Under this tiled roof
senryu20 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Yes, it's amazing how one can remember a childhood home, I visited mine in England after an absence of 43 years, and still remembered how nurturing that place was. Beautifully written Sanku, blessings Roy
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Yes, it's amazing how one can remember a childhood home, I visited mine in England after an absence of 43 years, and still remembered how nurturing that place was. Beautifully written Sanku, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-May-2022
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Thank you very much. God bless.
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Most welcome
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is well written and well presented. I'm curious as to the sentiment expressed. Is it a personal one or fictional? I felt an emotional tone when I read it. The photo engaged me straight away. Well done.
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This is well written and well presented. I'm curious as to the sentiment expressed. Is it a personal one or fictional? I felt an emotional tone when I read it. The photo engaged me straight away. Well done.
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Comment Written 02-May-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from country ranch writer
A house is a home where love, happiness sadness and new life is born and shard with one and all. If only a house could talk, the stories we'd share amongst our selves.
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A house is a home where love, happiness sadness and new life is born and shard with one and all. If only a house could talk, the stories we'd share amongst our selves.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
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welcome🥕🐇👀🥕🐇
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your 5-7-5 (was this for a contest?). There is something about a family house that keeps our childhood memories. The most important thing is to "value life" as the last line shares.
I know that punctuation is frowned on in haiku/senryu but wondered if it would help the reader if written: I laughed, shed tears, and blossomed~
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Enjoyed your 5-7-5 (was this for a contest?). There is something about a family house that keeps our childhood memories. The most important thing is to "value life" as the last line shares.
I know that punctuation is frowned on in haiku/senryu but wondered if it would help the reader if written: I laughed, shed tears, and blossomed~
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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I know .I hated to take off the commas ,but they are frowned upon in haikus.
No it was a club entry. Thank you very much for stopping by.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Those are really lovely words that would please any mother reading them from their child. We are what we taught, and how we are loved. I thought you encapsulated your growing years perfectly in these three lines. Well done, Sanku. :)) Sandra xx
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Those are really lovely words that would please any mother reading them from their child. We are what we taught, and how we are loved. I thought you encapsulated your growing years perfectly in these three lines. Well done, Sanku. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Hi sanku!
You selected a good combination of verse and photo for this Senryu type poem. I too have used your FanArtist for my posts.
Do you want to include a comma after laughed and tears? and add a period at the end?. - either or both do not alter the depth of your meaning.
Mark
IMHO ... a larger font size will enhance your presentation value for other FS reviewers.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Hi sanku!
You selected a good combination of verse and photo for this Senryu type poem. I too have used your FanArtist for my posts.
Do you want to include a comma after laughed and tears? and add a period at the end?. - either or both do not alter the depth of your meaning.
Mark
IMHO ... a larger font size will enhance your presentation value for other FS reviewers.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Sally Law
Good afternoon, Sanku! Beautifully penned poem of your life and experience. So much was said in short verse.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
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Good afternoon, Sanku! Beautifully penned poem of your life and experience. So much was said in short verse.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
Comment Written 02-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces the making of the protagonist in a house made of tiled roof.
The work highlights the tiled roof features of the home; the ambivalence of mood swings of the protagonist and his or her appraisal of life.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of humanistic anecdotes typical of a Senryu.
Excellent work. Keep the flag flying.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces the making of the protagonist in a house made of tiled roof.
The work highlights the tiled roof features of the home; the ambivalence of mood swings of the protagonist and his or her appraisal of life.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of humanistic anecdotes typical of a Senryu.
Excellent work. Keep the flag flying.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you once again for this honour .I am sorry I am late in replying.
was bogged down by one of those life's never ending problems.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from karenina
Hello there, friend... It's been a while, but then I've been on and off for a bit! This is quietly moving. How well I recall all the lessons learned beneath my own family's roof. We bloom where we're planted! So nice to read from you this morning.
Karenina
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Hello there, friend... It's been a while, but then I've been on and off for a bit! This is quietly moving. How well I recall all the lessons learned beneath my own family's roof. We bloom where we're planted! So nice to read from you this morning.
Karenina
Comment Written 02-May-2022
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Thank you very much for theses encouraging words.
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Loved this! You're welcome!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this short poem with us. I have often wondered what an old house, barn, or old tree would have to say if they could talk. I know they would have wonderful and not so wonderful stories to tell. I enjoyed reading.
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reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you for sharing this short poem with us. I have often wondered what an old house, barn, or old tree would have to say if they could talk. I know they would have wonderful and not so wonderful stories to tell. I enjoyed reading.
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Comment Written 02-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
