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Quiet Lawyer

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Can a broken heart be mended?

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Comment from Begin Again
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Ahh! Love! My wandered a bit with this one and how Mike and I use to be...he was so special and treated me much in this way. I'd had a rocky marriage before and he was beyond patient. I loved this!

Smiles and hugs, Carol

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
    Cord is very patient. Maybe a little too much. LOL
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Editing comes easy after you re-read the story you have written. I have also done that with my novels. You mentioned this novel is finished...I have to catch up with reading some of the chapters.

 Comment Written 25-May-2022


reply by the author on 26-May-2022
    My novel is completed, but not all on FS, yet. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Captivating storyline.

When a man calls a woman stupid he had better be real quick to apologize sincerely.

Strong characterizations make chapter all the more interesting.

 Comment Written 11-May-2022


reply by the author on 12-May-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jumbo J
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Hi Barbara,
I haven't long being back here at Fanstory, so unfortunately haven't had much of a chance to read too much content.

I am happy I passed by and read this chapter of this story.

I found it a very easy read and had a great flow and storyline that held me captive and wanting to read on... so that's a great sign to the quality of the story and how it is written.

I'll look forward to revisiting this story as it unfolds Barbara... well done.

With our thoughts we create...
captivation within a scene.

Kind regards,
James.

 Comment Written 11-May-2022


reply by the author on 12-May-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Jumbo J on 12-May-2022
    My pleasure Barbara.
    I will be back reading your work.
Comment from lancellot
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The story is written true to your formula and is very well edited. You will not get a 'hit' from me. These are your characters, who exist as you want them, in the world you create for them.

Good luck in your endeavors

 Comment Written 11-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    Thank you for understanding. Some people actually like it.
Comment from robyn corum
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Barb,

I like these characters and think you're doing a really good job. I love these wholesome, good folks and appreciate writers who still offer them to us.

I was reading a book not long ago and was thinking to myself that I didn't care too much for the MC - she was fine, but she was strong-willed and in charge and the man seemed to let her run everything. Bleh. And it wasn't until THAT MOMENT that I realized why I write Westerns or why all my novels end up heading out West. hahaha I like men who are MEN. Who are the ones the women lean on. I like strong women, sure, absolutely. But I also adore strong men! What in the world is wrong with a strong man?!!!! The world has gone nuts!

Thanks for still writing the kind of book a girl likes to read! YAY!

 Comment Written 11-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    Thank you for the encouragement. Yes, Cord is strong and he has his faults, but he is also a gentleman when he needs to be.
Comment from amahra
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A fine chapter, Barbara. You always manage to make your leading man quite a gentleman. First, Gab in the former story, now Cordero. Sometimes a little too good to be true, but I like them just the same.

 Comment Written 11-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    They are our dream men. None actually exist, but they do have faults, both Gabe and Cord have faults. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Nice progression.
I realize that there had to be conflict, and that Cord had to do something, but the outburst seemed way out of character. But I understand - he had to do 'something' out of character.
Question. When you edit, do you edit in FanStory 'and' your manuscript at the same time? Copy and paste, or what?
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 11-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    I edit in my manuscript. On the day I'm posting, I reread, and end up editing there too. For my final edit, I'll copy and past from FS.
reply by Wayne Fowler on 11-May-2022
    Thanks.
Comment from Ben Colder
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I just now have gained a little GO YE IN ME . So i have tried getting into your story. I noticed where you made the understanding about Alpine. Never know about theses bankers. LOL.

 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    Oh so true. LOL Thank you for the kind review. You remain in my prayers.
Comment from JoannaN
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I like the fact that the scene with the snake is fast paced. The dialogues are short in this part, appropriately for such a situation. I would develop Cordero/Jorge scene a bit.

 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 10-May-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.