My Tiny Visitor
A First and Last Poem for Potlatch Poetry31 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
I think there really are connections among all of God's creations, miracles that we seldom notice, but they are there, nonetheless. And Yvonne, I think your poem describes one...
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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I think there really are connections among all of God's creations, miracles that we seldom notice, but they are there, nonetheless. And Yvonne, I think your poem describes one...
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you, Dawn. It was a very special experience. I hate to shut the door and leave him that night. Maybe I should have made him a house pet. hahaha
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Hahaha -- um, no to the house pet idea. Methinks at least one cat would have a new 'toy'... HAHAHA!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely first and last poem Yvonne and what a delight for such a tiny creature to sit and spend some time with you. I
find that amazing. Loved this one, cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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A lovely first and last poem Yvonne and what a delight for such a tiny creature to sit and spend some time with you. I
find that amazing. Loved this one, cheers
Valda
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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It was amazing! I felt so good having him on my hand. I hated to leave him. Thanks, Valda. I hope you are doing well.
Comment from judiverse
I'm sure the praying mantis meant well, but I wonder at your patience in holding it in your hand for an hour. Did you ever discover what message he wanted to deliver? This is delightful. I like the repeating line. You gave such a great description of the little critter with his shiny eyes. Excellent rhyme, too. judi
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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I'm sure the praying mantis meant well, but I wonder at your patience in holding it in your hand for an hour. Did you ever discover what message he wanted to deliver? This is delightful. I like the repeating line. You gave such a great description of the little critter with his shiny eyes. Excellent rhyme, too. judi
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Thank you. I hated to leave him, but it was getting late. They are very friendly little creatures. I don't what his message was, but I felt good after his visit.
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You're welcome. Maybe that was the idea--just to make you feel good. judi
Comment from Beri Bee
This is a beautiful poem woven with meaning, by my way of thinking. Thank you! Nothing needs changing, of course. (The last line, "Say way" could work as "same way" too, but either way, still beautiful!)
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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This is a beautiful poem woven with meaning, by my way of thinking. Thank you! Nothing needs changing, of course. (The last line, "Say way" could work as "same way" too, but either way, still beautiful!)
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Thanks for catching that. I've changed it. I'm glad you liked it.
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It's so beautiful! The picture is too!
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Thanks.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem--in part, ekphrastic, since the artwork identifies the visitor--
is excellent in every respect. It is vividly descriptive and even heartwarming, since the little praying mantis seems to have a personality.
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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This poem--in part, ekphrastic, since the artwork identifies the visitor--
is excellent in every respect. It is vividly descriptive and even heartwarming, since the little praying mantis seems to have a personality.
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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He certainly did. I hated to leave him. Thanks, Janice.
Comment from BethShelby
These are amazing little creatures but for some reason, I don't enjoy holding insects. I can't imagine having one sit on my hand so long, but I did love your poem about the experience. When I was four, I saw one standing in a bush and I insisted my mom come outside and see the little man. Mom asked before coming out what the little man was doing and I told her he was just standing there rubbing his hands. LOL
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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These are amazing little creatures but for some reason, I don't enjoy holding insects. I can't imagine having one sit on my hand so long, but I did love your poem about the experience. When I was four, I saw one standing in a bush and I insisted my mom come outside and see the little man. Mom asked before coming out what the little man was doing and I told her he was just standing there rubbing his hands. LOL
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Awww, how cute. Yes, they do seem to rub their hands a lot. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Pantygynt
What a lovely little piece. You are amazing, adopting any living creature that comes within sight. It doesn't matter if it is a cute and cuddly creature or ... a preying mantis. Are you sure you are not descended from St Francis of Assisi?
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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What a lovely little piece. You are amazing, adopting any living creature that comes within sight. It doesn't matter if it is a cute and cuddly creature or ... a preying mantis. Are you sure you are not descended from St Francis of Assisi?
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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What a lovely thing to say! I have a statue of him in my garden. A loved one that just died, and I felt this was sort of a sign, especially since I couldn't get him off my hand. He refused to any bush I offered. I hated to leave him, and it's true he was still looking through the glass door when I went to bed.
Comment from Wendy G
I think that is a beautiful connection with nature. You must be a gentle quiet person and he felt no fear. A lovely description of his eyes looking at you. So beautifully written - very enjoyable read.
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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I think that is a beautiful connection with nature. You must be a gentle quiet person and he felt no fear. A lovely description of his eyes looking at you. So beautifully written - very enjoyable read.
Wendy
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Thank you. It was a wonderful experience.
Comment from LateBloomer
Yvonne, damommy, this poem is charming and heartfelt. Your lines and verses quickly pull the reader into the poem and keeps their attention until the very last line. I especially liked:
It seemed to me he'd things to say,
and so I gave my hand that day.
(Perhaps, your tiny visitor was Mr. Right?)
Question, did you mean look or "looked" ...
his shiny eyes look right at me,
Silky rhyming. Well chosen photo. A pleasure to read. This poem made me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Yvonne, damommy, this poem is charming and heartfelt. Your lines and verses quickly pull the reader into the poem and keeps their attention until the very last line. I especially liked:
It seemed to me he'd things to say,
and so I gave my hand that day.
(Perhaps, your tiny visitor was Mr. Right?)
Question, did you mean look or "looked" ...
his shiny eyes look right at me,
Silky rhyming. Well chosen photo. A pleasure to read. This poem made me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I'll changed that to looked. Thanks for catching that. It's all true.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I love this poem!
It's playful, light with a touch of whimsy. Compared to a lot of heavy topics I've read lately on this site, this is a welcomed treat.
How lucky you were to experience this. I'm curious... what did it feel like? Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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I love this poem!
It's playful, light with a touch of whimsy. Compared to a lot of heavy topics I've read lately on this site, this is a welcomed treat.
How lucky you were to experience this. I'm curious... what did it feel like? Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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It was wonderful. I hated to leave him, but he refused to get off my hand. I hope to see him again. Thanks for reviewing.
