Age Has Its Advantages
Inner-Sanctum Saturday Nights36 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a great contest entry, Ann. I loved the rigid rules your sister had and how you so graciously obeyed them. Thanks for sharing. I wish you much success with the contest.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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This is a great contest entry, Ann. I loved the rigid rules your sister had and how you so graciously obeyed them. Thanks for sharing. I wish you much success with the contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thanks for the good luck wishes. I will need every one of them-- competition is stiff! ann
Comment from Fleedleflump
I very much enjoyed reading your tale of childhood. Even in the strictest of environments, I think there's always a little fun to be found. This was well written without any notes needed.
Mike
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I very much enjoyed reading your tale of childhood. Even in the strictest of environments, I think there's always a little fun to be found. This was well written without any notes needed.
Mike
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review and your time in offering it. ann
Comment from dmt1967
This story made me giggle as I pictured you and your sister listening to a programme on the radio. I take it it was a horror series. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. Take care.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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This story made me giggle as I pictured you and your sister listening to a programme on the radio. I take it it was a horror series. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. Take care.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I will need that good luck!! The competition is always stiff in these contests. Thanks ann
Comment from Wendy G
I am not familiar with that radio program, but I assume it was one you couldn't stand or were frightened of. American readers will be more "in-tune" with your story. And yes, being so much older she had the "authority" to keep you in line - quiet and still. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I am not familiar with that radio program, but I assume it was one you couldn't stand or were frightened of. American readers will be more "in-tune" with your story. And yes, being so much older she had the "authority" to keep you in line - quiet and still. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Intersanctum was something like the Twilight Zone. It began with a squeaking door and got more frightening from there!! Funny thing: I only remember that door. Thanks for your time and review. ann
Comment from royowen
I think that would have happened to a lot of siblings I was the eldest son so my siblings had had to tow the line. Although I wasn't really like, although the second brother would torture his younger siblings, and threatened to put their arms through those old fashioned wringers years ago. Well done, great post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I think that would have happened to a lot of siblings I was the eldest son so my siblings had had to tow the line. Although I wasn't really like, although the second brother would torture his younger siblings, and threatened to put their arms through those old fashioned wringers years ago. Well done, great post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Funny! I am assuming a wringer washing machine? I remember those from my childhood and that could be scary. lol. Thanks so much for reading and commenting. ann
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No, a wringer turned by hand attached to the laundry sink. Bless you
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Annmuma I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction with us. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that I think you executed well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Hello Annmuma I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction with us. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that I think you executed well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thanks so much for review, your time and your kind words. ann
Comment from Stuart V. Witt
Being mortals, we are, each one of us, severely limited in what we can do or accomplish. This story brings to life, for the reader, the relationship between this writer and her older sister. The older sister has certain advantages. That is just the way it is. The younger sister must just try to strike the best bargain she can. And we, the readers, get to witness a precious relationship between the two sisters.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Being mortals, we are, each one of us, severely limited in what we can do or accomplish. This story brings to life, for the reader, the relationship between this writer and her older sister. The older sister has certain advantages. That is just the way it is. The younger sister must just try to strike the best bargain she can. And we, the readers, get to witness a precious relationship between the two sisters.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thanks so much!!!! 6 stars to begin my day -- makes my day. I appreciate your time, you kind words and most encouraging review. ann
Comment from J. P. Olesen
Hi, AnnaMuma,
Cute story! I think most people can recall something from television or radio that gave them chills. The TV show, "The Outer Limits," used have me making for a hallway. So did the half hour episodes of "Alfred Hitchcock Presents."
I'm not sure, but shouldn't the opening exchange between you and your sister go something like--
Sister: "Lay still."
You: "I'm still."
Sister: "You moved."
You: "No, I didn't."
Sister: "Please."
You: "I'll be still."
At least, that's how I read the conversation. Your Call.
Also, I might (might, mind you) rewrite the first line after, "I'll be still." to read: A fairly accurate account of the kind of conversation that occurred between my sister and I on many Saturday nights in the 1950s.
But again, your call. You know best what you're trying to do.
Good luck in the True Story Flash Contest!
All the best,
J. P.
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Hi, AnnaMuma,
Cute story! I think most people can recall something from television or radio that gave them chills. The TV show, "The Outer Limits," used have me making for a hallway. So did the half hour episodes of "Alfred Hitchcock Presents."
I'm not sure, but shouldn't the opening exchange between you and your sister go something like--
Sister: "Lay still."
You: "I'm still."
Sister: "You moved."
You: "No, I didn't."
Sister: "Please."
You: "I'll be still."
At least, that's how I read the conversation. Your Call.
Also, I might (might, mind you) rewrite the first line after, "I'll be still." to read: A fairly accurate account of the kind of conversation that occurred between my sister and I on many Saturday nights in the 1950s.
But again, your call. You know best what you're trying to do.
Good luck in the True Story Flash Contest!
All the best,
J. P.
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Thank so much for your suggestions and ideas. Hearing from readers is the only way to improve one's work. I appreciate your time and your suggestions. ann.
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You?re wecome!
Comment from Judy Lawless
I can just imagine your pain of having to lie so still for that long, especially at such a young age. I guess age did rule in that case. Fun story. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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I can just imagine your pain of having to lie so still for that long, especially at such a young age. I guess age did rule in that case. Fun story. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Thanks for your review and your time. ann
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You?re most welcome, Ann.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The similar type of stories happened with many others in a middle class family had three four brothers and sisters born between 1950 - 1960, elders ever take advantages of age, fulfilling their desires, enjoying their likes and younger ever lose or become victims; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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The similar type of stories happened with many others in a middle class family had three four brothers and sisters born between 1950 - 1960, elders ever take advantages of age, fulfilling their desires, enjoying their likes and younger ever lose or become victims; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Thanks for your time and your encouraging words. ann
