must have liked it . Glad it brought a smile to your face. Please take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Pipe Dreams, creates a thoughtful scene where the lazy day and blowing of bubbles can be the bookend of a life which began with few responsibilities and simply a state of happiness.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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This poem, Pipe Dreams, creates a thoughtful scene where the lazy day and blowing of bubbles can be the bookend of a life which began with few responsibilities and simply a state of happiness.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Bill,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. I still enjoy blowing bubbles. Take care and have a great day.
Barry Penfold
Comment from Mariana Convery
This is so sad. I like how you turned the metaphor, pipe dream, into something literal and visual while at the same time it represents blowing the bubbles. Great play on words. Time is a beast. At least he's got his pipe.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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This is so sad. I like how you turned the metaphor, pipe dream, into something literal and visual while at the same time it represents blowing the bubbles. Great play on words. Time is a beast. At least he's got his pipe.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Mariana,
Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes there was a time when smoking pipes was a common thing amongst men. Not much now but still plesant if you like that sort of thing. Take Care and have a great day.
Barry Penfold
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Pipe Dreams', is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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'Pipe Dreams', is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Well thank you my royal duchess. I am glad you enjoyed my poem and reviewed it as well. I note you live in the Tumut area. Something wild and beautiful about that area. Take Care and have a great day.
Barry
Barry, thank you for your very kind review.
Bless you and have a great day,
the Duchess
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces moments of childish exuberance exhibited and contemplated upon.
The work highlights a small child blowing a pipe and filling the air with colourful bubbles, which are happily burst by his play mates, while an old man recapitulates his childhood days, when he ventured into bubble production and bursting.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of rhymes, simile, alliteration and assonance.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces moments of childish exuberance exhibited and contemplated upon.
The work highlights a small child blowing a pipe and filling the air with colourful bubbles, which are happily burst by his play mates, while an old man recapitulates his childhood days, when he ventured into bubble production and bursting.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of rhymes, simile, alliteration and assonance.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read my poem. Glad you enjoyed and rating it six stars. Wow. Please take care and have a good day.
Cheers
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I very much enjoyed the counterpoint perspectives and the transition from bubbles to smoke, from thoughtless joy to considered reminiscence. Lovely flow that helps promote the positive theme. Excellent read.
Mike
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I very much enjoyed the counterpoint perspectives and the transition from bubbles to smoke, from thoughtless joy to considered reminiscence. Lovely flow that helps promote the positive theme. Excellent read.
Mike
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Mike,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and I know in my own life I have had many chnces toenjoy the bubbles. Take care and have a good day.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the sentiment Barry, fine rhymes and most of your poem is in metre, just one or two lines fall short. Overall this is a fine presentation, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I love the sentiment Barry, fine rhymes and most of your poem is in metre, just one or two lines fall short. Overall this is a fine presentation, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Dolly,
Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. I must admit to having many experiences ( all good ) with bubbles. Take care and have a good day.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from karenina
This is a wonderful poem. The young lad and the old are both lovingly depicted. I think the young and the old are alive and well inside of me ~these golden years have never dampened my inner child! Great image to accompany your well rhymed verse!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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This is a wonderful poem. The young lad and the old are both lovingly depicted. I think the young and the old are alive and well inside of me ~these golden years have never dampened my inner child! Great image to accompany your well rhymed verse!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Yes, like you, my inner child is alive and well. The imagery was just right. How lucky I was. Take care and have a good day.
Cheers
Barry
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Let's give a nod to your talent, shall we!
Smile....
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Thanks
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
True statement in your notes!
I think we all can remember warm summer days in the yard, park or beach dancing around blowing bubbles. I certainly remember watching my kids. Such a simple thing to do, but it brought so much joy.
This poem has a lasting message and brought back found memories, thank you!
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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True statement in your notes!
I think we all can remember warm summer days in the yard, park or beach dancing around blowing bubbles. I certainly remember watching my kids. Such a simple thing to do, but it brought so much joy.
This poem has a lasting message and brought back found memories, thank you!
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Yes, I have certainly had many meetings with bubbles- all of them good. Perhaps we should promote them as the international symbol of happiness.
Take Care
Barry
Comment from LisaMay
'Pipe Dreams' is an excellent title for your reflective poem... the old man smoking his pipe while nostalgically reliving boyhood times of bubble-blowing, realising he is now in another stage of being 'unburdened by life's troubles'. Our bubbles may pop, but it is fun making them.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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'Pipe Dreams' is an excellent title for your reflective poem... the old man smoking his pipe while nostalgically reliving boyhood times of bubble-blowing, realising he is now in another stage of being 'unburdened by life's troubles'. Our bubbles may pop, but it is fun making them.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Lisa, how right you are. Lots of fun making them and lots of fun breaking them. Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. All the best.
Barry
