Through Silver Birches
Cinquain Tanka6 total reviews
Comment from AP Apgar
I like like this poem- the presentation is beautiful- and the poem tells its story perfectly- moving down the path of life ever quickly - trees naturally create obstacles causing us to loose direction- canusing us to slow- if we stop momentarily and listen to the birches- and look between them - we will see the trail once more - slow down- live in the moment- and our path will become visible in the stillness. Zen. Good job
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I like like this poem- the presentation is beautiful- and the poem tells its story perfectly- moving down the path of life ever quickly - trees naturally create obstacles causing us to loose direction- canusing us to slow- if we stop momentarily and listen to the birches- and look between them - we will see the trail once more - slow down- live in the moment- and our path will become visible in the stillness. Zen. Good job
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you so much for your insightful feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed the read :) Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Ja Majal
The flow was absolutely beautiful, the soul of a poet!!
To make syllables sound like everyday speech. Fantastic!
The picture fits nicely as well! Thank you!
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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The flow was absolutely beautiful, the soul of a poet!!
To make syllables sound like everyday speech. Fantastic!
The picture fits nicely as well! Thank you!
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Hello :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate both very much! Best wishes... :)
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Sounds and looks like a runners' paradise. Perfect satisfaction on the line sand syllable count. I would want to slow down too, if I were there. Very nice.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Sounds and looks like a runners' paradise. Perfect satisfaction on the line sand syllable count. I would want to slow down too, if I were there. Very nice.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Gary, for your lovely feedback. I agree, that path really does invite you to lace up your trainers and go for a steady jog!
Best wishes :)
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You are welcome. If only I could still run. lol
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the cinquain tanka contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. The presentation is nice. The poem's flow is well done.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Excellent entry for the cinquain tanka contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. The presentation is nice. The poem's flow is well done.
Gypsy
Comment Written 06-May-2022
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind feedback,
Best wishes... :)
Comment from R. Marc Goodson
Very well-written poem, almost a Haiku. The message of 'being here/now' rather than living in abstractions is evident. The last line captures it all...clearly you have a future in poetry.
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Very well-written poem, almost a Haiku. The message of 'being here/now' rather than living in abstractions is evident. The last line captures it all...clearly you have a future in poetry.
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Thank you for your kind feedback :)
Best wishes...
Comment from Anne Johnston
Well done on this Tanka. Silver birches are so beautiful and I like the picture you have chosen. I like the message they are sending, to slow down and enjoy the moment.
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Well done on this Tanka. Silver birches are so beautiful and I like the picture you have chosen. I like the message they are sending, to slow down and enjoy the moment.
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Thank you, Anne, for your kind feedback. Best wishes... :)
