Gift of Peace
First and Last Potlatch Club post26 total reviews
Comment from Marienkiefer
A valiant poem, with a strong voice calling for truth, rationale to save youth, favouring peace over destruction. A call to lay down arms in the name of peace.
Wonderful poem in the times we live in, in support of those encountering hardship.
Very encouraging poem.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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A valiant poem, with a strong voice calling for truth, rationale to save youth, favouring peace over destruction. A call to lay down arms in the name of peace.
Wonderful poem in the times we live in, in support of those encountering hardship.
Very encouraging poem.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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I appreciate your time and comments. Thanks, Marie.
Joan
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
If this could only be true, wouldn't life be wonderful? I would want to live forever!! This is such a lovely poem, Joan, I really enjoyed it, I could visulise life like that. Who wouldn't want to live like that? Only those who like power and control. Well done, my friend. Fabulous poem. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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If this could only be true, wouldn't life be wonderful? I would want to live forever!! This is such a lovely poem, Joan, I really enjoyed it, I could visulise life like that. Who wouldn't want to live like that? Only those who like power and control. Well done, my friend. Fabulous poem. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Sandra, Always good to hear from you. Thanks for the nice comments and high rating.
Joan
Comment from Charity Stewart
A world of peace is what we really need. This world needs cleaning and a change. It definitely feels like the end times. Your meters and rhymes flows well. I love the story that this poem tells. Keep writing.
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A world of peace is what we really need. This world needs cleaning and a change. It definitely feels like the end times. Your meters and rhymes flows well. I love the story that this poem tells. Keep writing.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thanks for nice comments and high rating. I agree with you.
Joan
Comment from Terry Broxson
This looks like fine work that you did for the club, I hope they like it as much as I did. The club will probably focus on form, while I focused on the message. Outstanding message! Good luck with form. Terry.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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This looks like fine work that you did for the club, I hope they like it as much as I did. The club will probably focus on form, while I focused on the message. Outstanding message! Good luck with form. Terry.
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thanks, Terry, for your kind words. I am glad you liked it so much.
Joan
Comment from June Sargent
A world where there are no borders and where there is acceptance world most definitely be a world with peace. If only we could remove weapons of destruction. But first, we must remove hate. What a wonderful world that would be...
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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A world where there are no borders and where there is acceptance world most definitely be a world with peace. If only we could remove weapons of destruction. But first, we must remove hate. What a wonderful world that would be...
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you very much, June.
Joan
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another optimistic poem filled with wishes and hopes for a better world. it is important for poets and other creative types to remain optimistic and not give into the darkness all around us. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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another optimistic poem filled with wishes and hopes for a better world. it is important for poets and other creative types to remain optimistic and not give into the darkness all around us. Well done.
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thanks, Jake, for your encouraging words and high rating. Both are much appreciated.
Joan
Comment from Goosey Gander
I love your poem, and I must state how much I love the rhyme scheme you used for this particular poem. Congrats! I also especially enjoyed the repeating line, "This could be the gift of world peace." Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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I love your poem, and I must state how much I love the rhyme scheme you used for this particular poem. Congrats! I also especially enjoyed the repeating line, "This could be the gift of world peace." Thank you for sharing!
-GG
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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I am glad you liked my choice of repeating line for this poem. Thanks for the kind comments and for all the stars.
Joan
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I don't even want to count the lines and syllables taking for granted you met the marching orders. Well done. As for a singular world... how could that work when families cannot find peace within their walls?
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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I don't even want to count the lines and syllables taking for granted you met the marching orders. Well done. As for a singular world... how could that work when families cannot find peace within their walls?
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Tom,
It is sad that some families can't get along. Maybe if we fix families first, we could fix countries, and thene the world.
Thanks for the nice review.
Joan
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Comment from Boogienights
A beautiful idea that I don't see happening too soon. I wish it would but history proves that we can't live in peace, at least for now. Maybe in the future. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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A beautiful idea that I don't see happening too soon. I wish it would but history proves that we can't live in peace, at least for now. Maybe in the future. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Thank you and you?re welcome.
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Comment from karenina
Your poem is well written, follows form, utilizes a powerful first/last repeating line, has rhymes that are unforced and fold well into the theme-
Moreover, the theme weighs heavily on my mind and heart-- as I watch day after day all the horrors in Ukraine and I wonder why, why, and why we humans can't find a way to move past killing one another for land and borders and power.
I guess I'll always be a child of the sixties. I do wish we'd all give peace a chance!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Your poem is well written, follows form, utilizes a powerful first/last repeating line, has rhymes that are unforced and fold well into the theme-
Moreover, the theme weighs heavily on my mind and heart-- as I watch day after day all the horrors in Ukraine and I wonder why, why, and why we humans can't find a way to move past killing one another for land and borders and power.
I guess I'll always be a child of the sixties. I do wish we'd all give peace a chance!
Karenina
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Thanks for the review, Karenina.
I totally agree with you. I am a child of the 60s too.
Joan
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Yay for us! We had the right idea!
