Under this tiled roof
senryu20 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your mere seventeen syllables to pay tribute to a dwelling that was more than just a place to live. It's where you became--you!
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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You have made excellent use of your mere seventeen syllables to pay tribute to a dwelling that was more than just a place to live. It's where you became--you!
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
It is not so easy to forget one's parental home where one learns how to laugh, shed tears and blossomed, the art and passion in values for life, may it now appear gloomy or unfit but home is home, the heaven; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
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It is not so easy to forget one's parental home where one learns how to laugh, shed tears and blossomed, the art and passion in values for life, may it now appear gloomy or unfit but home is home, the heaven; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from Bridge
A beautiful poem. Very profound but expressed very well and very simply. I loved your poem. Thanks for sharing. All the best to you ...
With regards
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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A beautiful poem. Very profound but expressed very well and very simply. I loved your poem. Thanks for sharing. All the best to you ...
With regards
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your few words here describes a place where you grew up and learned to appreciate life and all its pleasures, the ups and downs of life and how we cope are experienced as children and prepare us for adulthood, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Your few words here describes a place where you grew up and learned to appreciate life and all its pleasures, the ups and downs of life and how we cope are experienced as children and prepare us for adulthood, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from KJ
Sweet poem. Just a suggestion - feel free to ignore - it could be interesting to put a comma after "laughed" in the second line and see how that also reads as a variation. Good job!
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Sweet poem. Just a suggestion - feel free to ignore - it could be interesting to put a comma after "laughed" in the second line and see how that also reads as a variation. Good job!
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Thank you very much for the suggestion.But Haikus are not supposed to have punctuations. I hated it too without the commas.
Comment from June Sargent
There must be rain in order for the garden to grow. In life, there are often tears that ultimately will help us grow. This senryu captures the process of our either caving in or flourishing under pressure. You obviously grew. Lovely, insightful piece.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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There must be rain in order for the garden to grow. In life, there are often tears that ultimately will help us grow. This senryu captures the process of our either caving in or flourishing under pressure. You obviously grew. Lovely, insightful piece.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is in great form, Sanku.
Your words are filled with imagery and
truth. The art choice worked well, too.
The dark background and dark font
clash with each other making it a bit
hard to read. I would lighten one or
the other.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Your contest entry is in great form, Sanku.
Your words are filled with imagery and
truth. The art choice worked well, too.
The dark background and dark font
clash with each other making it a bit
hard to read. I would lighten one or
the other.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much for te encouraging comments
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation, Sanku.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery shows the importance of
this house to you.
-I like the detail in line two.
-A positive message in the last line.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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-Very nice image and presentation, Sanku.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery shows the importance of
this house to you.
-I like the detail in line two.
-A positive message in the last line.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much .
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You are welcome.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
It is amazing what emotions a family dwelling holds. There has been happiness inside, but also mourning and grief. There has been love and betrayal and forgiveness. Life is lived within home walls! Good job on the Sanku!
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It is amazing what emotions a family dwelling holds. There has been happiness inside, but also mourning and grief. There has been love and betrayal and forgiveness. Life is lived within home walls! Good job on the Sanku!
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Haylee Hemphill
Hello!
I absolutely love the art of Senryu. You executed this poem very well. Thanks for sharing!
One Love
Haylee.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Hello!
I absolutely love the art of Senryu. You executed this poem very well. Thanks for sharing!
One Love
Haylee.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much.
