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memories of my Mother

for mother day

4 total reviews 
Comment from tempeste
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Ciao poet! you now have 3 votes!

The part I like best is how you explain your mamma got to California.. You say in your notes that she was a one of a kind unique personality ..

I got a feeling that the apple didn't fall far from the tree in your case..you got your a vivid imagination from your mamma... that's what I like about your writing, you take the reader to some real strange,dark, unsettling places ...I find it very entertaining.

Ciao!

My mamma died in dec 2006 but she was just 71 then. She had me very late also.

 Comment Written 09-May-2022


reply by the author on 09-May-2022
    thanks as always
Comment from LisaMay
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Your mother's individuality certainly comes across well in your poem. That's an interesting explanation of the planetary nut reconfiguration program! Figuring out the right thing is open to interpretation.

Correction:
downhill To California (cap T unnecessary)
She often told us to do the right thing.¢?¯ (remove the distracting ¢?¯)

 Comment Written 08-May-2022


reply by the author on 09-May-2022
    thanks damn glitches
Comment from Haylee Hemphill
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Hello!

Your mother sounds like she was a lovely soul. This is a beautiful way of honoring her. I would suggest editing to take away the error. First line of the last stanza! Great job and thank you for sharing!

One Love
Haylee

 Comment Written 06-May-2022


reply by the author on 06-May-2022
    thanks for catching the error
reply by Haylee Hemphill on 06-May-2022
    You're welcome!
Comment from Peter Gracie
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Love it!! Terse. Unsentimental. Funny. Poignant. I thought of Hemingway for some reason. Maybe it's because not a single word was wasted. At least in my mind.

 Comment Written 06-May-2022


reply by the author on 06-May-2022
    thanks glad you appreciated it